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六、书面表达。
某英文网站正在开展以“This is my home”为主题的征文活动。假如你是 Will,请根据以下提示,用英语写一篇短文投稿,介绍你家房子的类型、位置、有几间房、都有什么房间,并写一写你和家人在家里一般都做什么,以及你对家的感受。
1. What type of house do you live in? Where is your home? 2. How many rooms are there in your home and what are they? 3. What do you often do with your family at home? 4. How do you feel about your home?
注意:1. 包含所有要点,并适当发挥;2. 词数 80 左右,短文开头已给出,不计入总词数。
I'm Will and I'd like to introduce my home to you.
某英文网站正在开展以“This is my home”为主题的征文活动。假如你是 Will,请根据以下提示,用英语写一篇短文投稿,介绍你家房子的类型、位置、有几间房、都有什么房间,并写一写你和家人在家里一般都做什么,以及你对家的感受。
1. What type of house do you live in? Where is your home? 2. How many rooms are there in your home and what are they? 3. What do you often do with your family at home? 4. How do you feel about your home?
注意:1. 包含所有要点,并适当发挥;2. 词数 80 左右,短文开头已给出,不计入总词数。
I'm Will and I'd like to introduce my home to you.
It is a flat on the sixth floor in a building. There are five rooms in my home: a living room, two bedrooms, a kitchen, and a bathroom. In the living room, my family and I often watch TV together and share interesting stories. My parents like to cook food in the kitchen, and I sometimes help them. My home is warm and full of love. I feel happy and safe there. It is the best place in the world for me. I love my house very much. What do you think of it?
答案
六、One possible version:
I'm Will and I'd like to introduce my home to you. It is a flat on the sixth floor in a building. There are five rooms in my home: a living room, two bedrooms, a kitchen, and a bathroom. In the living room, my family and I often watch TV together and share interesting stories. My parents like to cook food in the kitchen, and I sometimes help them. My home is warm and full of love. I feel happy and safe there. It is the best place in the world for me. I love my house very much. What do you think of it?
I'm Will and I'd like to introduce my home to you. It is a flat on the sixth floor in a building. There are five rooms in my home: a living room, two bedrooms, a kitchen, and a bathroom. In the living room, my family and I often watch TV together and share interesting stories. My parents like to cook food in the kitchen, and I sometimes help them. My home is warm and full of love. I feel happy and safe there. It is the best place in the world for me. I love my house very much. What do you think of it?
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要梳理题干给出的4个必须覆盖的要点，避免漏写失分：第一步先承接题目给出的开头，先回答第一个问题，清晰说明自己家的房屋类型和所处位置，内容要真实自然；第二步罗列家里的房间总数和对应的房间类型，表述清晰有条理；第三步结合不同房间的功能，写出自己和家人在家的日常活动，适当补充小细节让内容不生硬；最后抒发自己对家的真实感受，收尾点题。全程要注意控制词数在80左右，语法使用准确，衔接流畅，符合征文的表达风格。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头，首先点明房屋属性：说明自己家是公寓，位于一栋楼的6层，完成第一个要点的表述；
2. 接下来清晰介绍房间情况：说明家中一共有5个房间，分别是客厅、两间卧室、厨房和卫生间，完整覆盖第二个要点；
3. 结合不同房间的场景描述家庭日常：写一家人常在客厅一起看电视、分享趣事，父母常在厨房做饭，自己偶尔会打下手，内容贴合生活，完成第三个要点；
4. 最后收尾抒发感受：点明家里充满爱，自己待在这里觉得幸福又安心，是全世界最好的地方，覆盖最后一个要点，整体调整语句让行文连贯，词数符合要求，没有语法错误。
【答案】
I'm Will and I'd like to introduce my home to you. It is a flat on the sixth floor in a building. There are five rooms in my home: a living room, two bedrooms, a kitchen, and a bathroom. In the living room, my family and I often watch TV together and share interesting stories. My parents like to cook food in the kitchen, and I sometimes help them. My home is warm and full of love. I feel happy and safe there. It is the best place in the world for me. I love my house very much. What do you think of it?
【知识点】
居家主题写作，一般现在时应用，要点式作文规范
【点评】
本篇短文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部4个写作要点，内容贴合日常家庭生活，语句通顺连贯，没有语法错误，词数符合80左右的要求，情感表达真挚自然，符合英文征文的投稿语境，是一篇得分很高的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题首先要梳理题干给出的4个必须覆盖的要点，避免漏写失分：第一步先承接题目给出的开头，先回答第一个问题，清晰说明自己家的房屋类型和所处位置，内容要真实自然；第二步罗列家里的房间总数和对应的房间类型，表述清晰有条理；第三步结合不同房间的功能，写出自己和家人在家的日常活动，适当补充小细节让内容不生硬；最后抒发自己对家的真实感受，收尾点题。全程要注意控制词数在80左右，语法使用准确，衔接流畅，符合征文的表达风格。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头，首先点明房屋属性：说明自己家是公寓，位于一栋楼的6层，完成第一个要点的表述；
2. 接下来清晰介绍房间情况：说明家中一共有5个房间，分别是客厅、两间卧室、厨房和卫生间，完整覆盖第二个要点；
3. 结合不同房间的场景描述家庭日常：写一家人常在客厅一起看电视、分享趣事，父母常在厨房做饭，自己偶尔会打下手，内容贴合生活，完成第三个要点；
4. 最后收尾抒发感受：点明家里充满爱，自己待在这里觉得幸福又安心，是全世界最好的地方，覆盖最后一个要点，整体调整语句让行文连贯，词数符合要求，没有语法错误。
【答案】
I'm Will and I'd like to introduce my home to you. It is a flat on the sixth floor in a building. There are five rooms in my home: a living room, two bedrooms, a kitchen, and a bathroom. In the living room, my family and I often watch TV together and share interesting stories. My parents like to cook food in the kitchen, and I sometimes help them. My home is warm and full of love. I feel happy and safe there. It is the best place in the world for me. I love my house very much. What do you think of it?
【知识点】
居家主题写作，一般现在时应用，要点式作文规范
【点评】
本篇短文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部4个写作要点，内容贴合日常家庭生活，语句通顺连贯，没有语法错误，词数符合80左右的要求，情感表达真挚自然，符合英文征文的投稿语境，是一篇得分很高的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.7
