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十、(2025·南京秦淮区期中)书面表达(15分)
英语课上老师要求以“New School,New Life”为话题开展小组讨论。假如你是李华,将代表小组向全班介绍你的学校生活,请根据以下提示写一篇英文发言稿。
要求:1. 内容涵盖所有要点,适当拓展,全文连贯、通顺;
2. 文中不得提及有关个人身份的任何信息,如校名、人名等;
3. 词数80左右,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Hello, everyone! I'm Li Hua from Group 1. Today, I'd like to share with you about my new school life.
That's all. Thank you!
英语课上老师要求以“New School,New Life”为话题开展小组讨论。假如你是李华,将代表小组向全班介绍你的学校生活,请根据以下提示写一篇英文发言稿。
要求:1. 内容涵盖所有要点,适当拓展,全文连贯、通顺;
2. 文中不得提及有关个人身份的任何信息,如校名、人名等;
3. 词数80左右,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Hello, everyone! I'm Li Hua from Group 1. Today, I'd like to share with you about my new school life.
That's all. Thank you!
答案
十、
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:应用文。②时态:主要为一般现在时。③提示:根据题干中的提示要点介绍你的学校生活，可适当增加细节。写作时要注意上下文之间的逻辑关系，语义连贯，并突出写作要点。
[写作步骤]
第一步，承接开头，点明主题；第二步，介绍自己在新学校最喜欢的地方、最喜欢的课程和最好的朋友；第三步，总结自己的感受，表达对未来的生活充满期待。
[词句积累]
①share with 与……分享 ②get along well with 与……相处得好
③Learning English opens up a whole new world for me. (动名词短语作主语)
One possible version:
Hello, everyone! I'm Li Hua from Group 1. Today, I'd like to share with you about my new school life.
Firstly, my new school is beautiful and modern. There are many advanced(先进的) teaching facilities. My favourite place at school is the school library. Because I like reading all kinds of books. Secondly, I have a lot of lessons in my school. Among all the lessons, I like English best. Learning English opens up a whole new world for me.
Furthermore, the students here are friendly and welcome. I have made many new friends here. My best friend at school is Xiao Ming. We always share similar interests and respect each other's difference. We get along well with each other and often study together.
I like my new school and I hope I can have a happy life here.
That's all. Thank you!
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:应用文。②时态:主要为一般现在时。③提示:根据题干中的提示要点介绍你的学校生活，可适当增加细节。写作时要注意上下文之间的逻辑关系，语义连贯，并突出写作要点。
[写作步骤]
第一步，承接开头，点明主题；第二步，介绍自己在新学校最喜欢的地方、最喜欢的课程和最好的朋友；第三步，总结自己的感受，表达对未来的生活充满期待。
[词句积累]
①share with 与……分享 ②get along well with 与……相处得好
③Learning English opens up a whole new world for me. (动名词短语作主语)
One possible version:
Hello, everyone! I'm Li Hua from Group 1. Today, I'd like to share with you about my new school life.
Firstly, my new school is beautiful and modern. There are many advanced(先进的) teaching facilities. My favourite place at school is the school library. Because I like reading all kinds of books. Secondly, I have a lot of lessons in my school. Among all the lessons, I like English best. Learning English opens up a whole new world for me.
Furthermore, the students here are friendly and welcome. I have made many new friends here. My best friend at school is Xiao Ming. We always share similar interests and respect each other's difference. We get along well with each other and often study together.
I like my new school and I hope I can have a happy life here.
That's all. Thank you!
