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假如你是李明，你的外教 Mr Tyler 让你用英语向同学们介绍一种动物。以下是你找到的关于金丝猴的资料，请根据下表，写一篇演讲稿，向大家介绍一下金丝猴。
【要求】1. 要点齐全，句子通顺，不得逐字翻译。
2. 不要出现真实的人名和校名。
3. 80 词左右。
The Golden Monkeys
Hello! My name is Li Ming.
【要求】1. 要点齐全，句子通顺，不得逐字翻译。
2. 不要出现真实的人名和校名。
3. 80 词左右。
The Golden Monkeys
Hello! My name is Li Ming.
The Golden Monkeys are a kind of special animals in China. Let me tell you something about them.
The Golden Monkeys are usually yellow or black, and they live in the south of China. Besides, they live in groups and live on leaves and fruit. However, they are in danger as a result of the hunting of human beings. What's worse, people cut down so many trees that their habitat becomes smaller and smaller.
In my opinion, it's our duty to protect the Golden Monkeys. First of all, people shouldn't cut down too many trees any more. Meanwhile, establishing nature reserves is the most effective way to save the endangered animals. Let's take action from now on!
The Golden Monkeys are usually yellow or black, and they live in the south of China. Besides, they live in groups and live on leaves and fruit. However, they are in danger as a result of the hunting of human beings. What's worse, people cut down so many trees that their habitat becomes smaller and smaller.
In my opinion, it's our duty to protect the Golden Monkeys. First of all, people shouldn't cut down too many trees any more. Meanwhile, establishing nature reserves is the most effective way to save the endangered animals. Let's take action from now on!
答案
One possible version
The Golden Monkeys
Hello! My name is Li Ming. The Golden Monkeys are a kind of special animals in China. Let me tell you something about them.
The Golden Monkeys are usually yellow or black, and they live in the south of China. Besides, they live in groups and live on leaves and fruit. However, they are in danger as a result of the hunting of human beings. What's worse, people cut down so many trees that their habitat becomes smaller and smaller.
In my opinion, it's our duty to protect the Golden Monkeys. First of all, people shouldn't cut down too many trees any more. Meanwhile, establishing nature reserves is the most effective way to save the endangered animals. Let's take action from now on!
The Golden Monkeys
Hello! My name is Li Ming. The Golden Monkeys are a kind of special animals in China. Let me tell you something about them.
The Golden Monkeys are usually yellow or black, and they live in the south of China. Besides, they live in groups and live on leaves and fruit. However, they are in danger as a result of the hunting of human beings. What's worse, people cut down so many trees that their habitat becomes smaller and smaller.
In my opinion, it's our duty to protect the Golden Monkeys. First of all, people shouldn't cut down too many trees any more. Meanwhile, establishing nature reserves is the most effective way to save the endangered animals. Let's take action from now on!
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先明确写作定位：这是一篇面向全班的英语演讲稿，主题是介绍金丝猴。第一步先梳理所有给定的要点：金丝猴的基本属性、毛色、栖息地、生活习性、濒危现状、至少两条保护建议，要确保所有要点都不遗漏。接下来规划写作逻辑：承接题干给出的开头句，自然引出介绍金丝猴的主题，按照从基础外形特征，到生存区域、生活习性，再到当前的生存危机，最后提出保护建议、发出呼吁的顺序排布内容，选用合适的过渡连接词让语句连贯，避免生硬逐字翻译表格内容，适当补充合理细节，控制篇幅符合字数要求，同时贴合演讲稿的口语化表达风格。
【解析】
1. 开篇衔接题干给出的开头，自然引入介绍金丝猴的话题，让行文流畅自然。
2. 依次整合表格基础信息：先介绍金丝猴的毛色特征，说明它们生活在中国南方区域，接着介绍它们的习性：群居生活，以树叶和水果为食物，把基础信息清晰传递出来。
3. 转折说明生存现状：点明金丝猴因为人类捕猎正处于危险中，补充符合现实逻辑的细节，比如人类砍伐树木导致它们的栖息地不断缩小，让内容更充实。
4. 最后给出符合要求的至少两条保护建议：比如禁止过度砍伐树木、建立自然保护区，最后发出共同行动保护金丝猴的呼吁，符合演讲稿的场景要求，所有要点全部覆盖，语句通顺。
【答案】
The Golden Monkeys
Hello! My name is Li Ming. The Golden Monkeys are a kind of special animals in China. Let me tell you something about them.
