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第七课时 Reading for writing (5) 单元写作
典例分析
某英语学习网站正在开展“绿色生活”故事续写比赛。请你根据“Hey! Come on out!”原文，写一篇不少于90词的结尾。
【要点】(1) What is the ending of the story? (2) What message does this ending try to convey? (3) Why do you choose to convey the message?
【审题要领】
【写作框架】
【素材积累】
重点短语
1. 分解；降解
2. 减少污染
3. 回收利用
重点句子
开头句：In terms of pollution, the story Hey! Come on out! gives us a serious warning. 关于污染（问题），《喂——出来！》这篇小说给了我们严厉的警示。
中间句：I choose this ending because it tells us we must protect the earth before it's too late. 我选择这个结局，是因为它告诉我们：必须及时保护地球，否则一切就太晚了。
结尾句：Living green, I will make our home a better place. 践行绿色生活，我会让我们的家园变得更美好。
【美文欣赏】
Dear editor,
I want to write the ending of Hey! Come on out! because it makes me realise the danger of pollution, and the importance of environmental protection.
“After the stone fell from the sky, more waste poured down. People were afraid and realised their mistakes. They started to clean up the city and live a plastic-free life. Factories were closed, and trees were planted to purify the air.”
So, I will describe people's regret and determination to change. They will join in cleaning up the streets with one another. In conclusion, people started to live a greener life to make up for their mistakes. They are going to reduce waste and recycle more in their daily lives, because small actions can make a big difference.
I wrote so because I believe people should protect the environment. Only in this way can they save their only home. I am sure they can live in harmony with nature if they act now.
典例分析
某英语学习网站正在开展“绿色生活”故事续写比赛。请你根据“Hey! Come on out!”原文，写一篇不少于90词的结尾。
【要点】(1) What is the ending of the story? (2) What message does this ending try to convey? (3) Why do you choose to convey the message?
【审题要领】
【写作框架】
【素材积累】
重点短语
1. 分解；降解
break down
2. 减少污染
reduce pollution
3. 回收利用
recycle and reuse
重点句子
开头句：In terms of pollution, the story Hey! Come on out! gives us a serious warning. 关于污染（问题），《喂——出来！》这篇小说给了我们严厉的警示。
中间句：I choose this ending because it tells us we must protect the earth before it's too late. 我选择这个结局，是因为它告诉我们：必须及时保护地球，否则一切就太晚了。
结尾句：Living green, I will make our home a better place. 践行绿色生活，我会让我们的家园变得更美好。
【美文欣赏】
Dear editor,
I want to write the ending of Hey! Come on out! because it makes me realise the danger of pollution, and the importance of environmental protection.
“After the stone fell from the sky, more waste poured down. People were afraid and realised their mistakes. They started to clean up the city and live a plastic-free life. Factories were closed, and trees were planted to purify the air.”
So, I will describe people's regret and determination to change. They will join in cleaning up the streets with one another. In conclusion, people started to live a greener life to make up for their mistakes. They are going to reduce waste and recycle more in their daily lives, because small actions can make a big difference.
I wrote so because I believe people should protect the environment. Only in this way can they save their only home. I am sure they can live in harmony with nature if they act now.
答案
【审题要领】
环保故事续写;第一人称和第三人称;一般过去时和一般将来时
【素材积累】
1.break down 2.reduce pollution 3.recycle and reuse
环保故事续写;第一人称和第三人称;一般过去时和一般将来时
【素材积累】
1.break down 2.reduce pollution 3.recycle and reuse
解析
【分析】
本题为英语单元写作的故事续写任务，要求续写《喂——出来！》的结尾，需满足三个核心要点：明确故事结局、说明结局传达的环保信息、解释选择该信息的原因。解题思路：① 紧扣原文“污染警示”的核心，确定结局要体现人们从忽视污染到醒悟并采取环保行动；② 运用素材积累的环保相关短语；③ 正确使用时态（一般过去时描述过去的醒悟行动，一般将来时描述未来的环保计划）；④ 围绕“绿色生活”主题组织内容，确保字数不少于90词，语句连贯。
【解析】
1. 结局设定：承接原文，石头落下后更多垃圾倾泻而下，人们意识到自身错误，开始清理城市、践行无塑料生活，关闭污染工厂、植树净化空气；2. 信息传达：强调环保需及时行动，小的环保举动能带来大的改变，呼吁人们与自然和谐共处；3. 选择原因：贴合原文对污染问题的警示，符合“绿色生活”的比赛主题，能体现学生对环保的认知；4. 语言组织：运用积累的环保短语，结合第一、第三人称，正确使用一般过去时和一般将来时，确保内容连贯、符合写作要求。
【答案】
【审题要领】环保故事续写;第一人称和第三人称;一般过去时和一般将来时
【素材积累】1.break down 2.reduce pollution 3.recycle and reuse
【知识点】
英语故事续写、环保主题英语写作、常用环保短语运用
【点评】
本题结合经典环保故事开展续写写作，既考查学生的英语写作能力（时态运用、人称转换、语句连贯性），又渗透环保意识，要求学生灵活运用积累的素材完成符合要求的写作任务，贴合单元教学目标。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题为英语单元写作的故事续写任务，要求续写《喂——出来！》的结尾，需满足三个核心要点：明确故事结局、说明结局传达的环保信息、解释选择该信息的原因。解题思路：① 紧扣原文“污染警示”的核心，确定结局要体现人们从忽视污染到醒悟并采取环保行动；② 运用素材积累的环保相关短语；③ 正确使用时态（一般过去时描述过去的醒悟行动，一般将来时描述未来的环保计划）；④ 围绕“绿色生活”主题组织内容，确保字数不少于90词，语句连贯。
【解析】
1. 结局设定：承接原文，石头落下后更多垃圾倾泻而下，人们意识到自身错误，开始清理城市、践行无塑料生活，关闭污染工厂、植树净化空气；2. 信息传达：强调环保需及时行动，小的环保举动能带来大的改变，呼吁人们与自然和谐共处；3. 选择原因：贴合原文对污染问题的警示，符合“绿色生活”的比赛主题，能体现学生对环保的认知；4. 语言组织：运用积累的环保短语，结合第一、第三人称，正确使用一般过去时和一般将来时，确保内容连贯、符合写作要求。
【答案】
【审题要领】环保故事续写;第一人称和第三人称;一般过去时和一般将来时
【素材积累】1.break down 2.reduce pollution 3.recycle and reuse
【知识点】
英语故事续写、环保主题英语写作、常用环保短语运用
【点评】
本题结合经典环保故事开展续写写作，既考查学生的英语写作能力（时态运用、人称转换、语句连贯性），又渗透环保意识，要求学生灵活运用积累的素材完成符合要求的写作任务，贴合单元教学目标。
【难度系数】
0.6
