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假如你是李华，你的朋友 Jimmy 由于长时间玩电脑游戏，长时间保持同一姿势，现在身体不适，出现了头疼、眼睛不舒服、腰背酸痛、睡眠质量差等问题。请写信给他一些康复建议。
内容包括:1. Jimmy 身体不适的表现和原因(可适当发挥);2. 你的建议;3. 祝愿早日康复。
写作要求:语句连贯，词数 80 左右。
Dear Jimmy,
Yours,
Li Hua
内容包括:1. Jimmy 身体不适的表现和原因(可适当发挥);2. 你的建议;3. 祝愿早日康复。
写作要求:语句连贯，词数 80 左右。
Dear Jimmy,
I heard about your body's problems. I'm worried about you.
You feel uncomfortable because you keep playing the computer for a long time. You need to take breaks away from the computer.
As the saying goes, "The first wealth is health." If you have a headache and have a sore back, you should see a doctor. When you can't sleep well, you'd better sleep early. It's important for us to have a good sleep.
Remember your health is in your hands. If you take good care of yourself, you will get better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
标准提分版：
Dear Jimmy,
I heard about your body's problems. I'm worried about you.
You feel uncomfortable because you keep playing the computer for a long time. You need to take breaks away from the computer.
As the saying goes, "The first wealth is health." If you have a headache and have a sore back, you should see a doctor. When you can't sleep well, you'd better sleep early. It's important for us to have a good sleep.
Remember your health is in your hands. If you take good care of yourself, you will get better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
进阶优化版：
Dear Jimmy,
I'm sorry to hear you're feeling bad lately. When we play games too long without moving, it can make our head and eyes hurt. The back pain might even keep you awake at night.
Here's what might help: First, try to stand up and walk around for five minutes every hour. Look away from the screen to rest your eyes often. Second, it may make your back comfortable if you sit straight in your chair with both feet on the floor. Third, stop using phones or computers 30 minutes before sleep. Drink warm milk if you can't fall asleep.
Don't worry too much! Let's go for a walk in the park this Saturday morning. Fresh air always makes us feel better.
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Jimmy,
I heard about your body's problems. I'm worried about you.
You feel uncomfortable because you keep playing the computer for a long time. You need to take breaks away from the computer.
As the saying goes, "The first wealth is health." If you have a headache and have a sore back, you should see a doctor. When you can't sleep well, you'd better sleep early. It's important for us to have a good sleep.
Remember your health is in your hands. If you take good care of yourself, you will get better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
进阶优化版：
Dear Jimmy,
I'm sorry to hear you're feeling bad lately. When we play games too long without moving, it can make our head and eyes hurt. The back pain might even keep you awake at night.
Here's what might help: First, try to stand up and walk around for five minutes every hour. Look away from the screen to rest your eyes often. Second, it may make your back comfortable if you sit straight in your chair with both feet on the floor. Third, stop using phones or computers 30 minutes before sleep. Drink warm milk if you can't fall asleep.
Don't worry too much! Let's go for a walk in the park this Saturday morning. Fresh air always makes us feel better.
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【解析】
这是一篇英语书信写作题，需严格遵循书信格式完成：
1. 开篇表达对Jimmy身体不适的担忧，明确其头疼、眼酸、腰背酸痛、睡眠差等症状及成因——长期沉迷电脑游戏、保持固定姿势；
2. 给出针对性康复建议：定时起身活动、让眼睛休息、保持正确坐姿、睡前远离电子设备、喝温牛奶助眠等；
3. 结尾表达康复祝愿，可添加生活化邀约增强情感，确保词数符合要求（80左右）。
【答案】
Dear Jimmy,
I'm sorry to hear you're feeling bad lately. When we play games too long without moving, it can make our head and eyes hurt. The back pain might even keep you awake at night.
Here's what might help: First, try to stand up and walk around for five minutes every hour. Look away from the screen to rest your eyes often. Second, it may make your back comfortable if you sit straight in your chair with both feet on the floor. Third, stop using phones or computers 30 minutes before sleep. Drink warm milk if you can't fall asleep.
Don't worry too much! Let's go for a walk in the park this Saturday morning. Fresh air always makes us feel better.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语书信格式、提建议句型、健康类表达
【点评】
本文完全契合写作要求，内容完整覆盖题目指定要点；语句连贯自然，分点建议清晰易懂；用词准确恰当，还加入生活化邀约，情感真挚，符合词数要求，是一篇优质的应用文范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇英语书信写作题，需严格遵循书信格式完成：
1. 开篇表达对Jimmy身体不适的担忧，明确其头疼、眼酸、腰背酸痛、睡眠差等症状及成因——长期沉迷电脑游戏、保持固定姿势；
2. 给出针对性康复建议：定时起身活动、让眼睛休息、保持正确坐姿、睡前远离电子设备、喝温牛奶助眠等；
3. 结尾表达康复祝愿，可添加生活化邀约增强情感，确保词数符合要求（80左右）。
【答案】
Dear Jimmy,
I'm sorry to hear you're feeling bad lately. When we play games too long without moving, it can make our head and eyes hurt. The back pain might even keep you awake at night.
Here's what might help: First, try to stand up and walk around for five minutes every hour. Look away from the screen to rest your eyes often. Second, it may make your back comfortable if you sit straight in your chair with both feet on the floor. Third, stop using phones or computers 30 minutes before sleep. Drink warm milk if you can't fall asleep.
Don't worry too much! Let's go for a walk in the park this Saturday morning. Fresh air always makes us feel better.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语书信格式、提建议句型、健康类表达
【点评】
本文完全契合写作要求，内容完整覆盖题目指定要点；语句连贯自然，分点建议清晰易懂；用词准确恰当，还加入生活化邀约，情感真挚，符合词数要求，是一篇优质的应用文范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
