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今天是星期日,也是你家的“家庭劳动日”。请根据下面的思维导图,以“Family Labour Day”为题介绍一下你和你的家人正在做什么,写一写你们的活动内容吧！
要求：1. 内容全面,表达通顺,书写规范；2. 时态运用正确,不少于50词(不包括已给内容)。
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今天是星期日,也是你家的“家庭劳动日”。请根据下面的思维导图,以“Family Labour Day”为题介绍一下你和你的家人正在做什么,写一写你们的活动内容吧！
要求：1. 内容全面,表达通顺,书写规范；2. 时态运用正确,不少于50词(不包括已给内容)。
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示例：
Family Labour Day
Today is my family labour day. And it's Sunday today. My family are all at home. We're busy doing the housework. My grandparents are cooking in the kitchen. The food smells very nice. My father is cleaning the car in front of the house. He likes his car very much. My mother is in the bathroom. She is washing clothes. My little sister is young, but she's also helpful. She's making the bed. Her bedroom is always clean and tidy. Guess! Where am I? Ha! Ha! I'm sweeping the floor in the living room. Everyone in my family is busy but very happy.
Family Labour Day
Today is my family labour day. And it's Sunday today. My family are all at home. We're busy doing the housework. My grandparents are cooking in the kitchen. The food smells very nice. My father is cleaning the car in front of the house. He likes his car very much. My mother is in the bathroom. She is washing clothes. My little sister is young, but she's also helpful. She's making the bed. Her bedroom is always clean and tidy. Guess! Where am I? Ha! Ha! I'm sweeping the floor in the living room. Everyone in my family is busy but very happy.
解析
【分析】
首先，我们需要明确题目要求：以“Family Labour Day”为题，结合思维导图的5个要素（Who/When/Where/What...do/How...feel）介绍家人正在进行的劳动，时态要用现在进行时，内容不少于50词。
解题思路分三步：
1. 开篇引入：点明时间（周日）和主题（家庭劳动日），说明家人都在家；
2. 主体内容：分别描述每个家庭成员的劳动地点和具体活动，要覆盖不同的家人（如祖父母、父母、兄弟姐妹和自己），对应不同的家务场景；
3. 结尾总结：写出全家人的感受，呼应主题。
要注意现在进行时的结构“be动词+动词ing形式”，同时保证语句通顺，内容全面。
【解析】
1. 开头：先用“Today is my family labour day. And it's Sunday today. My family are all at home. We're busy doing the housework.”点明时间、主题和整体场景，引出下文。
2. 主体：依次介绍不同家人的活动：
祖父母：“My grandparents are cooking in the kitchen. The food smells very nice.”（地点厨房，活动做饭）
爸爸：“My father is cleaning the car in front of the house. He likes his car very much.”（地点房子前，活动洗车）
妈妈：“My mother is in the bathroom. She is washing clothes.”（地点浴室，活动洗衣服）
妹妹：“My little sister is young, but she's also helpful. She's making the bed. Her bedroom is always clean and tidy.”（地点卧室，活动整理床铺）
自己：“Guess! Where am I? Ha! Ha! I'm sweeping the floor in the living room.”（地点客厅，活动扫地）
3. 结尾：用“Everyone in my family is busy but very happy.”总结家人的感受，完成全文。
【答案】
Family Labour Day
Today is my family labour day. And it's Sunday today. My family are all at home. We're busy doing the housework. My grandparents are cooking in the kitchen. The food smells very nice. My father is cleaning the car in front of the house. He likes his car very much. My mother is in the bathroom. She is washing clothes. My little sister is young, but she's also helpful. She's making the bed. Her bedroom is always clean and tidy. Guess! Where am I? Ha! Ha! I'm sweeping the floor in the living room. Everyone in my family is busy but very happy.
【知识点】
现在进行时运用；家庭劳动类词汇；记叙文写作结构
【点评】
这篇范文紧扣题目要求，时态运用准确（全程使用现在进行时描述正在进行的活动），内容全面覆盖了思维导图的所有要素，条理清晰，还加入了细节描写让内容更生动鲜活，语句通顺自然，符合字数要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先，我们需要明确题目要求：以“Family Labour Day”为题，结合思维导图的5个要素（Who/When/Where/What...do/How...feel）介绍家人正在进行的劳动，时态要用现在进行时，内容不少于50词。
解题思路分三步：
1. 开篇引入：点明时间（周日）和主题（家庭劳动日），说明家人都在家；
2. 主体内容：分别描述每个家庭成员的劳动地点和具体活动，要覆盖不同的家人（如祖父母、父母、兄弟姐妹和自己），对应不同的家务场景；
3. 结尾总结：写出全家人的感受，呼应主题。
要注意现在进行时的结构“be动词+动词ing形式”，同时保证语句通顺，内容全面。
【解析】
1. 开头：先用“Today is my family labour day. And it's Sunday today. My family are all at home. We're busy doing the housework.”点明时间、主题和整体场景，引出下文。
2. 主体：依次介绍不同家人的活动：
祖父母：“My grandparents are cooking in the kitchen. The food smells very nice.”（地点厨房，活动做饭）
爸爸：“My father is cleaning the car in front of the house. He likes his car very much.”（地点房子前，活动洗车）
妈妈：“My mother is in the bathroom. She is washing clothes.”（地点浴室，活动洗衣服）
妹妹：“My little sister is young, but she's also helpful. She's making the bed. Her bedroom is always clean and tidy.”（地点卧室，活动整理床铺）
自己：“Guess! Where am I? Ha! Ha! I'm sweeping the floor in the living room.”（地点客厅，活动扫地）
3. 结尾：用“Everyone in my family is busy but very happy.”总结家人的感受，完成全文。
【答案】
Family Labour Day
Today is my family labour day. And it's Sunday today. My family are all at home. We're busy doing the housework. My grandparents are cooking in the kitchen. The food smells very nice. My father is cleaning the car in front of the house. He likes his car very much. My mother is in the bathroom. She is washing clothes. My little sister is young, but she's also helpful. She's making the bed. Her bedroom is always clean and tidy. Guess! Where am I? Ha! Ha! I'm sweeping the floor in the living room. Everyone in my family is busy but very happy.
【知识点】
现在进行时运用；家庭劳动类词汇；记叙文写作结构
【点评】
这篇范文紧扣题目要求，时态运用准确（全程使用现在进行时描述正在进行的活动），内容全面覆盖了思维导图的所有要素，条理清晰，还加入了细节描写让内容更生动鲜活，语句通顺自然，符合字数要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
