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任务二:书面表达。
古人云:"读万卷书,行万里路。"这个假期你去了什么有趣的地方吗?请根据下列写作要点写一篇短文,介绍一下你的假期经历。可适当发挥,不少于 60 词。
写作要点:
1. Where did you go and how did you go there?
2. Who did you go with?
3. What did you see? How did you feel?
4. What did you learn?
My Summer Vacation
古人云:"读万卷书,行万里路。"这个假期你去了什么有趣的地方吗?请根据下列写作要点写一篇短文,介绍一下你的假期经历。可适当发挥,不少于 60 词。
写作要点:
1. Where did you go and how did you go there?
2. Who did you go with?
3. What did you see? How did you feel?
4. What did you learn?
My Summer Vacation
答案
My Summer Vacation
I went to the beautiful coastal city Qingdao with my parents this summer vacation. We went there by high-speed train, and the trip was very comfortable.
When we arrived, we saw the clear blue sea and long golden beaches. Many visitors played happily on the beach. I felt so excited and relaxed when I walked on the soft sand and enjoyed the cool sea wind.
We also visited the famous old buildings in the city and tasted tasty local seafood. From this trip, I learned that travelling can not only let me relax, but also open my eyes to different cultures outside. I really had a wonderful summer vacation.
I went to the beautiful coastal city Qingdao with my parents this summer vacation. We went there by high-speed train, and the trip was very comfortable.
When we arrived, we saw the clear blue sea and long golden beaches. Many visitors played happily on the beach. I felt so excited and relaxed when I walked on the soft sand and enjoyed the cool sea wind.
We also visited the famous old buildings in the city and tasted tasty local seafood. From this trip, I learned that travelling can not only let me relax, but also open my eyes to different cultures outside. I really had a wonderful summer vacation.
解析
【分析】首先审题，明确题目要求是介绍假期经历，需覆盖四个写作要点，词数不少于60词，描述过去的假期需用一般过去时。接着构思内容：选择具体地点（如青岛），确定同行者（父母）、交通方式（高铁）；再规划见闻（海、沙滩、老建筑）、感受（兴奋放松）；最后提炼感悟（旅行的意义）。组织语言时要加入细节让内容更生动，确保语句通顺，要点不遗漏。
【解析】1. 时态确定：描述假期经历用一般过去时，动词使用过去式。2. 结构布局：开头点明假期去向、同行者及交通；中间描写所见景物、活动及个人感受；结尾升华主题，点明学到的道理。3. 要点落实：严格按照题目给出的四个写作要点展开，每个要点都有具体内容，不遗漏要求。4. 语言优化：适当添加细节（如柔软的沙滩、美味的海鲜），丰富内容，保证词数达标。
【答案】My Summer Vacation
I went to the beautiful coastal city Qingdao with my parents this summer vacation. We went there by high-speed train, and the trip was very comfortable.
When we arrived, we saw the clear blue sea and long golden beaches. Many visitors played happily on the beach. I felt so excited and relaxed when I walked on the soft sand and enjoyed the cool sea wind.
We also visited the famous old buildings in the city and tasted tasty local seafood. From this trip, I learned that travelling can not only let me relax, but also open my eyes to different cultures outside. I really had a wonderful summer vacation.
【知识点】英语书面表达、一般过去时、要点式写作
【点评】本文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖所有写作要点，时态运用准确，内容具体充实，有细节描写，结尾升华主题，语言流畅自然，符合初中英语书面表达的评分标准，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】0.7
【解析】1. 时态确定：描述假期经历用一般过去时，动词使用过去式。2. 结构布局：开头点明假期去向、同行者及交通；中间描写所见景物、活动及个人感受；结尾升华主题，点明学到的道理。3. 要点落实：严格按照题目给出的四个写作要点展开，每个要点都有具体内容，不遗漏要求。4. 语言优化：适当添加细节（如柔软的沙滩、美味的海鲜），丰富内容，保证词数达标。
【答案】My Summer Vacation
I went to the beautiful coastal city Qingdao with my parents this summer vacation. We went there by high-speed train, and the trip was very comfortable.
When we arrived, we saw the clear blue sea and long golden beaches. Many visitors played happily on the beach. I felt so excited and relaxed when I walked on the soft sand and enjoyed the cool sea wind.
We also visited the famous old buildings in the city and tasted tasty local seafood. From this trip, I learned that travelling can not only let me relax, but also open my eyes to different cultures outside. I really had a wonderful summer vacation.
【知识点】英语书面表达、一般过去时、要点式写作
【点评】本文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖所有写作要点，时态运用准确，内容具体充实，有细节描写，结尾升华主题，语言流畅自然，符合初中英语书面表达的评分标准，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】0.7
