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写作实战 答案（含基础版范文和进阶版范文）D22
「2026江苏无锡江南中学月考」
假设你的朋友Jim是你校健康俱乐部的一员，请你根据以下要点提示介绍他健康的生活方式。
要求：
1.要点完整，表达清楚，可适当发挥。
2.语句通顺，意思连贯。
3.词数80左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
I have a friend. He is Jim. He is a member of the Health Club in our school.
「2026江苏无锡江南中学月考」
假设你的朋友Jim是你校健康俱乐部的一员，请你根据以下要点提示介绍他健康的生活方式。
要求：
1.要点完整，表达清楚，可适当发挥。
2.语句通顺，意思连贯。
3.词数80左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
I have a friend. He is Jim. He is a member of the Health Club in our school.
He has a very healthy lifestyle.
For breakfast, he usually has eggs, milk and some bread. He gets lots of energy from the food for the whole morning. For lunch, he has vegetables, beef and rice. For dinner, he eats fish, noodles and fruit.
He gets up early and exercises every day. What’s more, he sleeps for eight hours every night. He goes swimming twice a week.
He seldom plays computer games because he thinks it is bad for his health.
Jim’s healthy lifestyle helps him stay fit and full of energy.
答案
主题写作专项
＞ 基础版范文
I have a friend. He is Jim. He is a member of the Health Club in our school. He has a very healthy lifestyle.
For breakfast, he usually has eggs, milk and some bread. He gets lots of energy from the food for the whole morning. For lunch, he has vegetables, beef and rice. For dinner, he eats fish, noodles and fruit. He gets up early and exercises every day. What’s more, he sleeps for eight hours every night. He goes swimming twice a week. He seldom plays computer games because he thinks it is bad for his health.
Jim’s healthy lifestyle helps him stay fit and full of energy.
＞ 进阶版范文
I have a friend. He is Jim. He is a member of the Health Club in our school. He has a very healthy lifestyle.
First of all, he has good eating habits. For breakfast, he usually has eggs, milk and bread. It gives him a lot of energy for the whole morning. For lunch, he likes vegetables, beef and rice. For dinner, he often has fish, noodles and soup.
Besides, he has good living habits. He gets up early every day and often does exercise. To keep healthy, he gets at least eight hours’ sleep every night. He goes swimming twice a week. Also, he seldom plays computer games because he thinks it’s bad for his eyes and health.
Jim is always full of energy because of his good habits. We should learn from him.
＞ 基础版范文
I have a friend. He is Jim. He is a member of the Health Club in our school. He has a very healthy lifestyle.
For breakfast, he usually has eggs, milk and some bread. He gets lots of energy from the food for the whole morning. For lunch, he has vegetables, beef and rice. For dinner, he eats fish, noodles and fruit. He gets up early and exercises every day. What’s more, he sleeps for eight hours every night. He goes swimming twice a week. He seldom plays computer games because he thinks it is bad for his health.
Jim’s healthy lifestyle helps him stay fit and full of energy.
＞ 进阶版范文
I have a friend. He is Jim. He is a member of the Health Club in our school. He has a very healthy lifestyle.
First of all, he has good eating habits. For breakfast, he usually has eggs, milk and bread. It gives him a lot of energy for the whole morning. For lunch, he likes vegetables, beef and rice. For dinner, he often has fish, noodles and soup.
Besides, he has good living habits. He gets up early every day and often does exercise. To keep healthy, he gets at least eight hours’ sleep every night. He goes swimming twice a week. Also, he seldom plays computer games because he thinks it’s bad for his eyes and health.
Jim is always full of energy because of his good habits. We should learn from him.
解析
【分析】
首先，题目要求介绍Jim的健康生活方式，开头已给出，需围绕表格中的饮食习惯和生活习惯展开。第一步，总起说明Jim有健康的生活方式；第二步，分述饮食习惯：早餐补充合理食物（如面包），午餐、晚餐补充合适食物（如米饭、水果），确保覆盖表格中的早中晚食物；第三步，分述生活习惯：包含早起运动、一周游泳两次、少玩电脑游戏的原因，适当补充睡眠内容使内容完整；最后总结健康习惯的好处，注意语句通顺，词数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，总述Jim有健康的生活方式；
2. 介绍饮食习惯：分别说明早、中、晚餐的食物，补充合理内容让表达更完整；
3. 介绍生活习惯：涵盖早起运动、游泳频率、少玩电脑游戏的原因，补充睡眠相关内容；
4. 总结健康习惯的益处，使文章结构完整。
【答案】
I have a friend. He is Jim. He is a member of the Health Club in our school. He has a very healthy lifestyle.
For breakfast, he usually has eggs, milk and some bread. He gets lots of energy from the food for the whole morning. For lunch, he has vegetables, beef and rice. For dinner, he eats fish, noodles and fruit. He gets up early and exercises every day. What’s more, he sleeps for eight hours every night. He goes swimming twice a week. He seldom plays computer games because he thinks it is bad for his health.
Jim’s healthy lifestyle helps him stay fit and full of energy.
【知识点】
英语话题写作（健康生活）、一般现在时运用
【点评】
本文紧扣“健康生活方式”主题，覆盖所有要点，结构清晰，语言通顺，适当发挥使内容更充实，符合初中英语写作要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先，题目要求介绍Jim的健康生活方式，开头已给出，需围绕表格中的饮食习惯和生活习惯展开。第一步，总起说明Jim有健康的生活方式；第二步，分述饮食习惯：早餐补充合理食物（如面包），午餐、晚餐补充合适食物（如米饭、水果），确保覆盖表格中的早中晚食物；第三步，分述生活习惯：包含早起运动、一周游泳两次、少玩电脑游戏的原因，适当补充睡眠内容使内容完整；最后总结健康习惯的好处，注意语句通顺，词数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，总述Jim有健康的生活方式；
2. 介绍饮食习惯：分别说明早、中、晚餐的食物，补充合理内容让表达更完整；
3. 介绍生活习惯：涵盖早起运动、游泳频率、少玩电脑游戏的原因，补充睡眠相关内容；
4. 总结健康习惯的益处，使文章结构完整。
【答案】
I have a friend. He is Jim. He is a member of the Health Club in our school. He has a very healthy lifestyle.
For breakfast, he usually has eggs, milk and some bread. He gets lots of energy from the food for the whole morning. For lunch, he has vegetables, beef and rice. For dinner, he eats fish, noodles and fruit. He gets up early and exercises every day. What’s more, he sleeps for eight hours every night. He goes swimming twice a week. He seldom plays computer games because he thinks it is bad for his health.
Jim’s healthy lifestyle helps him stay fit and full of energy.
【知识点】
英语话题写作（健康生活）、一般现在时运用
【点评】
本文紧扣“健康生活方式”主题，覆盖所有要点，结构清晰，语言通顺，适当发挥使内容更充实，符合初中英语写作要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
