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七、书面表达。
假如你是 Millie，你的英国朋友 Alice 想在五一节期间到你的家乡来游览。请根据所给的思维导图，给 Alice 写一封信介绍你的家乡并帮助 Alice 做好旅游攻略。
要求：
1. 短文应包含思维导图中的所有要点，可适当拓展和发挥；
2. 语句通顺，语意连贯，层次清楚，书写规范；
3. 词数 100 左右，信件首尾已经给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Alice,
Welcome to my hometown on May Day.
I'm looking forward to your coming.
Yours,
Millie
假如你是 Millie，你的英国朋友 Alice 想在五一节期间到你的家乡来游览。请根据所给的思维导图，给 Alice 写一封信介绍你的家乡并帮助 Alice 做好旅游攻略。
要求：
1. 短文应包含思维导图中的所有要点，可适当拓展和发挥；
2. 语句通顺，语意连贯，层次清楚，书写规范；
3. 词数 100 左右，信件首尾已经给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Alice,
Welcome to my hometown on May Day.
My hometown is a charming small city located in the south of China. During May Day, the weather is warm and sunny. The people here are friendly and warm-hearted, always ready to offer help to visitors.
There are plenty of places of interest to explore. You must visit the ancient temple which is a treasure of history and culture.
As for food, you can't miss the local food. The dumplings have juicy fillings. The hand-pulled noodles are chewy and delicious. They are must-tries.
Also, the night market is a great place to be, where you can try different kinds of delicious snacks, from sweet desserts to savoury (咸味的) grilled (烤的) foods.
I'm looking forward to your coming.
Yours,
Millie
答案
One possible version:
Dear Alice,
Welcome to my hometown on May Day.
My hometown is a charming small city located in the south of China. During May Day, the weather is warm and sunny. The people here are friendly and warm-hearted, always ready to offer help to visitors.
There are plenty of places of interest to explore. You must visit the ancient temple which is a treasure of history and culture. As for food, you can't miss the local food. The dumplings have juicy fillings. The hand-pulled noodles are chewy and delicious. They are must-tries. Also, the night market is a great place to be, where you can try different kinds of delicious snacks, from sweet desserts to savoury (咸味的) grilled (烤的) foods.
I'm looking forward to your coming.
Yours,
Millie
Dear Alice,
Welcome to my hometown on May Day.
My hometown is a charming small city located in the south of China. During May Day, the weather is warm and sunny. The people here are friendly and warm-hearted, always ready to offer help to visitors.
There are plenty of places of interest to explore. You must visit the ancient temple which is a treasure of history and culture. As for food, you can't miss the local food. The dumplings have juicy fillings. The hand-pulled noodles are chewy and delicious. They are must-tries. Also, the night market is a great place to be, where you can try different kinds of delicious snacks, from sweet desserts to savoury (咸味的) grilled (烤的) foods.
I'm looking forward to your coming.
Yours,
Millie
解析
【分析】
首先拿到题目先明确写作任务：你要以Millie的身份给英国好友Alice写一封介绍家乡的信，帮她规划五一的旅行，需要完全覆盖思维导图给出的所有要点。解题的思考顺序是：第一步先梳理写作逻辑，完全贴合思维导图的两层结构，先写基础信息板块，再写游玩相关的内容，逻辑会非常清晰。第二步填充基础信息部分：依次介绍家乡的地理位置、五一期间的天气特点、当地居民的性格特点，把Location、Weather、People三个要点全部覆盖。第三步填充游玩板块：先介绍值得打卡的名胜景点，再介绍当地特色美食，还可以适当补充夜市这类游玩场景做拓展，让攻略更实用。最后调整语句，用朋友之间亲切的语气表达，控制词数在要求范围内，保证语句通顺没有语法错误即可。
【解析】
1. 搭建写作框架：按照思维导图的分层逻辑，将正文分为两个部分，第一部分介绍家乡基础信息，第二部分介绍游玩相关的内容，层次分明。
2. 完成基础信息部分写作：开篇点明家乡是位于中国南方的魅力小城，接着说明五一期间当地天气温暖晴朗，非常适合出游，再介绍当地居民友善热心，随时愿意给游客提供帮助，完整覆盖位置、天气、居民三个核心要点。
3. 完成游玩内容部分写作：首先介绍必去的名胜古迹，比如承载历史文化的古寺，接着介绍当地特色美食，比如馅料鲜美的水饺、劲道可口的拉面，还可以补充夜市可以体验各类特色小吃，覆盖景点、美食的要点，适当拓展让攻略更详实。
4. 通读润色：调整语句的流畅度，修正语法错误，控制正文词数在100左右，保持好友之间交流的亲切语气，衔接好给定的书信首尾内容。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Alice,
Welcome to my hometown on May Day.
