| 升格前作文 | 升格后作文 |
|------------|------------|
| Dear all,
Xiao Ming, a lovely Grade 8 student, needs our help!
①Xiao Ming is suffering from a serious heart disease. He left school last week. A necessary operation can cure him, but it costs over $250{,}000$ yuan.
Xiao Ming’s parents are both farmers. ②The operation is so expensive. They cannot afford it. Without this operation, Xiao Ming’s life would be in danger. | Dear all,
Xiao Ming, a lovely Grade 8 student, needs our help!
①Xiao Ming is suffering from a serious heart disease and has been absent from school since last week. (用 and 和短语 be absent from 升格) A necessary operation can cure him, but it costs over $250{,}000$ yuan.
Xiao Ming’s parents are both farmers. ②They cannot afford such an expensive operation. (用 such＋名词短语升格) Without this operation, Xiao Ming’s life would be in danger. |
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| Let’s come together to support Xiao Ming.
We are planning to organize a talent show to raise money next Sunday from 9 a.m. to 5 p.m. in the school hall. Join us to show Xiao Ming that he is not alone. ③All of us can give a helping hand. We can save Xiao Ming.
The Students’ Union | Let’s come together to support Xiao Ming. We are planning to organize a talent show to raise money next Sunday from 9 a.m. to 5 p.m. in the school hall. Join us to show Xiao Ming that he is not alone. ③If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Xiao Ming! (用 if 引导的条件状语从句升格)
The Students’ Union |

升格后的完整募捐倡议书如下：
Dear all,
Xiao Ming, a lovely Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Xiao Ming is suffering from a serious heart disease and has been absent from school since last week. A necessary operation can cure him, but it costs over 250,000 yuan.
Xiao Ming’s parents are both farmers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Xiao Ming’s life would be in danger.
Let’s come together to support Xiao Ming. We are planning to organize a talent show to raise money next Sunday from 9 a.m. to 5 p.m. in the school hall. Join us to show Xiao Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Xiao Ming!
The Students’ Union

本题是八年级下册单元写作提升的作文润色升格训练，结合本册所学的并列连词、such修饰名词短语、if引导的条件状语从句等知识点，对募捐倡议书的表达进行优化：
1. 句①升格：用并列连词and衔接语义关联的内容，用现在完成时结构has been absent from school since last week替换直白的left school，准确体现小明从上周起一直无法到校的持续状态，语句衔接更流畅自然。
2. 句②升格：将原本两个零散的独立句合并，使用本册所学的such+名词短语结构such an expensive operation，表述更加简洁紧凑，避免表达冗余。
3. 句③升格：用if引导的条件状语从句将两个呼吁句整合，清晰体现“大家伸出援手”和“拯救小明”的逻辑关联，让倡议书的呼吁更有感染力和说服力。

假如你是 Andy，你所在的慈善基金会 Sunshine for All 要举办一个慈善演出，你要在电子邮件里向你的朋友 Jacky 介绍这次演出，并向他和他的家人发出邀请。请根据所给的提示完成介绍。

【要求】1. 覆盖所有提示中的要点。
2. 90 词左右（所给的开头和结尾不计入总词数）。
Dear Jacky,
Sunshine for All is planning to hold a charity show. Would you and your parents like to come to support us?

Please reply soon. I am looking forward to seeing you at the show.
With love,
Andy

One possible version
Dear Jacky,
Sunshine for All is planning to hold a charity show. Would you and your parents like to come to support us?
The show will be held in the Art Centre in the town on 13th May. It will be from 7 p. m. to 9 p. m. And some pop stars will come to the show. We hope we can raise some money for the poor children in our town. So there are no free tickets. The ticket price is ¥10 for children and ¥20 for adults. There will be wonderful songs and dances at the show. I am sure you will enjoy them if you can come. Many hands make light work.
Please reply soon. I am looking forward to seeing you at the show.
With love,
Andy

【分析】
这是一篇给好友的邀请类电子邮件写作，解题时首先要先把表格里所有的提示要点全部提取出来，避免遗漏：演出的举办日期、具体时间、举办地点、筹款的慈善目的、演出节目内容、儿童和成人的票价。接下来顺着已给出的开头自然衔接，按照「告知演出基本信息→说明活动目的→介绍票价和节目内容→表达期待对方到场的心意」的逻辑串联内容，语气贴合好友交流的轻松感，控制总词数在90词左右，就可以完成符合要求的写作。
【解析】
1. 首先梳理所有必须覆盖的信息点：①演出举办地点是艺术中心，日期为5月13日，时间为晚7点到9点；②活动目的是为贫困儿童筹款；③演出包含歌曲、舞蹈等精彩节目；④票价为儿童10元，成人20元。
2. 衔接题干给出的开头内容，用符合日常交流的表达串联所有要点，适当补充符合慈善演出场景的合理细节，让行文流畅自然，没有语法错误，同时满足字数要求。
3. 顺承题干给出的结尾部分，保证邮件结构完整。
【答案】
The show will be held in the Art Centre in the town on 13th May. It will be from 7 p. m. to 9 p. m. And some pop stars will come to the show. We hope we can raise some money for the poor children in our town. So there are no free tickets. The ticket price is ¥10 for children and ¥20 for adults. There will be wonderful songs and dances at the show. I am sure you will enjoy them if you can come. Many hands make light work.
【知识点】
英语邀请信写作，信息点整合
【点评】
本题属于提示类应用文写作，难度较低，核心考点是完整覆盖所有给定的图表信息，写作时不需要使用过于复杂的句式，保证语句通顺、要点无遗漏、字数符合要求即可拿到高分，同时可以适当补充符合场景的小细节，让内容更生动有说服力。
【难度系数】
0.7