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六、书面表达
在过去一年的初一学习
生活中,你肯定参加过一些户外活动,像学校旅
行、露营、爬山、骑自行车等等。你班将开展以
"A wonderful outdoor activity"为题的英语作文
活动,并在班级内展示。请根据以下要求完成
一篇文章。
要点:
1. When and where was the activity?
2. What did you do in the activity?
3. How did you feel about the activity?
注意:
1. 词数不少于100,开头已给出,不计入总
词数。
2. 内容必须包括但不限于给出的要点,可以适当发挥,使短文完整、流畅。
3. 文中不得提及真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
A wonderful outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year, I
took part in many wonderful outdoor activities.
在过去一年的初一学习
生活中,你肯定参加过一些户外活动,像学校旅
行、露营、爬山、骑自行车等等。你班将开展以
"A wonderful outdoor activity"为题的英语作文
活动,并在班级内展示。请根据以下要求完成
一篇文章。
要点:
1. When and where was the activity?
2. What did you do in the activity?
3. How did you feel about the activity?
注意:
1. 词数不少于100,开头已给出,不计入总
词数。
2. 内容必须包括但不限于给出的要点,可以适当发挥,使短文完整、流畅。
3. 文中不得提及真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
A wonderful outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year, I
took part in many wonderful outdoor activities.
Among them, the school trip to Green Hill last October was the most unforgettable one.
When we got there in the morning, the hill was covered with green trees and colourful flowers. First, we walked along the path, singing and cheering for each other. After reaching the top, we all felt very proud. Then, we had a picnic at noon. Everyone shared their delicious food, like sandwiches, fruits and snacks. We talked happily while eating. In the afternoon, we played a group game called "Eagle Catches Chicken". It was so funny that we laughed a lot.
This activity made me feel relaxed and happy. It not only let me enjoy the beauty of nature but also helped me get closer to my classmates. I really hope we can have such a great outdoor activity again soon.
When we got there in the morning, the hill was covered with green trees and colourful flowers. First, we walked along the path, singing and cheering for each other. After reaching the top, we all felt very proud. Then, we had a picnic at noon. Everyone shared their delicious food, like sandwiches, fruits and snacks. We talked happily while eating. In the afternoon, we played a group game called "Eagle Catches Chicken". It was so funny that we laughed a lot.
This activity made me feel relaxed and happy. It not only let me enjoy the beauty of nature but also helped me get closer to my classmates. I really hope we can have such a great outdoor activity again soon.
答案
六、One possible version:
A wonderful outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year, I took part in many wonderful outdoor activities. Among them, the school trip to Green Hill last October was the most unforgettable one.
When we got there in the morning, the hill was covered with green trees and colourful flowers. First, we walked along the path, singing and cheering for each other. After reaching the top, we all felt very proud. Then, we had a picnic at noon. Everyone shared their delicious food, like sandwiches, fruits and snacks. We talked happily while eating. In the afternoon, we played a group game called "Eagle Catches Chicken". It was so funny that we laughed a lot.
This activity made me feel relaxed and happy. It not only let me enjoy the beauty of nature but also helped me get closer to my classmates. I really hope we can have such a great outdoor activity again soon.
A wonderful outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year, I took part in many wonderful outdoor activities. Among them, the school trip to Green Hill last October was the most unforgettable one.
When we got there in the morning, the hill was covered with green trees and colourful flowers. First, we walked along the path, singing and cheering for each other. After reaching the top, we all felt very proud. Then, we had a picnic at noon. Everyone shared their delicious food, like sandwiches, fruits and snacks. We talked happily while eating. In the afternoon, we played a group game called "Eagle Catches Chicken". It was so funny that we laughed a lot.
This activity made me feel relaxed and happy. It not only let me enjoy the beauty of nature but also helped me get closer to my classmates. I really hope we can have such a great outdoor activity again soon.