My hometown is a charming small city located in the south of China. During May Day, the weather is warm and sunny. The people here are friendly and warm-hearted, always ready to offer help to visitors.
There are plenty of places of interest to explore. You must visit the ancient temple which is a treasure of history and culture. As for food, you can't miss the local food. The dumplings have juicy fillings. The hand-pulled noodles are chewy and delicious. They are must-tries. Also, the night market is a great place to be, where you can try different kinds of delicious snacks, from sweet desserts to savoury (咸味的) grilled (烤的) foods.
I'm looking forward to your coming.
Yours,
Millie
【知识点】
英文书信写作，提纲类书面表达，旅游话题表达
【点评】
本题属于应用类书信写作，依托给定的思维导图明确了所有写作要点，降低了学生的构思门槛，既考查学生对地点、天气、人物基础信息的英语描述能力，也锻炼学生结合场景合理拓展旅游攻略内容的表达能力，符合初中英语写作的考查要求。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到题目先明确写作任务：你要以Millie的身份给英国好友Alice写一封介绍家乡的信，帮她规划五一的旅行，需要完全覆盖思维导图给出的所有要点。解题的思考顺序是：第一步先梳理写作逻辑，完全贴合思维导图的两层结构，先写基础信息板块，再写游玩相关的内容，逻辑会非常清晰。第二步填充基础信息部分：依次介绍家乡的地理位置、五一期间的天气特点、当地居民的性格特点，把Location、Weather、People三个要点全部覆盖。第三步填充游玩板块：先介绍值得打卡的名胜景点，再介绍当地特色美食，还可以适当补充夜市这类游玩场景做拓展，让攻略更实用。最后调整语句，用朋友之间亲切的语气表达，控制词数在要求范围内，保证语句通顺没有语法错误即可。
【解析】
1. 搭建写作框架：按照思维导图的分层逻辑，将正文分为两个部分，第一部分介绍家乡基础信息，第二部分介绍游玩相关的内容，层次分明。
2. 完成基础信息部分写作：开篇点明家乡是位于中国南方的魅力小城，接着说明五一期间当地天气温暖晴朗，非常适合出游，再介绍当地居民友善热心，随时愿意给游客提供帮助，完整覆盖位置、天气、居民三个核心要点。
3. 完成游玩内容部分写作：首先介绍必去的名胜古迹，比如承载历史文化的古寺，接着介绍当地特色美食，比如馅料鲜美的水饺、劲道可口的拉面，还可以补充夜市可以体验各类特色小吃，覆盖景点、美食的要点，适当拓展让攻略更详实。
4. 通读润色：调整语句的流畅度，修正语法错误，控制正文词数在100左右，保持好友之间交流的亲切语气，衔接好给定的书信首尾内容。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Alice,
Welcome to my hometown on May Day.
My hometown is a charming small city located in the south of China. During May Day, the weather is warm and sunny. The people here are friendly and warm-hearted, always ready to offer help to visitors.
There are plenty of places of interest to explore. You must visit the ancient temple which is a treasure of history and culture. As for food, you can't miss the local food. The dumplings have juicy fillings. The hand-pulled noodles are chewy and delicious. They are must-tries. Also, the night market is a great place to be, where you can try different kinds of delicious snacks, from sweet desserts to savoury (咸味的) grilled (烤的) foods.
I'm looking forward to your coming.
Yours,
Millie
【知识点】
英文书信写作，提纲类书面表达，旅游话题表达
【点评】
本题属于应用类书信写作，依托给定的思维导图明确了所有写作要点，降低了学生的构思门槛，既考查学生对地点、天气、人物基础信息的英语描述能力，也锻炼学生结合场景合理拓展旅游攻略内容的表达能力，符合初中英语写作的考查要求。
【难度系数】
0.7
