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七、书面表达(20 分)
每个人都有自己的兴趣爱好。假如你是李华，请根据提示，用英语给你的朋友 John 写一封电子邮件，分享你的兴趣爱好——烹饪。
提示：
1. Introduce why you like cooking.
2. Tell your experience of cooking.
3. Tell how you feel.
注意：
1. 词数 90 左右。首尾已给出，不计入总词数；
2. 意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写工整。
Dear John，
Yours，
Li Hua
每个人都有自己的兴趣爱好。假如你是李华，请根据提示，用英语给你的朋友 John 写一封电子邮件，分享你的兴趣爱好——烹饪。
提示：
1. Introduce why you like cooking.
2. Tell your experience of cooking.
3. Tell how you feel.
注意：
1. 词数 90 左右。首尾已给出，不计入总词数；
2. 意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写工整。
Dear John，
Yours，
Li Hua
答案
One possible version:
Dear John,
How are you doing recently? I want
to share my favorite hobby, cooking,
with you.
I started to love cooking because I
wanted to help my mom with housework
on weekends. At first, I often burned
the dishes or added too much salt. But I
didn't give up. I learned from cooking
videos and asked my mom for advice.
Last week, I successfully made tomato
and egg noodles for my family, and they
said it was delicious!
Cooking makes me feel happy and
proud. It not only improves my skills
but also brings joy to my family. Do you
have any interesting hobbies?
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear John,
How are you doing recently? I want
to share my favorite hobby, cooking,
with you.
I started to love cooking because I
wanted to help my mom with housework
on weekends. At first, I often burned
the dishes or added too much salt. But I
didn't give up. I learned from cooking
videos and asked my mom for advice.
Last week, I successfully made tomato
and egg noodles for my family, and they
said it was delicious!
Cooking makes me feel happy and
proud. It not only improves my skills
but also brings joy to my family. Do you
have any interesting hobbies?
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步要明确核心要求：身份是李华，写给好友John，主题是分享自己的爱好烹饪，必须覆盖题干给出的三个提示要点。我们可以顺着三个要点梳理行文逻辑：首先开篇点题，直接引出要分享的爱好是烹饪；接下来对应第一个要点，选贴近生活的合理理由，比如想帮妈妈分担家务作为爱上烹饪的原因；然后对应第二个要点，梳理烹饪的经历线：从一开始操作不熟练频频出错，到坚持学习请教，最后成功做出美食获得家人肯定，内容真实自然；最后对应第三个要点，写出烹饪给自己带来的愉悦、自豪感，以及给家庭带来的快乐，最后可以反问对方的爱好，符合朋友间邮件交流的语境。全程注意控制词数在90左右，区分好介绍爱好用的一般现在时、讲述过往经历用的一般过去时，保证语句通顺没有语法错误即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：文体为给好友的电子邮件，主体人称为第一人称I，时态结合一般现在时（介绍爱好、抒发感受）和一般过去时（叙述过往烹饪经历），必须完整覆盖题干给出的3个提示要点，词数控制在90左右，给定首尾不计入总词数。
2. 搭建行文结构：
① 开篇问候后直接点明核心主题：要和John分享自己最喜欢的爱好——烹饪；
② 阐述爱上烹饪的原因：最初是想在周末帮妈妈分担家务，因此开始接触烹饪；
③ 叙述烹饪经历：一开始经常把菜烧糊、盐放多，没有放弃，跟着烹饪视频学习、向妈妈请教，上周成功给家人做了番茄鸡蛋面，得到家人的夸赞；
④ 抒发自身感受：烹饪让自己开心又自豪，既提升了动手能力，也给家人带来了欢乐，最后反问John有没有有趣的爱好，自然收尾。
3. 润色衔接：使用at first、but、not only...but also等连接词让行文更连贯，避免语法错误，调整内容长度符合词数要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear John,
How are you doing recently? I want to share my favorite hobby, cooking, with you.
I started to love cooking because I wanted to help my mom with housework on weekends. At first, I often burned the dishes or added too much salt. But I didn't give up. I learned from cooking videos and asked my mom for advice. Last week, I successfully made tomato and egg noodles for my family, and they said it was delicious!
Cooking makes me feel happy and proud. It not only improves my skills but also brings joy to my family. Do you have any interesting hobbies?
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
电子邮件写作，爱好话题表达，时态运用
【点评】
本题是贴近学生日常交际场景的书信类写作，提示要点清晰明确，没有设置过高的审题门槛，学生只需要紧扣三个给定要点，结合生活常识填充合理内容，注意邮件的口语化交际属性，避免遗漏要点就可以拿到不错的分数，参考范文逻辑流畅，要点全覆盖，用词准确地道，完全符合题目的各项要求。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步要明确核心要求：身份是李华，写给好友John，主题是分享自己的爱好烹饪，必须覆盖题干给出的三个提示要点。我们可以顺着三个要点梳理行文逻辑：首先开篇点题，直接引出要分享的爱好是烹饪；接下来对应第一个要点，选贴近生活的合理理由，比如想帮妈妈分担家务作为爱上烹饪的原因；然后对应第二个要点，梳理烹饪的经历线：从一开始操作不熟练频频出错，到坚持学习请教，最后成功做出美食获得家人肯定，内容真实自然；最后对应第三个要点，写出烹饪给自己带来的愉悦、自豪感，以及给家庭带来的快乐，最后可以反问对方的爱好，符合朋友间邮件交流的语境。全程注意控制词数在90左右，区分好介绍爱好用的一般现在时、讲述过往经历用的一般过去时，保证语句通顺没有语法错误即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：文体为给好友的电子邮件，主体人称为第一人称I，时态结合一般现在时（介绍爱好、抒发感受）和一般过去时（叙述过往烹饪经历），必须完整覆盖题干给出的3个提示要点，词数控制在90左右，给定首尾不计入总词数。
2. 搭建行文结构：
① 开篇问候后直接点明核心主题：要和John分享自己最喜欢的爱好——烹饪；
② 阐述爱上烹饪的原因：最初是想在周末帮妈妈分担家务，因此开始接触烹饪；
③ 叙述烹饪经历：一开始经常把菜烧糊、盐放多，没有放弃，跟着烹饪视频学习、向妈妈请教，上周成功给家人做了番茄鸡蛋面，得到家人的夸赞；
④ 抒发自身感受：烹饪让自己开心又自豪，既提升了动手能力，也给家人带来了欢乐，最后反问John有没有有趣的爱好，自然收尾。
3. 润色衔接：使用at first、but、not only...but also等连接词让行文更连贯，避免语法错误，调整内容长度符合词数要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear John,
How are you doing recently? I want to share my favorite hobby, cooking, with you.
I started to love cooking because I wanted to help my mom with housework on weekends. At first, I often burned the dishes or added too much salt. But I didn't give up. I learned from cooking videos and asked my mom for advice. Last week, I successfully made tomato and egg noodles for my family, and they said it was delicious!
Cooking makes me feel happy and proud. It not only improves my skills but also brings joy to my family. Do you have any interesting hobbies?
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
电子邮件写作，爱好话题表达，时态运用
【点评】
本题是贴近学生日常交际场景的书信类写作，提示要点清晰明确，没有设置过高的审题门槛，学生只需要紧扣三个给定要点，结合生活常识填充合理内容，注意邮件的口语化交际属性，避免遗漏要点就可以拿到不错的分数，参考范文逻辑流畅，要点全覆盖，用词准确地道，完全符合题目的各项要求。
【难度系数】
0.7
