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七、书面表达(满分 25 分)
假如你是李明，来自兴化(Xinghua)，住在 Happiness Home。请根据下面的提示和要求，写一篇英语短文，向你的朋友 Simon 介绍你的家乡。
提示：
1. Where is your hometown? What is it like?
2. What interesting places in your hometown do you like? What can people do there?
3. Where do you live? How are your neighbours?(举 1—2 个例子)
4. What do you want to say to visitors?
水上森林景区(Water Forest Scenic Spot)；千垛景区(Qianduo Scenic Area)
要求：
1. 词数 100 左右；
2. 包含以上所给要点，可以适当拓展；条理清晰，语意连贯；表述准确，句式灵活，字迹工整。开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Hello, Simon. I'm Li Ming. I'm going to show you around my hometown.
假如你是李明，来自兴化(Xinghua)，住在 Happiness Home。请根据下面的提示和要求，写一篇英语短文，向你的朋友 Simon 介绍你的家乡。
提示：
1. Where is your hometown? What is it like?
2. What interesting places in your hometown do you like? What can people do there?
3. Where do you live? How are your neighbours?(举 1—2 个例子)
4. What do you want to say to visitors?
水上森林景区(Water Forest Scenic Spot)；千垛景区(Qianduo Scenic Area)
要求：
1. 词数 100 左右；
2. 包含以上所给要点，可以适当拓展；条理清晰，语意连贯；表述准确，句式灵活，字迹工整。开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Hello, Simon. I'm Li Ming. I'm going to show you around my hometown.
答案
One possible version:
Hello, Simon. I'm Li Ming. I'm going to show you around my hometown.
Xinghua is my hometown. It is a very beautiful city. The air here is very fresh. Every year, lots of visitors come to visit Water Forest Scenic Spot and Qianduo Scenic Area. We can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing there. I live in a new neighbourhood. The neighbours are kind and helpful. Volunteers often help people with all kinds of problems. They often help children with their homework. They help people check the computers and fix the bikes. My favourite place is Black Towel Park. It is in the north of Xinghua. It is a good place to meet friends.
I like my hometown very much. Welcome to my hometown.
Hello, Simon. I'm Li Ming. I'm going to show you around my hometown.
Xinghua is my hometown. It is a very beautiful city. The air here is very fresh. Every year, lots of visitors come to visit Water Forest Scenic Spot and Qianduo Scenic Area. We can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing there. I live in a new neighbourhood. The neighbours are kind and helpful. Volunteers often help people with all kinds of problems. They often help children with their homework. They help people check the computers and fix the bikes. My favourite place is Black Towel Park. It is in the north of Xinghua. It is a good place to meet friends.
I like my hometown very much. Welcome to my hometown.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先明确写作要求：身份是李明，收信人是好友Simon，核心主题是介绍自己的家乡兴化。接下来我们要逐一对应题干给出的4个提示要点规划内容：1. 首先承接已给开头，先点明家乡是兴化，描述它环境优美、空气清新的整体特点；2. 接下来介绍指定的两个知名景区水上森林、千垛景区，说明游客可以在景区赏花、漫步、聆听鸟鸣，享受自然乐趣；3. 之后介绍自己居住在Happiness Home，举1-2个邻居热心互助的实例，比如志愿者帮居民检修家电、辅导孩子功课，体现邻里友善的氛围；4. 最后收尾表达自己对家乡的喜爱，向来访的游客发出欢迎。写作时注意控制总词数在100左右，多用简单句搭配少量灵活句式，避免语法错误，保证语意连贯即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：文体为介绍类说明文，人称以第一人称为主，整体时态使用一般现在时，必须覆盖所有题干给出的提示要点，不能遗漏指定的两个景区专有名词，词数控制在100左右，已给出的开头不计入总词数。
2. 谋篇布局：
① 第一部分：承接开头，介绍家乡兴化的基本属性，点明它是一座风景优美的城市，本地空气清新，宜居舒适。
② 第二部分：介绍家乡的特色景点，提及水上森林景区和千垛景区，说明游客可以在当地赏花、听鸟鸣，亲近自然，补充日常休闲的好去处。
③ 第三部分：介绍自己居住的小区，描述邻居们友善热心的特点，举例说明志愿者会帮居民处理各类问题，比如辅导孩子作业、检修自行车等。
④ 结尾部分：表达自己对家乡的喜爱，向所有游客发出到访邀请。
3. 润色调整：梳理语句逻辑，调整语序让行文流畅自然，修正语法错误，最终形成符合要求的短文。
【答案】
One possible version:
Hello, Simon. I'm Li Ming. I'm going to show you around my hometown.
