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七(2025·苏州吴江区期末改编)书面表达。(8分)
近期，同学们都在积极参与全市“寻找最会……的孩子”的活动。多位选手在活动中脱颖而出，学校公众号将对他们进行报道。第一期将推出三位选手，如果你是编辑，你会如何介绍他们呢？提示：1. 准确介绍每个孩子的爱好、梦想及其原因、努力方向等，可适当增加细节；2. 语句通顺，标点准确，书写工整、规范；3. 不少于40词(不包括已给内容)。
Hello, everyone. This is Lily. She likes ___. She often ___ in the library. She wants to be a ___ in the future because she likes ___(填名人英文名). To make her dream come true, she will ___.
This is ___
This is ___
近期，同学们都在积极参与全市“寻找最会……的孩子”的活动。多位选手在活动中脱颖而出，学校公众号将对他们进行报道。第一期将推出三位选手，如果你是编辑，你会如何介绍他们呢？提示：1. 准确介绍每个孩子的爱好、梦想及其原因、努力方向等，可适当增加细节；2. 语句通顺，标点准确，书写工整、规范；3. 不少于40词(不包括已给内容)。
Hello, everyone. This is Lily. She likes ___. She often ___ in the library. She wants to be a ___ in the future because she likes ___(填名人英文名). To make her dream come true, she will ___.
This is ___
This is ___
答案
示例:
Hello, everyone. This is Lily. She likes
reading books. She often spends her weekends in
the library. She wants to be a writer in the future
because she likes Mark Twain. To make her dream
come true, she will practise writing stories every
day and learn from different books.
This is Sun Wen. She loves helping others and
studying science. Her dream is to become a doctor
like Zhong Nanshan, because she wants to save
lives and help people keep healthy. She plans to
study hard to get into medical school.
This is Liu Hao. He enjoys painting nature
and often draws in the park. He dreams of being an
artist like Qi Baishi. He will practise drawing every
day and visit art museums to learn more.
Hello, everyone. This is Lily. She likes
reading books. She often spends her weekends in
the library. She wants to be a writer in the future
because she likes Mark Twain. To make her dream
come true, she will practise writing stories every
day and learn from different books.
This is Sun Wen. She loves helping others and
studying science. Her dream is to become a doctor
like Zhong Nanshan, because she wants to save
lives and help people keep healthy. She plans to
study hard to get into medical school.
This is Liu Hao. He enjoys painting nature
and often draws in the park. He dreams of being an
artist like Qi Baishi. He will practise drawing every
day and visit art museums to learn more.
解析
【分析】
首先，我们需要紧扣题目要求，完成并拓展三位选手的介绍，每一位都要涵盖爱好、梦想、梦想的原因以及为实现梦想的努力方向。
1. 先处理Lily的部分：根据提示的句式，先确定她的爱好为阅读，补充她在图书馆的具体行为，比如度过周末；梦想设定为作家，喜欢的名人选马克·吐温（Mark Twain），努力方向可以是每天练习写故事、从不同书籍学习。
2. 另外两位选手，要分别设定名字，比如Sun Wen和Liu Hao，为他们设定不同的爱好和梦想：Sun Wen可以设定为热爱助人、喜欢科学，梦想成为像钟南山（Zhong Nanshan）一样的医生，原因是想救人助人，努力方向是努力学习考医学院；Liu Hao设定为喜欢画自然，经常在公园画画，梦想成为像齐白石（Qi Baishi）一样的艺术家，努力方向是每天练习画画、参观美术馆学习。
3. 写作时要注意时态，爱好用一般现在时，梦想和努力方向结合一般现在时和一般将来时，语句要通顺连贯，满足字数要求。
【解析】
1. 完成Lily的段落：
根据提示的句式，依次填充内容：
She likes reading books.（确定爱好为阅读）
She often spends her weekends in the library.（补充在图书馆的具体行为）
She wants to be a writer in the future because she likes Mark Twain.（设定梦想为作家，喜欢的名人选马克·吐温）
To make her dream come true, she will practise writing stories every day and learn from different books.（补充实现梦想的具体努力）
2. 介绍第二位选手Sun Wen：
设定名字后，介绍她的爱好：She loves helping others and studying science.
说明梦想及原因：Her dream is to become a doctor like Zhong Nanshan, because she wants to save lives and help people keep healthy.
补充努力方向：She plans to study hard to get into medical school.
3. 介绍第三位选手Liu Hao：
设定名字后，介绍爱好：He enjoys painting nature and often draws in the park.
