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九、书面表达(21分)
假如你是阳光中学七年级的学生李海,你收到了英国朋友山姆的邮件。请仔细阅读邮件内容,并用英语回信。
注意事项:1. 邮件须包括所有提示内容,要求语句通顺、意思连贯;2. 邮件中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息;3. 词数70左右,邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Sam,
I'm happy to get your email. Everything is going well here.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hai
假如你是阳光中学七年级的学生李海,你收到了英国朋友山姆的邮件。请仔细阅读邮件内容,并用英语回信。
注意事项:1. 邮件须包括所有提示内容,要求语句通顺、意思连贯;2. 邮件中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息;3. 词数70左右,邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Sam,
I'm happy to get your email. Everything is going well here.
I'm in Sunshine Middle School now. It is big and beautiful. There're three classroom buildings, a modern library and a big playground. The classrooms are clean and bright.
I have eight lessons every day. I often practise playing basketball because I'm a member of the Basketball Club.
My new friends are all friendly to me. They always help me when I need.
I really have a good time at school.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hai
答案
九、
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:应用文。②时态:主要为一般现在时。③提示:写作要点已给出,注意不要遗漏邮件中提到的要点,适当添加细节,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图,借用"一切都很好"来引出下文要介绍的内容;第二步,具体阐述学校的相关情况;第三步,书写结语,表达"期待回复"的愿望。
[词句积累]
①be friendly to sb 对某人友好 ②have a good time 玩得愉快 ③look forward to 期待
④I often practise playing basketball because I'm a member of the Basketball Club. (because 引导原因状语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Sam,
I'm happy to get your email. Everything is going well here.
I'm in Sunshine Middle School now. It is big and beautiful. There're three classroom buildings, a modern library and a big playground. The classrooms are clean and bright.
there be 句型
I have eight lessons every day. I often practise playing basketball because I'm a member of the Basketball Club.
My new friends are all friendly to me. They always help me when I need.
I really have a good time at school.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hai
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:应用文。②时态:主要为一般现在时。③提示:写作要点已给出,注意不要遗漏邮件中提到的要点,适当添加细节,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图,借用"一切都很好"来引出下文要介绍的内容;第二步,具体阐述学校的相关情况;第三步,书写结语,表达"期待回复"的愿望。
[词句积累]
①be friendly to sb 对某人友好 ②have a good time 玩得愉快 ③look forward to 期待
④I often practise playing basketball because I'm a member of the Basketball Club. (because 引导原因状语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Sam,
I'm happy to get your email. Everything is going well here.
I'm in Sunshine Middle School now. It is big and beautiful. There're three classroom buildings, a modern library and a big playground. The classrooms are clean and bright.
there be 句型
I have eight lessons every day. I often practise playing basketball because I'm a member of the Basketball Club.
My new friends are all friendly to me. They always help me when I need.
I really have a good time at school.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hai
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步先梳理来信里Sam提出的所有问题，明确必须要覆盖的写作要点：①新学校是什么样子 ②你平时在校通常做什么 ③你的新朋友是什么样的 ④你在新学校的感受，避免漏点。第二步确定文体是给朋友回电子邮件，时态用描述日常状态的一般现在时即可，不需要用复杂句式。第三步按照逻辑顺序排布内容：先介绍学校的整体环境设施，再讲日常的学习和课后活动，接着描述新朋友的特点，最后表达自己在校的感受，内容连贯自然，控制词数在70左右，不要出现真实个人、学校信息就符合要求。
【解析】
这是一篇要点回应类的应用文写作，按照以下步骤完成即可：
1. 承接已给出的开头，先点明自己所在的阳光中学的整体样貌，介绍校园的基础设施，回应Sam第一个关于新学校是什么样的问题。
2. 接着介绍自己每天的课程安排，再补充课后的活动，比如加入篮球俱乐部练习打球，回应Sam第二个关于在校日常活动的问题。
3. 然后描述新朋友的性格，点明他们待人友善、会在自己需要的时候提供帮助，回应Sam第三个关于新朋友的问题。
4. 最后用一句话总结自己在新学校的整体感受，自然衔接题目已经给出的结尾句，保证全文通顺连贯，所有要点全部覆盖。
【答案】
Dear Sam,
I'm happy to get your email. Everything is going well here.
I'm in Sunshine Middle School now. It is big and beautiful. There're three classroom buildings, a modern library and a big playground. The classrooms are clean and bright.
I have eight lessons every day. I often practise playing basketball because I'm a member of the Basketball Club.
My new friends are all friendly to me. They always help me when I need.
I really have a good time at school.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hai
【知识点】
电子邮件写作，一般现在时，要点类写作
【点评】
本题是七年级基础的应用文写作，难度较低，核心考察学生读取来信信息、完整覆盖所有写作要点的能力，不需要使用过难的复杂句式，灵活运用课内学过的基础短语就能写出符合要求的高分作文，注意不要遗漏来信提出的任意一个问题，避免不必要的失分。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步先梳理来信里Sam提出的所有问题，明确必须要覆盖的写作要点：①新学校是什么样子 ②你平时在校通常做什么 ③你的新朋友是什么样的 ④你在新学校的感受，避免漏点。第二步确定文体是给朋友回电子邮件，时态用描述日常状态的一般现在时即可，不需要用复杂句式。第三步按照逻辑顺序排布内容：先介绍学校的整体环境设施，再讲日常的学习和课后活动，接着描述新朋友的特点，最后表达自己在校的感受，内容连贯自然，控制词数在70左右，不要出现真实个人、学校信息就符合要求。
【解析】
这是一篇要点回应类的应用文写作，按照以下步骤完成即可：
1. 承接已给出的开头，先点明自己所在的阳光中学的整体样貌，介绍校园的基础设施，回应Sam第一个关于新学校是什么样的问题。
2. 接着介绍自己每天的课程安排，再补充课后的活动，比如加入篮球俱乐部练习打球，回应Sam第二个关于在校日常活动的问题。
3. 然后描述新朋友的性格，点明他们待人友善、会在自己需要的时候提供帮助，回应Sam第三个关于新朋友的问题。
4. 最后用一句话总结自己在新学校的整体感受，自然衔接题目已经给出的结尾句，保证全文通顺连贯，所有要点全部覆盖。
【答案】
Dear Sam,
I'm happy to get your email. Everything is going well here.
I'm in Sunshine Middle School now. It is big and beautiful. There're three classroom buildings, a modern library and a big playground. The classrooms are clean and bright.
I have eight lessons every day. I often practise playing basketball because I'm a member of the Basketball Club.
My new friends are all friendly to me. They always help me when I need.
I really have a good time at school.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hai
【知识点】
电子邮件写作，一般现在时，要点类写作
【点评】
本题是七年级基础的应用文写作，难度较低，核心考察学生读取来信信息、完整覆盖所有写作要点的能力，不需要使用过难的复杂句式，灵活运用课内学过的基础短语就能写出符合要求的高分作文，注意不要遗漏来信提出的任意一个问题，避免不必要的失分。
【难度系数】
0.7