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：第一，体裁是班级英语发言稿，面向全班同学，语气要自然口语化；第二，时态统一用一般现在时，符合介绍日常校园生活的语境；第三，必须覆盖三个给定要点：最喜欢的校园地点、最喜欢的课程、最好的校内好友，不能遗漏；第四，不能出现真实校名、人名等隐私信息，词数控制在80左右。接下来梳理写作逻辑：先用过渡词引出第一个要点，说明你最喜欢的校园地点是什么，补充1句合理的理由；接着引出第二个要点，点明最喜欢的课程，说明你喜欢它的原因；再引出第三个要点，介绍你最好的朋友，说明你们平时的相处状态；最后用1句话收尾表达对新校园生活的喜爱，自然衔接题干给出的结尾即可，全程注意语句通顺，用简单的连接词让行文更连贯。
【解析】
步骤1：审题定位
明确写作要求：应用文（发言稿），第一人称，时态以一般现在时为主，必须覆盖全部3个提示要点，禁止出现个人隐私信息，词数80左右。
步骤2：搭建内容框架
① 第一个要点：介绍最喜欢的校园地点，选择图书馆，补充理由：馆内藏书丰富，课后可以在里面安静阅读、完成作业。
② 第二个要点：介绍最喜欢的课程，选择英语，补充理由：英语十分有趣，能帮我了解不同的文化，打开全新的视野。
③ 第三个要点：介绍最好的校内好友，补充细节：我们兴趣相近，平时经常一起学习、参加课外活动，相处十分融洽。
④ 最后补充一句收尾，表达自己很享受新校园生活，对未来充满期待。
步骤3：润色成文，用firstly、besides、furthermore等过渡词串联内容，检查语法错误，调整词数符合要求。
【答案】
Firstly, my new school is beautiful and modern. There are many advanced teaching facilities. My favourite place at school is the school library. Because I like reading all kinds of books. Secondly, I have a lot of lessons in my school. Among all the lessons, I like English best. Learning English opens up a whole new world for me. Furthermore, the students here are friendly. I have made many new friends here. My best friend at school is my deskmate. We always share similar interests and respect each other. We get along well with each other and often study together. I like my new school and I hope I can have a happy life here.
【知识点】
英语发言稿写作，一般现在时应用，要点作文谋篇
【点评】
本题是初中阶段典型的要点提示类应用文写作，三个写作方向都给出了明确引导，学生不需要自行构思复杂的内容，只需要给每个要点补充1-2句贴合日常校园生活的合理细节，用基础的过渡词串联即可完成写作，难度较低，写作时注意不要遗漏要点，避免出现题干禁止的个人隐私信息，控制词数就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.8
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：第一，体裁是班级英语发言稿，面向全班同学，语气要自然口语化；第二，时态统一用一般现在时，符合介绍日常校园生活的语境；第三，必须覆盖三个给定要点：最喜欢的校园地点、最喜欢的课程、最好的校内好友，不能遗漏；第四，不能出现真实校名、人名等隐私信息，词数控制在80左右。接下来梳理写作逻辑：先用过渡词引出第一个要点，说明你最喜欢的校园地点是什么，补充1句合理的理由；接着引出第二个要点，点明最喜欢的课程，说明你喜欢它的原因；再引出第三个要点，介绍你最好的朋友，说明你们平时的相处状态；最后用1句话收尾表达对新校园生活的喜爱，自然衔接题干给出的结尾即可，全程注意语句通顺，用简单的连接词让行文更连贯。
【解析】
步骤1：审题定位
明确写作要求：应用文（发言稿），第一人称，时态以一般现在时为主，必须覆盖全部3个提示要点，禁止出现个人隐私信息，词数80左右。
步骤2：搭建内容框架
① 第一个要点：介绍最喜欢的校园地点，选择图书馆，补充理由：馆内藏书丰富，课后可以在里面安静阅读、完成作业。
② 第二个要点：介绍最喜欢的课程，选择英语，补充理由：英语十分有趣，能帮我了解不同的文化，打开全新的视野。
③ 第三个要点：介绍最好的校内好友，补充细节：我们兴趣相近，平时经常一起学习、参加课外活动，相处十分融洽。
④ 最后补充一句收尾，表达自己很享受新校园生活，对未来充满期待。
步骤3：润色成文，用firstly、besides、furthermore等过渡词串联内容，检查语法错误，调整词数符合要求。
【答案】
Firstly, my new school is beautiful and modern. There are many advanced teaching facilities. My favourite place at school is the school library. Because I like reading all kinds of books. Secondly, I have a lot of lessons in my school. Among all the lessons, I like English best. Learning English opens up a whole new world for me. Furthermore, the students here are friendly. I have made many new friends here. My best friend at school is my deskmate. We always share similar interests and respect each other. We get along well with each other and often study together. I like my new school and I hope I can have a happy life here.
【知识点】
英语发言稿写作，一般现在时应用，要点作文谋篇
【点评】
本题是初中阶段典型的要点提示类应用文写作，三个写作方向都给出了明确引导，学生不需要自行构思复杂的内容，只需要给每个要点补充1-2句贴合日常校园生活的合理细节，用基础的过渡词串联即可完成写作，难度较低，写作时注意不要遗漏要点，避免出现题干禁止的个人隐私信息，控制词数就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.8