说明梦想及原因：He dreams of being an artist like Qi Baishi.
补充努力方向：He will practise drawing every day and visit art museums to learn more.
将所有内容整合，形成连贯的介绍，确保语句通顺，符合题目要求。
【答案】
Hello, everyone. This is Lily. She likes
reading books. She often spends her weekends in
the library. She wants to be a writer in the future
because she likes Mark Twain. To make her dream
come true, she will practise writing stories every
day and learn from different books.
This is Sun Wen. She loves helping others and
studying science. Her dream is to become a doctor
like Zhong Nanshan, because she wants to save
lives and help people keep healthy. She plans to
study hard to get into medical school.
This is Liu Hao. He enjoys painting nature
and often draws in the park. He dreams of being an
artist like Qi Baishi. He will practise drawing every
day and visit art museums to learn more.
【知识点】
1. 英语人物介绍写作
2. 一般现在时与一般将来时运用
3. 梦想与爱好话题表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，对三位选手的介绍均涵盖了爱好、梦想、梦想的原因以及实现梦想的努力方向，内容充实具体；结合知名人物举例，使内容更具真实性；语句通顺连贯，时态运用准确，符合七年级英语书面表达的要求，能为同类写作提供参考。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先，我们需要紧扣题目要求，完成并拓展三位选手的介绍，每一位都要涵盖爱好、梦想、梦想的原因以及为实现梦想的努力方向。
1. 先处理Lily的部分：根据提示的句式，先确定她的爱好为阅读，补充她在图书馆的具体行为，比如度过周末；梦想设定为作家，喜欢的名人选马克·吐温（Mark Twain），努力方向可以是每天练习写故事、从不同书籍学习。
2. 另外两位选手，要分别设定名字，比如Sun Wen和Liu Hao，为他们设定不同的爱好和梦想：Sun Wen可以设定为热爱助人、喜欢科学，梦想成为像钟南山（Zhong Nanshan）一样的医生，原因是想救人助人，努力方向是努力学习考医学院；Liu Hao设定为喜欢画自然，经常在公园画画，梦想成为像齐白石（Qi Baishi）一样的艺术家，努力方向是每天练习画画、参观美术馆学习。
3. 写作时要注意时态，爱好用一般现在时，梦想和努力方向结合一般现在时和一般将来时，语句要通顺连贯，满足字数要求。
【解析】
1. 完成Lily的段落：
根据提示的句式，依次填充内容：
She likes reading books.（确定爱好为阅读）
She often spends her weekends in the library.（补充在图书馆的具体行为）
She wants to be a writer in the future because she likes Mark Twain.（设定梦想为作家，喜欢的名人选马克·吐温）
To make her dream come true, she will practise writing stories every day and learn from different books.（补充实现梦想的具体努力）
2. 介绍第二位选手Sun Wen：
设定名字后，介绍她的爱好：She loves helping others and studying science.
说明梦想及原因：Her dream is to become a doctor like Zhong Nanshan, because she wants to save lives and help people keep healthy.
补充努力方向：She plans to study hard to get into medical school.
3. 介绍第三位选手Liu Hao：
设定名字后，介绍爱好：He enjoys painting nature and often draws in the park.
说明梦想及原因：He dreams of being an artist like Qi Baishi.
补充努力方向：He will practise drawing every day and visit art museums to learn more.
将所有内容整合，形成连贯的介绍，确保语句通顺，符合题目要求。
【答案】
Hello, everyone. This is Lily. She likes
reading books. She often spends her weekends in
the library. She wants to be a writer in the future
because she likes Mark Twain. To make her dream
come true, she will practise writing stories every
day and learn from different books.
This is Sun Wen. She loves helping others and
studying science. Her dream is to become a doctor
like Zhong Nanshan, because she wants to save
lives and help people keep healthy. She plans to
study hard to get into medical school.
This is Liu Hao. He enjoys painting nature
and often draws in the park. He dreams of being an
artist like Qi Baishi. He will practise drawing every
day and visit art museums to learn more.
【知识点】
1. 英语人物介绍写作
2. 一般现在时与一般将来时运用
3. 梦想与爱好话题表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，对三位选手的介绍均涵盖了爱好、梦想、梦想的原因以及实现梦想的努力方向，内容充实具体；结合知名人物举例，使内容更具真实性；语句通顺连贯，时态运用准确，符合七年级英语书面表达的要求，能为同类写作提供参考。
【难度系数】
0.6
