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八、(2026·无锡锡东片区期中)书面表达(15 分)
假如你是李华,你的笔友保罗(Paul)在一封电子邮件中向你询问了一些信息,请你阅读该邮件并回复。
要求:1. 词数不少于 70,开头和结尾已经给出,不计入总词数;2. 内容必须包括保罗在邮件中询问的所有要点,并适当发挥,使行文连贯;3. 不得透露真实的姓名等任何个人信息。
Dear Paul,
Glad to hear from you. I'd like to tell you something about my school life.
What about your school life? Can you tell me something about it in your next email?
Best wishes,
Li Hua
假如你是李华,你的笔友保罗(Paul)在一封电子邮件中向你询问了一些信息,请你阅读该邮件并回复。
要求:1. 词数不少于 70,开头和结尾已经给出,不计入总词数;2. 内容必须包括保罗在邮件中询问的所有要点,并适当发挥,使行文连贯;3. 不得透露真实的姓名等任何个人信息。
Dear Paul,
Glad to hear from you. I'd like to tell you something about my school life.
What about your school life? Can you tell me something about it in your next email?
Best wishes,
Li Hua
答案
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:应用文。②时态:主要为一般现在时。③提示:需要回复保罗在邮件中询问的所有问题(学校规模、建筑情况、最喜欢的地方及原因、课外活动、师生关系以及对校园生活的看法),并适当发挥。
[写作步骤]
第一步,简要回应来信,表明写作目的(介绍校园生活);第二步,分别回答保罗的问题,按照逻辑顺序组织内容(学校概况→最喜欢的地方及原因→课外活动→师生关系→个人感受);第三步,结尾呼应对方,询问对方的校园生活,保持书信互动性。
[词句积累]
①hear from sb 收到某人的来信 ②such as 例如
③various after-school activities 各种各样的课外活动
④My school is big and modern with many buildings, such as a library, a science lab and a sports ground. (with 的复合结构)
⑤I often play basketball with my classmates, which helps me relax.(which 引导非限制性定语从句)
⑥My teachers are kind and patient, and my classmates are friendly.(and 连接并列句)
One possible version:
Dear Paul,
Glad to hear from you. I'd like to tell you something about my school life.
My school is big and modern with many buildings, such as a library, a science lab and a sports ground. My favourite place is the library because it is quiet and has lots of interesting books. There are also various after-school activities. I often play basketball with my classmates, which helps me relax. My teachers are kind and patient, and my classmates are friendly. We always help each other. I think my school life is colourful and meaningful.
What about your school life? Can you tell me something about it in your next email?
Best wishes,
Li Hua
[审题步骤]
①体裁:应用文。②时态:主要为一般现在时。③提示:需要回复保罗在邮件中询问的所有问题(学校规模、建筑情况、最喜欢的地方及原因、课外活动、师生关系以及对校园生活的看法),并适当发挥。
[写作步骤]
第一步,简要回应来信,表明写作目的(介绍校园生活);第二步,分别回答保罗的问题,按照逻辑顺序组织内容(学校概况→最喜欢的地方及原因→课外活动→师生关系→个人感受);第三步,结尾呼应对方,询问对方的校园生活,保持书信互动性。
[词句积累]
①hear from sb 收到某人的来信 ②such as 例如
③various after-school activities 各种各样的课外活动
④My school is big and modern with many buildings, such as a library, a science lab and a sports ground. (with 的复合结构)
⑤I often play basketball with my classmates, which helps me relax.(which 引导非限制性定语从句)
⑥My teachers are kind and patient, and my classmates are friendly.(and 连接并列句)
One possible version:
Dear Paul,
Glad to hear from you. I'd like to tell you something about my school life.
My school is big and modern with many buildings, such as a library, a science lab and a sports ground. My favourite place is the library because it is quiet and has lots of interesting books. There are also various after-school activities. I often play basketball with my classmates, which helps me relax. My teachers are kind and patient, and my classmates are friendly. We always help each other. I think my school life is colourful and meaningful.
What about your school life? Can you tell me something about it in your next email?
