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假如你是李辉,你的英国笔友 Mike 来信想了解你最难忘的一次旅行经历。请你写一封电子邮件和他分享你最难忘的一次旅行经历及感受。词数 80~100。
内容要点:(1)描述旅行经历;(2)表达感受与收获。
Dear Mike,
I'm glad to hear that you are interested in my travel stories.
Yours,
Li Hui
假如你是李辉,你的英国笔友 Mike 来信想了解你最难忘的一次旅行经历。请你写一封电子邮件和他分享你最难忘的一次旅行经历及感受。词数 80~100。
内容要点:(1)描述旅行经历;(2)表达感受与收获。
Dear Mike,
I'm glad to hear that you are interested in my travel stories.
I have travelled to
many places, but it is the trip to Mount Tai
that left a deep impression on me.
Last National Day holiday, my parents
and I made a decision to challenge ourselves
by climbing such a high mountain. The
fresh air, the red maple trees and a number
of huge stones carved with ancient poems
attracted me a lot. However, I felt too tired
after climbing for half an hour to continue
my "challenge". As there were still
thousands of steps, I wanted to give up. At
that moment, my father came to comfort
me and encourage me, "Forget what
difficulty you are facing. Just move
forward." It took me over five hours to
reach the top and I couldn't tell you how
beautiful the sight was there.
In a word, the trip to Mount Tai not
only let me see the beauty of nature, but
also taught me how to overcome difficulties
with my strong will.
many places, but it is the trip to Mount Tai
that left a deep impression on me.
Last National Day holiday, my parents
and I made a decision to challenge ourselves
by climbing such a high mountain. The
fresh air, the red maple trees and a number
of huge stones carved with ancient poems
attracted me a lot. However, I felt too tired
after climbing for half an hour to continue
my "challenge". As there were still
thousands of steps, I wanted to give up. At
that moment, my father came to comfort
me and encourage me, "Forget what
difficulty you are facing. Just move
forward." It took me over five hours to
reach the top and I couldn't tell you how
beautiful the sight was there.
In a word, the trip to Mount Tai not
only let me see the beauty of nature, but
also taught me how to overcome difficulties
with my strong will.
Yours,
Li Hui
答案
One possible version:
Dear Mike,
I'm glad to hear that you are interested
in my travel stories. I have travelled to
many places, but it is the trip to Mount Tai
that left a deep impression on me.
Last National Day holiday, my parents
and I made a decision to challenge ourselves
by climbing such a high mountain. The
fresh air, the red maple trees and a number
of huge stones carved with ancient poems
attracted me a lot. However, I felt too tired
after climbing for half an hour to continue
my "challenge". As there were still
thousands of steps, I wanted to give up. At
that moment, my father came to comfort
me and encourage me, "Forget what
difficulty you are facing. Just move
forward." It took me over five hours to
reach the top and I couldn't tell you how
beautiful the sight was there.
In a word, the trip to Mount Tai not
only let me see the beauty of nature, but
also taught me how to overcome difficulties
with my strong will.
Yours,
Li Hui
Dear Mike,
I'm glad to hear that you are interested
in my travel stories. I have travelled to
many places, but it is the trip to Mount Tai
that left a deep impression on me.
Last National Day holiday, my parents
and I made a decision to challenge ourselves
by climbing such a high mountain. The
fresh air, the red maple trees and a number
of huge stones carved with ancient poems
attracted me a lot. However, I felt too tired
after climbing for half an hour to continue
my "challenge". As there were still
thousands of steps, I wanted to give up. At
that moment, my father came to comfort
me and encourage me, "Forget what
difficulty you are facing. Just move
forward." It took me over five hours to
reach the top and I couldn't tell you how
beautiful the sight was there.
In a word, the trip to Mount Tai not
only let me see the beauty of nature, but
also taught me how to overcome difficulties
with my strong will.
