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六、书面表达(共25分)
假如你是李华,将参加学校举行的主题为"How to be a civilized student?"的校园"文明小卫士"演讲比赛,请结合下图信息提示,写一篇英语演讲稿。
注意:1.要点齐全,省略号部分须补充;
2.文中请勿提及真实的校名及人名;
3.词数100左右,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear classmates,
As a Grade 8 student, I think I can do something to be more civilized.
Let's try our best to become civilized students. May our school become even better!
假如你是李华,将参加学校举行的主题为"How to be a civilized student?"的校园"文明小卫士"演讲比赛,请结合下图信息提示,写一篇英语演讲稿。
注意:1.要点齐全,省略号部分须补充;
2.文中请勿提及真实的校名及人名;
3.词数100左右,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear classmates,
As a Grade 8 student, I think I can do something to be more civilized.
Good manners start with behaving politely. Firstly, always queue in line in the dining hall or library. Secondly, listen carefully without interrupting when others are speaking.
To care for others, let's work as volunteers. We can clean up public parks on weekends and help elderly neighbours carry heavy food. Actions speak louder than words!
Protecting the environment means saving energy. When we leave classrooms, we should turn off lights; similarly, when printing documents, we must use both sides of paper.
This summer, I'll join a "Green Campus" project to plant trees. Small steps today make a big difference tomorrow.
To care for others, let's work as volunteers. We can clean up public parks on weekends and help elderly neighbours carry heavy food. Actions speak louder than words!
Protecting the environment means saving energy. When we leave classrooms, we should turn off lights; similarly, when printing documents, we must use both sides of paper.
This summer, I'll join a "Green Campus" project to plant trees. Small steps today make a big difference tomorrow.
Let's try our best to become civilized students. May our school become even better!
答案
六、书面表达
【审题指导】
本文是一篇演讲稿,时态以一般现在时为主,在介绍自己的暑假计划时,可能需要用到一般将来时。写作要点已给出,应注意不要遗漏提示,并适当添加细节,突出写作重点。
【写作指导】
步骤 内容
第一步 介绍身份,引出主题
第二步 从礼貌行为、关怀他人和保护环境三个方面具体阐述文明行为
第三步 点明自己的暑假计划,呼吁大家成为文明学生
One possible version:
Dear classmates,
As a Grade 8 student, I think I can do something to be more civilized. Good manners start with behaving politely. Firstly, always queue in line in the dining hall or library. Secondly, listen carefully without interrupting when others are speaking.
To care for others, let's work as volunteers. We can clean up public parks on weekends and help elderly neighbours carry heavy food. Actions speak louder than words!
Protecting the environment means saving energy. When we leave classrooms, we should turn off lights; similarly, when printing documents, we must use both sides of paper.
This summer, I'll join a "Green Campus" project to plant trees. Small steps today make a big difference tomorrow.
Let's try our best to become civilized students. May our school become even better!
【审题指导】
本文是一篇演讲稿,时态以一般现在时为主,在介绍自己的暑假计划时,可能需要用到一般将来时。写作要点已给出,应注意不要遗漏提示,并适当添加细节,突出写作重点。
【写作指导】
步骤 内容
第一步 介绍身份,引出主题
第二步 从礼貌行为、关怀他人和保护环境三个方面具体阐述文明行为
第三步 点明自己的暑假计划,呼吁大家成为文明学生
One possible version:
Dear classmates,
As a Grade 8 student, I think I can do something to be more civilized. Good manners start with behaving politely. Firstly, always queue in line in the dining hall or library. Secondly, listen carefully without interrupting when others are speaking.
To care for others, let's work as volunteers. We can clean up public parks on weekends and help elderly neighbours carry heavy food. Actions speak louder than words!
Protecting the environment means saving energy. When we leave classrooms, we should turn off lights; similarly, when printing documents, we must use both sides of paper.
This summer, I'll join a "Green Campus" project to plant trees. Small steps today make a big difference tomorrow.
Let's try our best to become civilized students. May our school become even better!
