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学校将举办英语写作比赛。请根据所给提示，以“My Life in 20 Years”为题，写一篇参赛短文，分享你对未来的憧憬。词数80~100（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
My Life in 20 Years
I’m always working hard for a bright future. I imagine
审题指导：
1. 体裁:记叙文 2.时态:一般将来时 3.人称:第一人称
写作框架：
优秀范文：
My Life in 20 Years
I’m always working hard for a bright future. I imagine I will have a better life than now.
In 20 years, I will have a better family. I will take good care of① my parents because I have grown up②. Of course, I will have a big house. My family will live in my house. I will have a well-paid job. I must work hard and I am ready to take on③ new challenges.
When I am free, I will meet my friends. We will often talk about the past school life. We will often go abroad④ for vacations. I will have a great time during the vacation. Every day, after work, I will take some exercise with my friends because sports can keep us healthy and fit.⑥
I think my life in 20 years will be exciting and wonderful. And I am working hard to make it come true⑤.
亮点词块
①take good care of 好好照顾
②grow up 长大
③take on 承担；接受
④go abroad 出国
⑤come true 成真
高分句子
⑥...because sports can keep us healthy and fit.（because 引导原因状语从句）……因为体育运动可以让我们保持健康和健壮。
学校将举办英语写作比赛。请根据所给提示，以“My Life in 20 Years”为题，写一篇参赛短文，分享你对未来的憧憬。词数80~100（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
My Life in 20 Years
I’m always working hard for a bright future. I imagine
审题指导：
1. 体裁:记叙文 2.时态:一般将来时 3.人称:第一人称
写作框架：
优秀范文：
My Life in 20 Years
I’m always working hard for a bright future. I imagine I will have a better life than now.
In 20 years, I will have a better family. I will take good care of① my parents because I have grown up②. Of course, I will have a big house. My family will live in my house. I will have a well-paid job. I must work hard and I am ready to take on③ new challenges.
When I am free, I will meet my friends. We will often talk about the past school life. We will often go abroad④ for vacations. I will have a great time during the vacation. Every day, after work, I will take some exercise with my friends because sports can keep us healthy and fit.⑥
I think my life in 20 years will be exciting and wonderful. And I am working hard to make it come true⑤.
亮点词块
①take good care of 好好照顾
②grow up 长大
③take on 承担；接受
④go abroad 出国
⑤come true 成真
高分句子
⑥...because sports can keep us healthy and fit.（because 引导原因状语从句）……因为体育运动可以让我们保持健康和健壮。
答案
I will have a better life than now.
In 20 years, I will have a better family. I will take good care of my parents because I have grown up. Of course, I will have a big house and my family will live in it. I will have a well-paid job, and I am ready to take on new challenges at work.
When I am free, I will meet my friends. We will talk about the past school life, and we will often go abroad for vacations. I will also take exercise after work with friends because sports can keep us healthy and fit.
I think my life in 20 years will be exciting and wonderful. And I am working hard to make it come true.
In 20 years, I will have a better family. I will take good care of my parents because I have grown up. Of course, I will have a big house and my family will live in it. I will have a well-paid job, and I am ready to take on new challenges at work.
When I am free, I will meet my friends. We will talk about the past school life, and we will often go abroad for vacations. I will also take exercise after work with friends because sports can keep us healthy and fit.
I think my life in 20 years will be exciting and wonderful. And I am working hard to make it come true.
解析
【分析】
首先审题明确要求：体裁为记叙文，时态用一般将来时，人称第一人称，词数80~100，开头已给出，需围绕“20年后的生活”展开。写作时可分三部分：1.家庭层面：体现对父母的照顾、拥有安稳的居住环境；2.工作层面：突出职业发展的理想状态；3.休闲层面：展现与朋友相处、保持健康生活的状态。需运用给定亮点词块，注意语法正确，最后表达对未来的憧憬及努力实现梦想的决心。
【解析】
1. 衔接开头句，点明20年后的生活比现在更好；2. 写家庭：用take good care of体现照顾父母，说明因长大能承担责任，提及拥有大房子；3. 写工作：说明拥有高薪工作，愿意接受新挑战；4. 写休闲：空闲时和朋友相聚、回忆校园生活、出国度假，下班后一起锻炼保持健康；5. 结尾总结未来生活的美好，表达努力实现梦想的决心，全程使用一般将来时，运用亮点词块，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】
I will have a better life than now.
In 20 years, I will have a better family. I will take good care of my parents because I have grown up. Of course, I will have a big house and my family will live in it. I will have a well-paid job, and I am ready to take on new challenges at work.
When I am free, I will meet my friends. We will talk about the past school life, and we will often go abroad for vacations. I will also take exercise after work with friends because sports can keep us healthy and fit.
I think my life in 20 years will be exciting and wonderful. And I am working hard to make it come true.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；一般将来时运用；常用英语短语搭配
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，结构清晰，从家庭、工作、休闲三个维度展现对未来的憧憬，运用了多个亮点词块，语法准确，符合一般将来时的时态要求，还通过原因状语从句丰富句式，是一篇符合参赛要求的优秀短文。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先审题明确要求：体裁为记叙文，时态用一般将来时，人称第一人称，词数80~100，开头已给出，需围绕“20年后的生活”展开。写作时可分三部分：1.家庭层面：体现对父母的照顾、拥有安稳的居住环境；2.工作层面：突出职业发展的理想状态；3.休闲层面：展现与朋友相处、保持健康生活的状态。需运用给定亮点词块，注意语法正确，最后表达对未来的憧憬及努力实现梦想的决心。
【解析】
1. 衔接开头句，点明20年后的生活比现在更好；2. 写家庭：用take good care of体现照顾父母，说明因长大能承担责任，提及拥有大房子；3. 写工作：说明拥有高薪工作，愿意接受新挑战；4. 写休闲：空闲时和朋友相聚、回忆校园生活、出国度假，下班后一起锻炼保持健康；5. 结尾总结未来生活的美好，表达努力实现梦想的决心，全程使用一般将来时，运用亮点词块，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】
I will have a better life than now.
In 20 years, I will have a better family. I will take good care of my parents because I have grown up. Of course, I will have a big house and my family will live in it. I will have a well-paid job, and I am ready to take on new challenges at work.
When I am free, I will meet my friends. We will talk about the past school life, and we will often go abroad for vacations. I will also take exercise after work with friends because sports can keep us healthy and fit.
I think my life in 20 years will be exciting and wonderful. And I am working hard to make it come true.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；一般将来时运用；常用英语短语搭配
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，结构清晰，从家庭、工作、休闲三个维度展现对未来的憧憬，运用了多个亮点词块，语法准确，符合一般将来时的时态要求，还通过原因状语从句丰富句式，是一篇符合参赛要求的优秀短文。
【难度系数】
0.6
