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假设你是李华，下个月你所在的中学将要举行以“自我蜕变”为主题的英语演讲比赛。请你写一篇演讲稿，分享你自我蜕变的故事。要点如下：
（1）描述你曾经的某个忧虑；
（2）介绍你发生改变的原因和现在的情况；
（3）分享你的感悟。
注意：（1）不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现真实校名和学生的真实姓名。
（2）语句连贯，词数80左右。作文的开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
【巧列提纲】（以下
部分仅供参考，希望同学们可以多开动脑筋、发散思维）
【实战演练】
Dear teachers and fellow students,
My name is Li Hua. Today I'd like to share my self-change experience with you.
【写作评价】（评分原则与方法可参考本书最后一页）
分项 自评分 互评分 老师评分
内 曾经的某个忧虑（2分）
容 发生改变的原因和现在的情况（3分）
分 感受（2分）
语言分（8分）
总分（15分）
假设你是李华，下个月你所在的中学将要举行以“自我蜕变”为主题的英语演讲比赛。请你写一篇演讲稿，分享你自我蜕变的故事。要点如下：
（1）描述你曾经的某个忧虑；
（2）介绍你发生改变的原因和现在的情况；
（3）分享你的感悟。
注意：（1）不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现真实校名和学生的真实姓名。
（2）语句连贯，词数80左右。作文的开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
【巧列提纲】（以下
部分仅供参考，希望同学们可以多开动脑筋、发散思维）【实战演练】
Dear teachers and fellow students,
My name is Li Hua. Today I'd like to share my self-change experience with you.
【写作评价】（评分原则与方法可参考本书最后一页）
分项 自评分 互评分 老师评分
内 曾经的某个忧虑（2分）
容 发生改变的原因和现在的情况（3分）
分 感受（2分）
语言分（8分）
总分（15分）
答案
One possible version:
Dear teachers and fellow students,
My name is Li Hua. Today I'd like to share my self-change experience with you.
I have a special birthmark on my left arm. When I was young, I cared about it a lot. I thought it made me look different from others. I supposed everyone would laugh at me because of it.
One day, my best friend told me that my birthmark was like a unique symbol. Instead of hiding it, I should be proud of it. His words made me feel better. Therefore, I started to accept it.
Now, I truly believe that what makes us different is what makes us special. Anyway, I've learnt to love myself just the way I am.
Dear teachers and fellow students,
My name is Li Hua. Today I'd like to share my self-change experience with you.
I have a special birthmark on my left arm. When I was young, I cared about it a lot. I thought it made me look different from others. I supposed everyone would laugh at me because of it.
One day, my best friend told me that my birthmark was like a unique symbol. Instead of hiding it, I should be proud of it. His words made me feel better. Therefore, I started to accept it.
Now, I truly believe that what makes us different is what makes us special. Anyway, I've learnt to love myself just the way I am.
解析
【分析】
本题要求写一篇以“自我蜕变”为主题的英语演讲稿，需紧扣三个要点：描述曾经的忧虑、说明改变的原因与现状、分享感悟。写作时要承接给定开头，选取具体的个人经历让内容真实，语言需符合演讲的亲切语气，控制词数在80左右，避免出现真实信息，确保语句连贯。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，描述曾经的忧虑：选取左臂胎记这一具体困扰，说明当时的担忧（怕被嘲笑，觉得自己与众不同）；2. 阐述改变的契机（朋友鼓励称胎记是独特象征）及现在的状态（接受并正视自身不同）；3. 提炼感悟，升华主题，表达接纳自我、珍视独特性的观点，确保要点完整，语言简洁流畅，符合词数要求。
【答案】
Dear teachers and fellow students,
My name is Li Hua. Today I'd like to share my self-change experience with you.
I have a special birthmark on my left arm. When I was young, I cared about it a lot. I thought it made me look different from others. I supposed everyone would laugh at me because of it.
One day, my best friend told me that my birthmark was like a unique symbol. Instead of hiding it, I should be proud of it. His words made me feel better. Therefore, I started to accept it.
Now, I truly believe that what makes us different is what makes us special. Anyway, I've learnt to love myself just the way I am.
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作、话题要点表达、自我成长类书面表达
【点评】
该范文紧扣“自我蜕变”主题，要点齐全，内容具体生动，语言简洁自然，符合演讲的语境，传递了积极向上的价值观，是一篇符合要求的优秀演讲稿。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题要求写一篇以“自我蜕变”为主题的英语演讲稿，需紧扣三个要点：描述曾经的忧虑、说明改变的原因与现状、分享感悟。写作时要承接给定开头，选取具体的个人经历让内容真实，语言需符合演讲的亲切语气，控制词数在80左右，避免出现真实信息，确保语句连贯。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，描述曾经的忧虑：选取左臂胎记这一具体困扰，说明当时的担忧（怕被嘲笑，觉得自己与众不同）；2. 阐述改变的契机（朋友鼓励称胎记是独特象征）及现在的状态（接受并正视自身不同）；3. 提炼感悟，升华主题，表达接纳自我、珍视独特性的观点，确保要点完整，语言简洁流畅，符合词数要求。
【答案】
Dear teachers and fellow students,
My name is Li Hua. Today I'd like to share my self-change experience with you.
I have a special birthmark on my left arm. When I was young, I cared about it a lot. I thought it made me look different from others. I supposed everyone would laugh at me because of it.
One day, my best friend told me that my birthmark was like a unique symbol. Instead of hiding it, I should be proud of it. His words made me feel better. Therefore, I started to accept it.
Now, I truly believe that what makes us different is what makes us special. Anyway, I've learnt to love myself just the way I am.
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作、话题要点表达、自我成长类书面表达
【点评】
该范文紧扣“自我蜕变”主题，要点齐全，内容具体生动，语言简洁自然，符合演讲的语境，传递了积极向上的价值观，是一篇符合要求的优秀演讲稿。
【难度系数】
0.6