解析
【分析】
这是一篇主题为“如何做文明学生”的英语演讲稿写作题，解题时首先要明确写作要求：第一，梳理思维导图给出的全部核心要点，不能遗漏四大板块：文明举止、关爱他人、保护环境、我的暑假计划；第二，要把每个板块预留的省略内容补充符合主题、贴合学生日常的合理细节，比如文明举止可以补充公共场合排队、不打断他人发言，关爱他人可以补充参与公园清洁、帮扶老年邻居，保护环境补充随手关灯、双面用纸，暑假计划补充符合文明主题的实践活动；第三，注意演讲稿的口语化正式语气，主体介绍做法用一般现在时，描述暑假计划用一般将来时，控制总词数在要求范围内，不要出现真实个人信息，衔接好题目给出的开头和结尾即可完成写作。
【解析】
第一步 审题定位：明确文体是演讲稿，主题为争做文明学生，核心时态以一般现在时为主，描述未来暑假计划使用一般将来时，需要覆盖所有提示要点并补全空缺内容。
第二步 要点拆分整合：
1. 对应Good manners板块：除了礼貌行事，补充两个细节：①在食堂、图书馆等公共场合自觉排队；②他人发言时认真倾听不随意打断。
2. 对应Care for others板块：除了当志愿者，补充两个细节：①周末参与公共公园的清扫志愿活动；②帮助年长的邻居搬运重物。
3. 对应Protect the environment板块：除了节约能源，补充两个细节：①离开教室时随手关闭电灯；②打印资料时使用纸张的双面。
4. 对应My summer plan板块：补充符合主题的计划：加入“绿色校园”项目参与植树活动。
第三步 衔接题目给出的开头和结尾，用流畅的过渡句串联所有要点，调整语句让表达自然符合演讲稿的语境，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】
Dear classmates,
As a Grade 8 student, I think I can do something to be more civilized. Good manners start with behaving politely. Firstly, always queue in line in the dining hall or library. Secondly, listen carefully without interrupting when others are speaking.
To care for others, let's work as volunteers. We can clean up public parks on weekends and help elderly neighbours carry heavy food. Actions speak louder than words!
Protecting the environment means saving energy. When we leave classrooms, we should turn off lights; similarly, when printing documents, we must use both sides of paper.
This summer, I'll join a "Green Campus" project to plant trees. Small steps today make a big difference tomorrow.
Let's try our best to become civilized students. May our school become even better!
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作，一般将来时应用，主题词汇积累
【点评】
本题属于提示类应用文体写作，给出的思维导图搭建了清晰的写作框架，同时预留了合理的内容发挥空间，既考察学生对要点的整合能力、基础英语语句组织能力，也引导学生将文明行为的主题和自身生活实际结合，兼具语言考察和德育引导的作用。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇主题为“如何做文明学生”的英语演讲稿写作题，解题时首先要明确写作要求：第一，梳理思维导图给出的全部核心要点，不能遗漏四大板块：文明举止、关爱他人、保护环境、我的暑假计划；第二，要把每个板块预留的省略内容补充符合主题、贴合学生日常的合理细节，比如文明举止可以补充公共场合排队、不打断他人发言，关爱他人可以补充参与公园清洁、帮扶老年邻居，保护环境补充随手关灯、双面用纸，暑假计划补充符合文明主题的实践活动；第三，注意演讲稿的口语化正式语气，主体介绍做法用一般现在时，描述暑假计划用一般将来时，控制总词数在要求范围内，不要出现真实个人信息，衔接好题目给出的开头和结尾即可完成写作。
【解析】
第一步 审题定位：明确文体是演讲稿，主题为争做文明学生，核心时态以一般现在时为主，描述未来暑假计划使用一般将来时，需要覆盖所有提示要点并补全空缺内容。
第二步 要点拆分整合：
1. 对应Good manners板块：除了礼貌行事，补充两个细节：①在食堂、图书馆等公共场合自觉排队；②他人发言时认真倾听不随意打断。
2. 对应Care for others板块：除了当志愿者，补充两个细节：①周末参与公共公园的清扫志愿活动；②帮助年长的邻居搬运重物。
3. 对应Protect the environment板块：除了节约能源，补充两个细节：①离开教室时随手关闭电灯；②打印资料时使用纸张的双面。
4. 对应My summer plan板块：补充符合主题的计划：加入“绿色校园”项目参与植树活动。
第三步 衔接题目给出的开头和结尾，用流畅的过渡句串联所有要点，调整语句让表达自然符合演讲稿的语境，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】
Dear classmates,
As a Grade 8 student, I think I can do something to be more civilized. Good manners start with behaving politely. Firstly, always queue in line in the dining hall or library. Secondly, listen carefully without interrupting when others are speaking.
To care for others, let's work as volunteers. We can clean up public parks on weekends and help elderly neighbours carry heavy food. Actions speak louder than words!
Protecting the environment means saving energy. When we leave classrooms, we should turn off lights; similarly, when printing documents, we must use both sides of paper.
This summer, I'll join a "Green Campus" project to plant trees. Small steps today make a big difference tomorrow.
Let's try our best to become civilized students. May our school become even better!
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作，一般将来时应用，主题词汇积累
【点评】
本题属于提示类应用文体写作，给出的思维导图搭建了清晰的写作框架，同时预留了合理的内容发挥空间，既考察学生对要点的整合能力、基础英语语句组织能力，也引导学生将文明行为的主题和自身生活实际结合，兼具语言考察和德育引导的作用。
【难度系数】
0.6
