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（2025·江苏苏州江都区一次月考）春天是游览扬州的最佳季节，Tom 和他的同学在计划去扬州的三日游。假如你是 Tom，请根据表中要点，写一篇有关这次旅行的计划和注意事项的短文。
|原因|变化很大(自拟1点)
花朵美丽，空气清新；街道干净，交通便利|
【注意】1. 文中必须包含所有要点，可以适当发挥，不要简单翻译。
2. 词数 100 左右，开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
3. 请勿提及真实姓名。
Spring is coming. We are planning to visit Yangzhou.
|原因|变化很大(自拟1点)
花朵美丽，空气清新；街道干净，交通便利|
【注意】1. 文中必须包含所有要点，可以适当发挥，不要简单翻译。
2. 词数 100 左右，开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
3. 请勿提及真实姓名。
Spring is coming. We are planning to visit Yangzhou.
Yangzhou has changed a lot. The beautiful flowers, fresh air, clean streets and convenient transport make it perfect for a spring trip.
Here's our plan. On the first day, we'll visit museums to learn about local culture.
The next day, we'll enjoy the natural beauty at the Slender West Lake.
On the last day, we'll taste delicious food and shop for gifts on Dongguan Street.
We'll check the weather, wear comfortable shoes, and bring cameras.
We'll keep the environment clean and follow public rules.
We're excited to explore Yangzhou's beauty.
答案
One possible version:
Spring is coming. We are planning to visit Yangzhou.
Yangzhou has changed a lot. The beautiful flowers, fresh air, clean streets and convenient transport make it perfect for a spring trip.
Here's our plan. On the first day, we'll visit museums to learn about local culture. The next day, we'll enjoy the natural beauty at the Slender West Lake. On the last day, we'll taste delicious food and shop for gifts on Dongguan Street.
We'll check the weather, wear comfortable shoes, and bring cameras. We'll keep the environment clean and follow public rules. We're excited to explore Yangzhou's beauty.
Spring is coming. We are planning to visit Yangzhou.
Yangzhou has changed a lot. The beautiful flowers, fresh air, clean streets and convenient transport make it perfect for a spring trip.
Here's our plan. On the first day, we'll visit museums to learn about local culture. The next day, we'll enjoy the natural beauty at the Slender West Lake. On the last day, we'll taste delicious food and shop for gifts on Dongguan Street.
We'll check the weather, wear comfortable shoes, and bring cameras. We'll keep the environment clean and follow public rules. We're excited to explore Yangzhou's beauty.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要明确写作要求：身份是Tom，主题是扬州三日游计划，需要覆盖表格所有给定要点，补充1个城市变化的自拟点，还要加入旅行相关的注意事项，词数控制在100左右。接下来梳理写作逻辑：首先承接给出的开头，先介绍扬州的变化，把自拟的变化点、给定的“花朵美丽空气清新、街道干净交通便利”的优势整合，说明选择春天去扬州的原因；之后按照第一天、第二天、第三天的时间顺序依次介绍行程安排，用合适的时间衔接词串联，让行文逻辑通顺；最后补充合理的出行注意事项，再表达自己和同伴对这次旅行的期待，完成感受部分的内容，全程注意不要生硬逐句翻译要点，适当添加衔接语句让文章流畅自然。
【解析】
1. 谋篇布局：全文分为三个逻辑段，第一段说明出行原因，第二段介绍三日行程，第三段补充出行注意事项与个人感受，结构清晰符合出行计划类写作的常规逻辑。
2. 时态选择：描述尚未发生的旅行计划，统一使用一般将来时（will+动词原形），符合语境要求。
3. 要点覆盖：
① 原因部分：点明扬州变化很大，自拟点融入“非常适合春季出游”的出行优势，同时覆盖所有给定的环境、交通相关要点；
② 计划部分：用On the first day、The next day、On the last day作为时间引导，依次对应博物馆了解当地文化、瘦西湖欣赏自然之美、东关街品尝美食购物三个行程，没有遗漏信息；
③ 感受部分：补充符合旅行场景的合理注意事项，比如提前查天气、穿舒适鞋、带相机、遵守公共规则、爱护环境，最后表达对探索扬州的期待，内容贴合主题。
4. 衔接优化：添加合适的过渡短语比如Here's our plan，让行文过渡自然，避免内容零散。
【答案】
One possible version:
Spring is coming. We are planning to visit Yangzhou.