Xinghua is my hometown. It is a very beautiful city. The air here is very fresh. Every year, lots of visitors come to visit Water Forest Scenic Spot and Qianduo Scenic Area. We can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing there. I live in a new neighbourhood. The neighbours are kind and helpful. Volunteers often help people with all kinds of problems. They often help children with their homework. They help people check the computers and fix the bikes. My favourite place is Black Towel Park. It is in the north of Xinghua. It is a good place to meet friends.
I like my hometown very much. Welcome to my hometown.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作，一般现在时应用，信息整合表达
【点评】
本题属于初中阶段常见的要点提示类书面表达，难度适中，学生只要按照题干给出的4个提示点逐一填充内容，不遗漏指定的专有名词，补充合理的邻里互助实例，理顺行文逻辑，就能写出符合要求的短文，写作时注意不要堆砌复杂长句，保证表述准确通顺即可拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先明确写作要求：身份是李明，收信人是好友Simon，核心主题是介绍自己的家乡兴化。接下来我们要逐一对应题干给出的4个提示要点规划内容：1. 首先承接已给开头，先点明家乡是兴化，描述它环境优美、空气清新的整体特点；2. 接下来介绍指定的两个知名景区水上森林、千垛景区，说明游客可以在景区赏花、漫步、聆听鸟鸣，享受自然乐趣；3. 之后介绍自己居住在Happiness Home，举1-2个邻居热心互助的实例，比如志愿者帮居民检修家电、辅导孩子功课，体现邻里友善的氛围；4. 最后收尾表达自己对家乡的喜爱，向来访的游客发出欢迎。写作时注意控制总词数在100左右，多用简单句搭配少量灵活句式，避免语法错误，保证语意连贯即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：文体为介绍类说明文，人称以第一人称为主，整体时态使用一般现在时，必须覆盖所有题干给出的提示要点，不能遗漏指定的两个景区专有名词，词数控制在100左右，已给出的开头不计入总词数。
2. 谋篇布局：
① 第一部分：承接开头，介绍家乡兴化的基本属性，点明它是一座风景优美的城市，本地空气清新，宜居舒适。
② 第二部分：介绍家乡的特色景点，提及水上森林景区和千垛景区，说明游客可以在当地赏花、听鸟鸣，亲近自然，补充日常休闲的好去处。
③ 第三部分：介绍自己居住的小区，描述邻居们友善热心的特点，举例说明志愿者会帮居民处理各类问题，比如辅导孩子作业、检修自行车等。
④ 结尾部分：表达自己对家乡的喜爱，向所有游客发出到访邀请。
3. 润色调整：梳理语句逻辑，调整语序让行文流畅自然，修正语法错误，最终形成符合要求的短文。
【答案】
One possible version:
Hello, Simon. I'm Li Ming. I'm going to show you around my hometown.
Xinghua is my hometown. It is a very beautiful city. The air here is very fresh. Every year, lots of visitors come to visit Water Forest Scenic Spot and Qianduo Scenic Area. We can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing there. I live in a new neighbourhood. The neighbours are kind and helpful. Volunteers often help people with all kinds of problems. They often help children with their homework. They help people check the computers and fix the bikes. My favourite place is Black Towel Park. It is in the north of Xinghua. It is a good place to meet friends.
I like my hometown very much. Welcome to my hometown.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作，一般现在时应用，信息整合表达
【点评】
本题属于初中阶段常见的要点提示类书面表达，难度适中，学生只要按照题干给出的4个提示点逐一填充内容，不遗漏指定的专有名词，补充合理的邻里互助实例，理顺行文逻辑，就能写出符合要求的短文，写作时注意不要堆砌复杂长句，保证表述准确通顺即可拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.6
