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八、书面表达(共1题;满分25分)
分享能将平凡的瞬间变为温暖的记忆。一本好书、一首治愈
的歌曲,或是一份自制美食都值得与他人共享。请以"When I
shared with my friend"为题,用英语写一篇短文,描述
你印象最深的一次分享经历,并谈谈你对分享的意义的理解。
注意:
1. 词数:100左右;
2. 请先将标题填写完整,再写文章;
3. 文中不得出现与考生相关的真实校名和姓名等信息。
When I shared with my friend
分享能将平凡的瞬间变为温暖的记忆。一本好书、一首治愈
的歌曲,或是一份自制美食都值得与他人共享。请以"When I
shared with my friend"为题,用英语写一篇短文,描述
你印象最深的一次分享经历,并谈谈你对分享的意义的理解。
注意:
1. 词数:100左右;
2. 请先将标题填写完整,再写文章;
3. 文中不得出现与考生相关的真实校名和姓名等信息。
When I shared with my friend
答案
八、书面表达
【审题指导】
本文是一篇话题作文,介绍一次分享的经历;本文以一般过去时为主;根据题干要求,首先补充文章标题,以所补充的内容展开描写分享的经历,可适当补充事情经历的细节,以使文章连贯。
【写作指导】
步骤 内容
第一步 总体介绍所分享的事物;
第二步 详细描述分享的经过和细节;
第三步 抒发感情,总结全文。
One possible version:
When I shared a song with my friend
Last month,I shared my favourite song Count on Me with my best friend Lily.It's a cheerful song about friendship.When she listened to it,she smiled and said,"How beautiful!"We read the lyrics to have a better understanding about the writer's idea.Later,we sang it together.Sharing a song made us happier.Singing became our common hobby.
I think sharing is like giving a small gift.It brings people closer and makes friendship stronger.
【审题指导】
本文是一篇话题作文,介绍一次分享的经历;本文以一般过去时为主;根据题干要求,首先补充文章标题,以所补充的内容展开描写分享的经历,可适当补充事情经历的细节,以使文章连贯。
【写作指导】
步骤 内容
第一步 总体介绍所分享的事物;
第二步 详细描述分享的经过和细节;
第三步 抒发感情,总结全文。
One possible version:
When I shared a song with my friend
Last month,I shared my favourite song Count on Me with my best friend Lily.It's a cheerful song about friendship.When she listened to it,she smiled and said,"How beautiful!"We read the lyrics to have a better understanding about the writer's idea.Later,we sang it together.Sharing a song made us happier.Singing became our common hobby.
I think sharing is like giving a small gift.It brings people closer and makes friendship stronger.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步要明确核心要求：首先需要补全半命题标题，优先选择题干提示过的、自己熟悉好展开的分享对象，比如歌曲、好书、自制美食这类内容，避免选太偏的素材导致无话可写。接下来确定时态规则：描述过去的分享经历用一般过去时，最后谈对分享的理解用一般现在时即可。然后搭建行文逻辑：第一部分开篇点题，交代事件的时间、分享的好友身份、要分享的事物基本信息；第二部分补充分享过程的小细节，让内容更真实饱满；第三部分收尾升华，点明自己对分享意义的理解，最后检查词数控制在100左右，确认没有出现真实校名、姓名等违规信息，调整语句通顺就可以完成写作。
【解析】
写作可按照三步法完成：
步骤1：补全标题，选择易展开的分享事物，比如选"a song"，确定完整标题为When I shared a song with my friend。
步骤2：开篇引入事件，交代事件发生的时间、分享对象，简单介绍所分享事物的特点，自然引出分享的场景。
步骤3：补充分享过程的细节，比如对方听到分享内容的反应，二人共同参与的相关小活动，让叙事更生动。
步骤4：最后切换为一般现在时，阐述自己对分享的感悟，点明分享的价值，完成全文，整体控制词数符合要求。
参考范文如下：
When I shared a song with my friend
Last month, I shared my favourite song Count on Me with my best friend Lily. It's a cheerful song about friendship. When she listened to it, she smiled and said, "How beautiful!" We read the lyrics to have a better understanding about the writer's idea. Later, we sang it together. Sharing a song made us happier. Singing became our common hobby.
I think sharing is like giving a small gift. It brings people closer and makes friendship stronger.
【答案】
One possible version:
When I shared a song with my friend
Last month,I shared my favourite song Count on Me with my best friend Lily.It's a cheerful song about friendship.When she listened to it,she smiled and said,"How beautiful!"We read the lyrics to have a better understanding about the writer's idea.Later,we sang it together.Sharing a song made us happier.Singing became our common hobby.
I think sharing is like giving a small gift.It brings people closer and makes friendship stronger.
【知识点】
半命题英语写作；一般过去时叙事；主题观点表达
【点评】
本题是贴近学生日常的叙事类半命题作文，审题门槛低，学生可以结合自身真实生活经历选素材，不容易跑题。写作时只要注意叙事部分的时态统一，补充少量细节避免内容空洞，最后紧扣分享的意义收尾，符合词数要求就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步要明确核心要求：首先需要补全半命题标题，优先选择题干提示过的、自己熟悉好展开的分享对象，比如歌曲、好书、自制美食这类内容，避免选太偏的素材导致无话可写。接下来确定时态规则：描述过去的分享经历用一般过去时，最后谈对分享的理解用一般现在时即可。然后搭建行文逻辑：第一部分开篇点题，交代事件的时间、分享的好友身份、要分享的事物基本信息；第二部分补充分享过程的小细节，让内容更真实饱满；第三部分收尾升华，点明自己对分享意义的理解，最后检查词数控制在100左右，确认没有出现真实校名、姓名等违规信息，调整语句通顺就可以完成写作。
【解析】
写作可按照三步法完成：
步骤1：补全标题，选择易展开的分享事物，比如选"a song"，确定完整标题为When I shared a song with my friend。
步骤2：开篇引入事件，交代事件发生的时间、分享对象，简单介绍所分享事物的特点，自然引出分享的场景。
步骤3：补充分享过程的细节，比如对方听到分享内容的反应，二人共同参与的相关小活动，让叙事更生动。
步骤4：最后切换为一般现在时，阐述自己对分享的感悟，点明分享的价值，完成全文，整体控制词数符合要求。
参考范文如下：
When I shared a song with my friend
Last month, I shared my favourite song Count on Me with my best friend Lily. It's a cheerful song about friendship. When she listened to it, she smiled and said, "How beautiful!" We read the lyrics to have a better understanding about the writer's idea. Later, we sang it together. Sharing a song made us happier. Singing became our common hobby.
I think sharing is like giving a small gift. It brings people closer and makes friendship stronger.
【答案】
One possible version:
When I shared a song with my friend
Last month,I shared my favourite song Count on Me with my best friend Lily.It's a cheerful song about friendship.When she listened to it,she smiled and said,"How beautiful!"We read the lyrics to have a better understanding about the writer's idea.Later,we sang it together.Sharing a song made us happier.Singing became our common hobby.
I think sharing is like giving a small gift.It brings people closer and makes friendship stronger.
【知识点】
半命题英语写作；一般过去时叙事；主题观点表达
【点评】
本题是贴近学生日常的叙事类半命题作文，审题门槛低，学生可以结合自身真实生活经历选素材，不容易跑题。写作时只要注意叙事部分的时态统一，补充少量细节避免内容空洞，最后紧扣分享的意义收尾，符合词数要求就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
