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第3步 典例分析
阳春三月好风光，踏青赏景正当时。走出户外，拥抱自然，乐享健康生活。阳光中学八年级三班举行了一次户外活动。假设你是该班学生李华，打算在学校英语俱乐部分享此次活动的经历和感受。请你以“An outdoor activity”为题，根据以下提示写一篇英语短文。
注意：1. 语句通顺、意思连贯、符合题意；
2. 图中所示活动形式非限定性内容，仅供参考；
3. 词数80左右。
【审题思路】
1. 体裁：记叙文。
2. 主题：介绍一次班级户外活动的经历和感受。
3. 人称：以第一人称为主。
4. 时态：一般过去时。
阳春三月好风光，踏青赏景正当时。走出户外，拥抱自然，乐享健康生活。阳光中学八年级三班举行了一次户外活动。假设你是该班学生李华，打算在学校英语俱乐部分享此次活动的经历和感受。请你以“An outdoor activity”为题，根据以下提示写一篇英语短文。
注意：1. 语句通顺、意思连贯、符合题意；
2. 图中所示活动形式非限定性内容，仅供参考；
3. 词数80左右。
【审题思路】
1. 体裁：记叙文。
2. 主题：介绍一次班级户外活动的经历和感受。
3. 人称：以第一人称为主。
4. 时态：一般过去时。
答案
An outdoor activity
Last Sunday, our class had an exciting outdoor activity in a nearby park. It was sunny and pleasant.
We rode our bikes there in the morning. Then we put up tents and shared snacks with each other. After that, we played group games and flew kites, which made us laugh a lot. The beautiful scenery and fresh air made everyone feel relaxed. We also took many photos to remember this happy time.
I really enjoyed this activity because it not only helped us get close to nature, but also strengthened our friendship.
Last Sunday, our class had an exciting outdoor activity in a nearby park. It was sunny and pleasant.
We rode our bikes there in the morning. Then we put up tents and shared snacks with each other. After that, we played group games and flew kites, which made us laugh a lot. The beautiful scenery and fresh air made everyone feel relaxed. We also took many photos to remember this happy time.
I really enjoyed this activity because it not only helped us get close to nature, but also strengthened our friendship.
解析
这是一篇记叙文写作，需以第一人称、一般过去时来完成。写作时可按照“开头点明活动基本信息（时间、地点、活动类型）-主体描述活动经历与当时感受-结尾表达对此次户外活动的看法”的结构展开，要保证语句通顺连贯，词数符合要求，内容贴合户外活动主题。
第4步 实战演练
[新考法·思维导图提示]与家人一同亲近大自然既能体验发现奇妙自然的欣喜，又能感受彼此心灵贴近的温暖。上周末，你和家人开启了一场难忘的露营之旅。请你根据以下思维导图提示写一篇日记，记录这次露营的经历和感受。
要求：1. 日记必须包括思维导图中所有的提示信息，条理清楚，行文连贯，可适当发挥；
2. 词数80左右，日记开头已给出，不计入总词数。
11 October
My family went camping last weekend.
[新考法·思维导图提示]与家人一同亲近大自然既能体验发现奇妙自然的欣喜，又能感受彼此心灵贴近的温暖。上周末，你和家人开启了一场难忘的露营之旅。请你根据以下思维导图提示写一篇日记，记录这次露营的经历和感受。
要求：1. 日记必须包括思维导图中所有的提示信息，条理清楚，行文连贯，可适当发挥；
2. 词数80左右，日记开头已给出，不计入总词数。
11 October
My family went camping last weekend.
答案
【实战演练】
11 October
My family went camping last weekend. We chose a beautiful spot near a lake. Before the trip, Mum packed things like tents, food, and drinks. Dad planned the trip. During the journey, we enjoyed beautiful landscapes. Upon arrival, Dad and my brother put up our tent together. Then, Mum and I collected some dry leaves and branches to make a fire. We cooked delicious meals over the fire and sat around the fire, sharing stories and jokes under the starry sky. Before sleeping, we cleaned up the rubbish. I felt so excited and happy during the trip. I made up my mind to get close to nature as often as possible.
11 October
My family went camping last weekend. We chose a beautiful spot near a lake. Before the trip, Mum packed things like tents, food, and drinks. Dad planned the trip. During the journey, we enjoyed beautiful landscapes. Upon arrival, Dad and my brother put up our tent together. Then, Mum and I collected some dry leaves and branches to make a fire. We cooked delicious meals over the fire and sat around the fire, sharing stories and jokes under the starry sky. Before sleeping, we cleaned up the rubbish. I felt so excited and happy during the trip. I made up my mind to get close to nature as often as possible.
解析
【分析】本题要求根据思维导图提示写英语日记，需遵循时间顺序（旅行前、旅途中、到达后、夜晚、睡前），整合所有思维导图中的关键信息，使用一般过去时，确保行文连贯，适当补充细节，符合日记格式要求，完成一篇80词左右的短文。
【解析】首先，明确日记格式，开头已给出，时间为11 October。接着按思维导图的时间节点依次写作：1. 旅行前：妈妈收拾物品，爸爸规划行程；2. 旅途中：欣赏美丽风景；3. 到达后：爸爸和哥哥搭帐篷，“我”和妈妈生火；4. 夜晚：围坐篝火分享故事和笑话；5. 睡前：清理现场。最后补充个人感受，使内容完整连贯，注意使用一般过去时，控制词数。
【答案】11 October
My family went camping last weekend. We chose a beautiful spot near a lake. Before the trip, Mum packed things like tents, food, and drinks. Dad planned the trip. During the journey, we enjoyed beautiful landscapes. Upon arrival, Dad and my brother put up our tent together. Then, Mum and I collected some dry leaves and branches to make a fire. We cooked delicious meals over the fire and sat around the fire, sharing stories and jokes under the starry sky. Before sleeping, we cleaned up the rubbish. I felt so excited and happy during the trip. I made up my mind to get close to nature as often as possible.
【知识点】英语日记写作、思维导图信息整合、一般过去时
【点评】本题结合思维导图考查英语日记写作，要求学生准确提取并整合所有提示信息，同时注重语言的连贯性和时态的正确运用，能有效提升学生的书面表达能力和信息处理能力。
【难度系数】0.5
【解析】首先，明确日记格式，开头已给出，时间为11 October。接着按思维导图的时间节点依次写作：1. 旅行前：妈妈收拾物品，爸爸规划行程；2. 旅途中：欣赏美丽风景；3. 到达后：爸爸和哥哥搭帐篷，“我”和妈妈生火；4. 夜晚：围坐篝火分享故事和笑话；5. 睡前：清理现场。最后补充个人感受，使内容完整连贯，注意使用一般过去时，控制词数。
【答案】11 October
My family went camping last weekend. We chose a beautiful spot near a lake. Before the trip, Mum packed things like tents, food, and drinks. Dad planned the trip. During the journey, we enjoyed beautiful landscapes. Upon arrival, Dad and my brother put up our tent together. Then, Mum and I collected some dry leaves and branches to make a fire. We cooked delicious meals over the fire and sat around the fire, sharing stories and jokes under the starry sky. Before sleeping, we cleaned up the rubbish. I felt so excited and happy during the trip. I made up my mind to get close to nature as often as possible.
【知识点】英语日记写作、思维导图信息整合、一般过去时
【点评】本题结合思维导图考查英语日记写作，要求学生准确提取并整合所有提示信息，同时注重语言的连贯性和时态的正确运用，能有效提升学生的书面表达能力和信息处理能力。
【难度系数】0.5