Yours,
Li Hui
解析
【分析】
本题要求以李辉的身份给英国笔友Mike写一封电子邮件，分享最难忘的旅行经历，需包含旅行经历描述和感受收获，词数控制在80~100。解题思路：1. 选定具体且有细节的难忘旅行（如泰山之旅，有具体事件支撑）；2. 结构安排：开头点明最难忘的旅行，中间详细描述旅行过程（时间、同行人、遇到的困难、他人鼓励、最终结果），结尾表达旅行的感受与收获；3. 注意邮件格式，语言简洁连贯，符合词数要求。
【解析】
写作步骤：1. 开头：回应Mike的兴趣，直接点明最难忘的旅行是泰山之旅；2. 主体：具体描述旅行经历：国庆假期和父母爬泰山，中途疲惫想放弃，父亲鼓励后坚持登顶，看到山顶美景；3. 结尾：总结旅行收获，既欣赏自然之美，又学会用意志克服困难；4. 注意使用恰当连接词，控制词数，符合英语邮件表达习惯。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Mike,
I'm glad to hear that you are interested in my travel stories. I have travelled to many places, but it is the trip to Mount Tai that left a deep impression on me.
Last National Day holiday, my parents and I made a decision to challenge ourselves by climbing such a high mountain. The fresh air, the red maple trees and a number of huge stones carved with ancient poems attracted me a lot. However, I felt too tired after climbing for half an hour to continue my "challenge". As there were still thousands of steps, I wanted to give up. At that moment, my father came to comfort me and encourage me, "Forget what difficulty you are facing. Just move forward." It took me over five hours to reach the top and I couldn't tell you how beautiful the sight was there.
In a word, the trip to Mount Tai not only let me see the beauty of nature, but also taught me how to overcome difficulties with my strong will.
Yours,
Li Hui
【知识点】
英语书信写作、旅行话题写作、情感表达
【点评】
该范文紧扣题目要求，要点齐全，结构清晰，通过具体事例展现了旅行的难忘之处，语言流畅自然，准确表达了旅行的感受与收获，符合词数要求，是一篇优秀的写作范例。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题要求以李辉的身份给英国笔友Mike写一封电子邮件，分享最难忘的旅行经历，需包含旅行经历描述和感受收获，词数控制在80~100。解题思路：1. 选定具体且有细节的难忘旅行（如泰山之旅，有具体事件支撑）；2. 结构安排：开头点明最难忘的旅行，中间详细描述旅行过程（时间、同行人、遇到的困难、他人鼓励、最终结果），结尾表达旅行的感受与收获；3. 注意邮件格式，语言简洁连贯，符合词数要求。
【解析】
写作步骤：1. 开头：回应Mike的兴趣，直接点明最难忘的旅行是泰山之旅；2. 主体：具体描述旅行经历：国庆假期和父母爬泰山，中途疲惫想放弃，父亲鼓励后坚持登顶，看到山顶美景；3. 结尾：总结旅行收获，既欣赏自然之美，又学会用意志克服困难；4. 注意使用恰当连接词，控制词数，符合英语邮件表达习惯。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Mike,
I'm glad to hear that you are interested in my travel stories. I have travelled to many places, but it is the trip to Mount Tai that left a deep impression on me.
Last National Day holiday, my parents and I made a decision to challenge ourselves by climbing such a high mountain. The fresh air, the red maple trees and a number of huge stones carved with ancient poems attracted me a lot. However, I felt too tired after climbing for half an hour to continue my "challenge". As there were still thousands of steps, I wanted to give up. At that moment, my father came to comfort me and encourage me, "Forget what difficulty you are facing. Just move forward." It took me over five hours to reach the top and I couldn't tell you how beautiful the sight was there.
In a word, the trip to Mount Tai not only let me see the beauty of nature, but also taught me how to overcome difficulties with my strong will.
Yours,
Li Hui
【知识点】
英语书信写作、旅行话题写作、情感表达
【点评】
该范文紧扣题目要求，要点齐全，结构清晰，通过具体事例展现了旅行的难忘之处，语言流畅自然，准确表达了旅行的感受与收获，符合词数要求，是一篇优秀的写作范例。
【难度系数】
0.6