Best wishes,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步要明确写作要求：这是一封给笔友的回信，需要完整覆盖Paul邮件里提出的所有问题，不能遗漏。首先先把所有待回应的要点梳理出来：1.学校的规模是大还是小；2.校内是否有很多建筑；3.自己最喜欢的校园地点以及原因；4.是否有课后活动、自己经常参与的内容；5.老师和同学的相关情况；6.自己对校园生活的评价。接下来确定时态，介绍常规的校园日常用一般现在时即可，然后按照从整体到局部、从客观场景到主观感受的逻辑排布内容，把零散的要点用衔接词串联起来，适当补充少量细节让行文连贯，同时保证词数达标，不出现真实个人信息，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本题为书信类应用文写作，核心是回应笔友的全部提问，主体时态为一般现在时，词数要求≥70，无需额外补充无关内容。
2. 搭建写作逻辑：
① 承接题目给出的开头，首先介绍学校的整体情况：说明学校规模，列举校内的各类建筑，回应前两个问题。
② 接着说明自己最喜欢的校园场所，清晰解释喜欢的原因，回应第三个问题。
③ 之后介绍校内的课后活动类型，说明自己日常经常参与的活动，回应第四个问题。
④ 再描述老师的性格特点、和同学的相处状态，回应第五个问题。
⑤ 最后给出自己对校园生活的整体评价，回应第六个问题。
3. 润色优化：可以适当使用with伴随结构、非限制性定语从句等句式，替换简单句提升表达质量，最后检查所有要点是否全部覆盖，确认没有出现真实个人信息，衔接题目给出的结尾部分即可。
【答案】
My school is big and modern with many buildings, such as a library, a science lab and a sports ground. My favourite place is the library because it is quiet and has lots of interesting books. There are also various after-school activities. I often play basketball with my classmates, which helps me relax. My teachers are kind and patient, and my classmates are friendly. We always help each other. I think my school life is colourful and meaningful.
【知识点】
英文书信写作，一般现在时运用，要点类作文写作
【点评】
本题属于初中阶段常规的提示类应用文写作，要点指向非常明确，难度较低。学生写作时最容易出现的失分点是遗漏部分提问要点，建议动笔前先把所有需要回应的问题列出来，写完后逐一核对，同时适当加入少量复合句式、衔接词，避免生硬罗列答案，就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步要明确写作要求：这是一封给笔友的回信，需要完整覆盖Paul邮件里提出的所有问题，不能遗漏。首先先把所有待回应的要点梳理出来：1.学校的规模是大还是小；2.校内是否有很多建筑；3.自己最喜欢的校园地点以及原因；4.是否有课后活动、自己经常参与的内容；5.老师和同学的相关情况；6.自己对校园生活的评价。接下来确定时态，介绍常规的校园日常用一般现在时即可，然后按照从整体到局部、从客观场景到主观感受的逻辑排布内容，把零散的要点用衔接词串联起来，适当补充少量细节让行文连贯，同时保证词数达标，不出现真实个人信息，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本题为书信类应用文写作，核心是回应笔友的全部提问，主体时态为一般现在时，词数要求≥70，无需额外补充无关内容。
2. 搭建写作逻辑：
① 承接题目给出的开头，首先介绍学校的整体情况：说明学校规模，列举校内的各类建筑，回应前两个问题。
② 接着说明自己最喜欢的校园场所，清晰解释喜欢的原因，回应第三个问题。
③ 之后介绍校内的课后活动类型，说明自己日常经常参与的活动，回应第四个问题。
④ 再描述老师的性格特点、和同学的相处状态，回应第五个问题。
⑤ 最后给出自己对校园生活的整体评价，回应第六个问题。
3. 润色优化：可以适当使用with伴随结构、非限制性定语从句等句式，替换简单句提升表达质量，最后检查所有要点是否全部覆盖，确认没有出现真实个人信息，衔接题目给出的结尾部分即可。
【答案】
My school is big and modern with many buildings, such as a library, a science lab and a sports ground. My favourite place is the library because it is quiet and has lots of interesting books. There are also various after-school activities. I often play basketball with my classmates, which helps me relax. My teachers are kind and patient, and my classmates are friendly. We always help each other. I think my school life is colourful and meaningful.
【知识点】
英文书信写作，一般现在时运用，要点类作文写作
【点评】
本题属于初中阶段常规的提示类应用文写作，要点指向非常明确，难度较低。学生写作时最容易出现的失分点是遗漏部分提问要点，建议动笔前先把所有需要回应的问题列出来，写完后逐一核对，同时适当加入少量复合句式、衔接词，避免生硬罗列答案，就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