Yangzhou has changed a lot. The beautiful flowers, fresh air, clean streets and convenient transport make it perfect for a spring trip.
Here's our plan. On the first day, we'll visit museums to learn about local culture. The next day, we'll enjoy the natural beauty at the Slender West Lake. On the last day, we'll taste delicious food and shop for gifts on Dongguan Street.
We'll check the weather, wear comfortable shoes, and bring cameras. We'll keep the environment clean and follow public rules. We're excited to explore Yangzhou's beauty.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作
一般将来时运用
旅行话题表达
【点评】
本题是典型的校园场景出行计划类应用文写作，给定要点清晰明确，学生只需要按照时间顺序梳理整合信息，适当补充合理的衔接内容与旅行注意事项，避免生硬直译要点，就可以写出符合要求的短文，既考查学生对基础时态的掌握，也锻炼学生对叙事类短文的逻辑排布能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道题首先要明确写作要求：身份是Tom，主题是扬州三日游计划，需要覆盖表格所有给定要点，补充1个城市变化的自拟点，还要加入旅行相关的注意事项，词数控制在100左右。接下来梳理写作逻辑：首先承接给出的开头，先介绍扬州的变化，把自拟的变化点、给定的“花朵美丽空气清新、街道干净交通便利”的优势整合，说明选择春天去扬州的原因；之后按照第一天、第二天、第三天的时间顺序依次介绍行程安排，用合适的时间衔接词串联，让行文逻辑通顺；最后补充合理的出行注意事项，再表达自己和同伴对这次旅行的期待，完成感受部分的内容，全程注意不要生硬逐句翻译要点，适当添加衔接语句让文章流畅自然。
【解析】
1. 谋篇布局：全文分为三个逻辑段，第一段说明出行原因，第二段介绍三日行程，第三段补充出行注意事项与个人感受，结构清晰符合出行计划类写作的常规逻辑。
2. 时态选择：描述尚未发生的旅行计划，统一使用一般将来时（will+动词原形），符合语境要求。
3. 要点覆盖：
① 原因部分：点明扬州变化很大，自拟点融入“非常适合春季出游”的出行优势，同时覆盖所有给定的环境、交通相关要点；
② 计划部分：用On the first day、The next day、On the last day作为时间引导，依次对应博物馆了解当地文化、瘦西湖欣赏自然之美、东关街品尝美食购物三个行程，没有遗漏信息；
③ 感受部分：补充符合旅行场景的合理注意事项，比如提前查天气、穿舒适鞋、带相机、遵守公共规则、爱护环境，最后表达对探索扬州的期待，内容贴合主题。
4. 衔接优化：添加合适的过渡短语比如Here's our plan，让行文过渡自然，避免内容零散。
【答案】
One possible version:
Spring is coming. We are planning to visit Yangzhou.
Yangzhou has changed a lot. The beautiful flowers, fresh air, clean streets and convenient transport make it perfect for a spring trip.
Here's our plan. On the first day, we'll visit museums to learn about local culture. The next day, we'll enjoy the natural beauty at the Slender West Lake. On the last day, we'll taste delicious food and shop for gifts on Dongguan Street.
We'll check the weather, wear comfortable shoes, and bring cameras. We'll keep the environment clean and follow public rules. We're excited to explore Yangzhou's beauty.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作
一般将来时运用
旅行话题表达
【点评】
本题是典型的校园场景出行计划类应用文写作，给定要点清晰明确，学生只需要按照时间顺序梳理整合信息，适当补充合理的衔接内容与旅行注意事项，避免生硬直译要点，就可以写出符合要求的短文，既考查学生对基础时态的掌握，也锻炼学生对叙事类短文的逻辑排布能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
