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六、书面表达。
越来越多的人选择云游。有的同学喜欢线上云游，有的同学则喜欢线下旅游。21世纪英文报对在校学生进行了关于“online tour”的问卷调查。请你根据调查问卷和你的实际情况，写一篇英语短文投稿。
注意事项：
1. 短文必须包括所有提示内容，可适当发挥，要求语句通顺、意思连贯；
2. 词数90左右，短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数；
3. 短文中不得提及真实人名、校名等相关信息。
Online Tour
Recently, more and more people choose online tour.
越来越多的人选择云游。有的同学喜欢线上云游，有的同学则喜欢线下旅游。21世纪英文报对在校学生进行了关于“online tour”的问卷调查。请你根据调查问卷和你的实际情况，写一篇英语短文投稿。
注意事项：
1. 短文必须包括所有提示内容，可适当发挥，要求语句通顺、意思连贯；
2. 词数90左右，短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数；
3. 短文中不得提及真实人名、校名等相关信息。
Online Tour
Recently, more and more people choose online tour.
I like online tour very much because it has many advantages. First, it's very convenient. I can visit any place in the world without leaving home. Second, it saves time and money. There's no need to spend on transportation or hotels. Third, online tours offer rich resources, such as digital museums where I can learn a lot about history and culture.
For this summer, I plan to have an online tour of ancient cities in China.
I will visit the digital versions of Xi'an, watch virtual shows about ancient life, and read detailed introductions online. It will be a wonderful experience to explore the past in a modern way.
答案
One possible version:
Online Tour
Recently, more and more people choose online tour. I like online tour very much because it has many advantages. First, it's very convenient. I can visit any place in the world without leaving home. Second, it saves time and money. There's no need to spend on transportation or hotels. Third, online tours offer rich resources, such as digital museums where I can learn a lot about history and culture.
For this summer, I plan to have an online tour of ancient cities in China. I will visit the digital versions of Xi'an, watch virtual shows about ancient life, and read detailed introductions online. It will be a wonderful experience to explore the past in a modern way.
Online Tour
Recently, more and more people choose online tour. I like online tour very much because it has many advantages. First, it's very convenient. I can visit any place in the world without leaving home. Second, it saves time and money. There's no need to spend on transportation or hotels. Third, online tours offer rich resources, such as digital museums where I can learn a lot about history and culture.
For this summer, I plan to have an online tour of ancient cities in China. I will visit the digital versions of Xi'an, watch virtual shows about ancient life, and read detailed introductions online. It will be a wonderful experience to explore the past in a modern way.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先第一步先梳理题干要求和所有必须覆盖的内容：首先要对应问卷的4个问题依次完成内容输出：第一先明确表明自己是否喜欢线上云游，第二给出你对线上云游的整体评价，第三列出至少3个喜欢/不喜欢的合理理由，第四说明自己今年夏天的旅行计划。接下来可以先选定立场，比如选择支持线上云游，搭建写作逻辑：承接题目给出的开头，先亮明喜好，再给出整体评价，用衔接词分点列出3个理由，最后补充贴合主题的暑期旅行计划，适当添加细节让语句连贯，控制总词数在90左右，全程不要提及真实人名、校名即可完成符合要求的短文。
【解析】
1. 梳理核心必写要点，确保无遗漏：
① 态度表态：明确说明自己很喜欢线上云游
② 整体评价：点明线上云游有诸多优势
③ 三条理由：a. 足不出户就能游览全球各地，十分便利；b. 无需花费交通、住宿的费用，省时又省钱；c. 线上有丰富的数字资源，比如数字博物馆可以学习很多历史文化知识
④ 暑期计划：说明今年暑假计划线上游览中国的古城，参观西安数字展馆、观看古代生活虚拟演出、查阅线上相关介绍
2. 用合适的衔接词（first/second/third）串联内容，调整语句符合英语表达习惯，检查词数和语法，删除无关内容，规避真实个人信息，最终得到通顺的短文。
【答案】
Online Tour
Recently, more and more people choose online tour. I like online tour very much because it has many advantages. First, it's very convenient. I can visit any place in the world without leaving home. Second, it saves time and money. There's no need to spend on transportation or hotels. Third, online tours offer rich resources, such as digital museums where I can learn a lot about history and culture.
For this summer, I plan to have an online tour of ancient cities in China. I will visit the digital versions of Xi'an, watch virtual shows about ancient life, and read detailed introductions online. It will be a wonderful experience to explore the past in a modern way.
【知识点】
英语观点写作，要点整合表达，话题词汇运用
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了问卷全部4个要点，立场清晰，三条理由逻辑通顺合理，暑期计划贴合线上云游的主题，衔接词使用自然恰当，语句流畅地道，词数符合要求，没有出现违规的个人信息，完全符合题目的各项评分标准。同学们写作时要注意优先保证所有要点都覆盖，再通过合理的衔接让行文更连贯，避免出现基础语法错误。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题，首先第一步先梳理题干要求和所有必须覆盖的内容：首先要对应问卷的4个问题依次完成内容输出：第一先明确表明自己是否喜欢线上云游，第二给出你对线上云游的整体评价，第三列出至少3个喜欢/不喜欢的合理理由，第四说明自己今年夏天的旅行计划。接下来可以先选定立场，比如选择支持线上云游，搭建写作逻辑：承接题目给出的开头，先亮明喜好，再给出整体评价，用衔接词分点列出3个理由，最后补充贴合主题的暑期旅行计划，适当添加细节让语句连贯，控制总词数在90左右，全程不要提及真实人名、校名即可完成符合要求的短文。
【解析】
1. 梳理核心必写要点，确保无遗漏：
① 态度表态：明确说明自己很喜欢线上云游
② 整体评价：点明线上云游有诸多优势
③ 三条理由：a. 足不出户就能游览全球各地，十分便利；b. 无需花费交通、住宿的费用，省时又省钱；c. 线上有丰富的数字资源，比如数字博物馆可以学习很多历史文化知识
④ 暑期计划：说明今年暑假计划线上游览中国的古城，参观西安数字展馆、观看古代生活虚拟演出、查阅线上相关介绍
2. 用合适的衔接词（first/second/third）串联内容，调整语句符合英语表达习惯，检查词数和语法，删除无关内容，规避真实个人信息，最终得到通顺的短文。
【答案】
Online Tour
Recently, more and more people choose online tour. I like online tour very much because it has many advantages. First, it's very convenient. I can visit any place in the world without leaving home. Second, it saves time and money. There's no need to spend on transportation or hotels. Third, online tours offer rich resources, such as digital museums where I can learn a lot about history and culture.
For this summer, I plan to have an online tour of ancient cities in China. I will visit the digital versions of Xi'an, watch virtual shows about ancient life, and read detailed introductions online. It will be a wonderful experience to explore the past in a modern way.
【知识点】
英语观点写作，要点整合表达，话题词汇运用
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了问卷全部4个要点，立场清晰，三条理由逻辑通顺合理，暑期计划贴合线上云游的主题，衔接词使用自然恰当，语句流畅地道，词数符合要求，没有出现违规的个人信息，完全符合题目的各项评分标准。同学们写作时要注意优先保证所有要点都覆盖，再通过合理的衔接让行文更连贯，避免出现基础语法错误。
【难度系数】
0.7
