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七、写话练习。
请根据相关提示与要求,用英语写一段话。
情景:学校要举行"Being a good student"主题演讲比赛,你正完成演讲稿;
提示:可从学习、生活习惯和饮食、遵守交通规则等方面写怎么做。
要求:语句通顺有条理;表达正确无错误;书写规范;不少于7句话。
How can we be a good student?
请根据相关提示与要求,用英语写一段话。
情景:学校要举行"Being a good student"主题演讲比赛,你正完成演讲稿;
提示:可从学习、生活习惯和饮食、遵守交通规则等方面写怎么做。
要求:语句通顺有条理;表达正确无错误;书写规范;不少于7句话。
How can we be a good student?
答案
How can we be a good student?
First, we should work hard at all our subjects. We need to listen to our teachers carefully in class and finish our homework on time after school.
Second, we should form good living habits to keep healthy. We'd better get up and go to bed on time, and eat more healthy food like vegetables and fruits instead of too much junk food. We should also help our parents with some housework in our free time to be a thoughtful kid.
Third, we must follow the public rules all the time, especially the traffic rules when we are on the way to school or home. We must cross the road only when the traffic light is green, and we mustn't play on the road because it is very dangerous.
Besides, we should be polite to our teachers and the old, and be friendly to our classmates. If we can do all the things above, we will be qualified good students.
First, we should work hard at all our subjects. We need to listen to our teachers carefully in class and finish our homework on time after school.
Second, we should form good living habits to keep healthy. We'd better get up and go to bed on time, and eat more healthy food like vegetables and fruits instead of too much junk food. We should also help our parents with some housework in our free time to be a thoughtful kid.
Third, we must follow the public rules all the time, especially the traffic rules when we are on the way to school or home. We must cross the road only when the traffic light is green, and we mustn't play on the road because it is very dangerous.
Besides, we should be polite to our teachers and the old, and be friendly to our classmates. If we can do all the things above, we will be qualified good students.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道英语演讲稿写作题，首先要明确核心主题是“如何成为一名好学生”，同时要覆盖题干给出的学习、生活饮食习惯、遵守交通规则三个核心提示方向，还要满足不少于7句话的要求。我们可以按照分层逻辑来构思：第一步先用逻辑连接词First引出学习维度的内容，写出具体的学习相关的正向行为；第二步用Second引出生活和饮食好习惯的相关做法，补充作息、饮食的细节；第三步用Third引出遵守公共规则尤其是交通规则的内容，把交规的具体要求写清楚；最后可以补充礼貌待人的正向细节，再用一句话收尾总结，这样整体条理清晰，所有提示点都覆盖，很容易满足句数要求，也不会出现逻辑混乱的问题。
【解析】
1. 开篇承接题干给出的问句，使用First、Second、Third这类序列连接词分层排布内容，让演讲稿逻辑清晰，符合演讲的表达习惯；
2. 第一层对应学习维度要求：点明要努力学好所有学科，补充课堂认真听老师讲课、放学后按时完成作业的具体行为，内容贴合学生日常学习场景；
3. 第二层对应生活习惯和饮食的提示要求：点明要养成良好生活习惯保持健康，写出按时作息、多吃蔬菜水果等健康食物、少吃垃圾食品的具体做法，还补充了空闲时间帮父母做家务的细节，内容更充实；
4. 第三层对应遵守交通规则的提示要求：点明要始终遵守公共规则，尤其上下学路上要遵守交通规则，说明要绿灯才能过马路、不能在马路上玩耍的原因，符合提示要求；
5. 最后补充对师长有礼貌、对同学友好的正向行为，收尾总结做到以上内容就能成为合格的好学生，全文句数远超7句的要求，所有表达语法正确，语句通顺连贯。
【答案】
How can we be a good student?
First, we should work hard at all our subjects. We need to listen to our teachers carefully in class and finish our homework on time after school.
Second, we should form good living habits to keep healthy. We'd better get up and go to bed on time, and eat more healthy food like vegetables and fruits instead of too much junk food. We should also help our parents with some housework in our free time to be a thoughtful kid.
Third, we must follow the public rules all the time, especially the traffic rules when we are on the way to school or home. We must cross the road only when the traffic light is green, and we mustn't play on the road because it is very dangerous.
Besides, we should be polite to our teachers and the old, and be friendly to our classmates. If we can do all the things above, we will be qualified good students.
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作，话题内容组织，常用连接词运用
【点评】
这篇参考范文完全贴合题干所有要求，覆盖了学习、生活饮食、交通规则全部提示要点，用序列连接词让整体结构条理分明，内容细节丰富，所有英语表达准确地道，句数远高于不少于7句的要求，符合校园主题演讲的语境，学生写作时可以参考这种分层构思的方法，逐一对应提示要点填充内容，避免遗漏信息。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道英语演讲稿写作题，首先要明确核心主题是“如何成为一名好学生”，同时要覆盖题干给出的学习、生活饮食习惯、遵守交通规则三个核心提示方向，还要满足不少于7句话的要求。我们可以按照分层逻辑来构思：第一步先用逻辑连接词First引出学习维度的内容，写出具体的学习相关的正向行为；第二步用Second引出生活和饮食好习惯的相关做法，补充作息、饮食的细节；第三步用Third引出遵守公共规则尤其是交通规则的内容，把交规的具体要求写清楚；最后可以补充礼貌待人的正向细节，再用一句话收尾总结，这样整体条理清晰，所有提示点都覆盖，很容易满足句数要求，也不会出现逻辑混乱的问题。
【解析】
1. 开篇承接题干给出的问句，使用First、Second、Third这类序列连接词分层排布内容，让演讲稿逻辑清晰，符合演讲的表达习惯；
2. 第一层对应学习维度要求：点明要努力学好所有学科，补充课堂认真听老师讲课、放学后按时完成作业的具体行为，内容贴合学生日常学习场景；
3. 第二层对应生活习惯和饮食的提示要求：点明要养成良好生活习惯保持健康，写出按时作息、多吃蔬菜水果等健康食物、少吃垃圾食品的具体做法，还补充了空闲时间帮父母做家务的细节，内容更充实；
4. 第三层对应遵守交通规则的提示要求：点明要始终遵守公共规则，尤其上下学路上要遵守交通规则，说明要绿灯才能过马路、不能在马路上玩耍的原因，符合提示要求；
5. 最后补充对师长有礼貌、对同学友好的正向行为，收尾总结做到以上内容就能成为合格的好学生，全文句数远超7句的要求，所有表达语法正确，语句通顺连贯。
【答案】
How can we be a good student?
First, we should work hard at all our subjects. We need to listen to our teachers carefully in class and finish our homework on time after school.
Second, we should form good living habits to keep healthy. We'd better get up and go to bed on time, and eat more healthy food like vegetables and fruits instead of too much junk food. We should also help our parents with some housework in our free time to be a thoughtful kid.
Third, we must follow the public rules all the time, especially the traffic rules when we are on the way to school or home. We must cross the road only when the traffic light is green, and we mustn't play on the road because it is very dangerous.
Besides, we should be polite to our teachers and the old, and be friendly to our classmates. If we can do all the things above, we will be qualified good students.
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作，话题内容组织，常用连接词运用
【点评】
这篇参考范文完全贴合题干所有要求，覆盖了学习、生活饮食、交通规则全部提示要点，用序列连接词让整体结构条理分明，内容细节丰富，所有英语表达准确地道，句数远高于不少于7句的要求，符合校园主题演讲的语境，学生写作时可以参考这种分层构思的方法，逐一对应提示要点填充内容，避免遗漏信息。
【难度系数】
0.6