The Golden Monkeys are usually yellow or black, and they live in the south of China. Besides, they live in groups and live on leaves and fruit. However, they are in danger as a result of the hunting of human beings. What's worse, people cut down so many trees that their habitat becomes smaller and smaller.
In my opinion, it's our duty to protect the Golden Monkeys. First of all, people shouldn't cut down too many trees any more. Meanwhile, establishing nature reserves is the most effective way to save the endangered animals. Let's take action from now on!
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作，动物类话题表达，濒危动物保护
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖了题干表格给出的所有要点，行文逻辑清晰，过渡词使用自然恰当，没有生硬逐字翻译表格内容，补充的栖息地缩小的细节符合现实逻辑，给出的两条保护建议满足题干要求，整体语气贴合面向同学演讲的场景，用词准确地道，符合初中英语写作的评分标准。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先明确写作定位：这是一篇面向全班的英语演讲稿，主题是介绍金丝猴。第一步先梳理所有给定的要点：金丝猴的基本属性、毛色、栖息地、生活习性、濒危现状、至少两条保护建议，要确保所有要点都不遗漏。接下来规划写作逻辑：承接题干给出的开头句，自然引出介绍金丝猴的主题，按照从基础外形特征，到生存区域、生活习性，再到当前的生存危机，最后提出保护建议、发出呼吁的顺序排布内容，选用合适的过渡连接词让语句连贯，避免生硬逐字翻译表格内容，适当补充合理细节，控制篇幅符合字数要求，同时贴合演讲稿的口语化表达风格。
【解析】
1. 开篇衔接题干给出的开头，自然引入介绍金丝猴的话题，让行文流畅自然。
2. 依次整合表格基础信息：先介绍金丝猴的毛色特征，说明它们生活在中国南方区域，接着介绍它们的习性：群居生活，以树叶和水果为食物，把基础信息清晰传递出来。
3. 转折说明生存现状：点明金丝猴因为人类捕猎正处于危险中，补充符合现实逻辑的细节，比如人类砍伐树木导致它们的栖息地不断缩小，让内容更充实。
4. 最后给出符合要求的至少两条保护建议：比如禁止过度砍伐树木、建立自然保护区，最后发出共同行动保护金丝猴的呼吁，符合演讲稿的场景要求，所有要点全部覆盖，语句通顺。
【答案】
The Golden Monkeys
Hello! My name is Li Ming. The Golden Monkeys are a kind of special animals in China. Let me tell you something about them.
The Golden Monkeys are usually yellow or black, and they live in the south of China. Besides, they live in groups and live on leaves and fruit. However, they are in danger as a result of the hunting of human beings. What's worse, people cut down so many trees that their habitat becomes smaller and smaller.
In my opinion, it's our duty to protect the Golden Monkeys. First of all, people shouldn't cut down too many trees any more. Meanwhile, establishing nature reserves is the most effective way to save the endangered animals. Let's take action from now on!
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作，动物类话题表达，濒危动物保护
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖了题干表格给出的所有要点，行文逻辑清晰，过渡词使用自然恰当，没有生硬逐字翻译表格内容，补充的栖息地缩小的细节符合现实逻辑，给出的两条保护建议满足题干要求，整体语气贴合面向同学演讲的场景，用词准确地道，符合初中英语写作的评分标准。
【难度系数】
0.6