解析
【分析】
首先，我们需要紧扣题目要求，围绕“A wonderful outdoor activity”展开写作。第一步，先承接开头，从众多活动中选定一个最难忘的具体活动，明确交代活动的时间和地点，满足第一个要点；第二步，详细描述活动过程，可按时间顺序（上午、中午、下午）来安排内容，比如爬山、野餐、玩游戏等，让活动内容充实具体，同时加入细节描写，比如沿途风景、大家的互动，让文章更生动；第三步，表达活动感受，不仅要写出自己的心情，还要升华活动的意义，比如亲近自然、增进同学情谊等，满足第三个要点。写作时要注意使用一般过去时，避免提及真实信息，保证词数达标，语句流畅。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，引出核心活动：开篇承接已给内容，点明去年十月去青山的学校旅行是最难忘的活动，明确交代活动的时间（last October）和地点（Green Hill），回应第一个写作要点。
2. 分时段详述活动过程：
上午：描写到达时的山景，接着写沿途爬山的状态，登顶后的自豪感，展现活动的第一个环节；
中午：描述野餐环节，大家分享食物、愉快交谈的场景，丰富活动内容；
下午：介绍玩“老鹰捉小鸡”的集体游戏，用“so...that...”句式突出游戏的欢乐氛围，让活动更具画面感。
3. 表达活动感受：先写出放松开心的心情，再升华活动意义——欣赏自然美景、拉近同学距离，最后表达对类似活动的期待，回应第三个写作要点。全文使用一般过去时，符合过去活动的语境，句式多样，语言流畅自然。
【答案】
One possible version:
A wonderful outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year, I took part in many wonderful outdoor activities. Among them, the school trip to Green Hill last October was the most unforgettable one.
When we got there in the morning, the hill was covered with green trees and colourful flowers. First, we walked along the path, singing and cheering for each other. After reaching the top, we all felt very proud. Then, we had a picnic at noon. Everyone shared their delicious food, like sandwiches, fruits and snacks. We talked happily while eating. In the afternoon, we played a group game called "Eagle Catches Chicken". It was so funny that we laughed a lot.
This activity made me feel relaxed and happy. It not only let me enjoy the beauty of nature but also helped me get closer to my classmates. I really hope we can have such a great outdoor activity again soon.
【知识点】
一般过去时运用、记叙文写作、英语情景表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目所有要点，内容充实且有层次，按时间顺序清晰展现活动全过程，细节描写生动，能让读者感受到活动的欢乐氛围。感受部分既有个人情绪表达，又有对活动意义的升华，语言流畅自然，句式丰富，符合初一英语书面表达的要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先，我们需要紧扣题目要求，围绕“A wonderful outdoor activity”展开写作。第一步，先承接开头，从众多活动中选定一个最难忘的具体活动，明确交代活动的时间和地点，满足第一个要点；第二步，详细描述活动过程，可按时间顺序（上午、中午、下午）来安排内容，比如爬山、野餐、玩游戏等，让活动内容充实具体，同时加入细节描写，比如沿途风景、大家的互动，让文章更生动；第三步，表达活动感受，不仅要写出自己的心情，还要升华活动的意义，比如亲近自然、增进同学情谊等，满足第三个要点。写作时要注意使用一般过去时，避免提及真实信息，保证词数达标，语句流畅。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，引出核心活动：开篇承接已给内容，点明去年十月去青山的学校旅行是最难忘的活动，明确交代活动的时间（last October）和地点（Green Hill），回应第一个写作要点。
2. 分时段详述活动过程：
上午：描写到达时的山景，接着写沿途爬山的状态，登顶后的自豪感，展现活动的第一个环节；
中午：描述野餐环节，大家分享食物、愉快交谈的场景，丰富活动内容；
下午：介绍玩“老鹰捉小鸡”的集体游戏，用“so...that...”句式突出游戏的欢乐氛围，让活动更具画面感。
3. 表达活动感受：先写出放松开心的心情，再升华活动意义——欣赏自然美景、拉近同学距离，最后表达对类似活动的期待，回应第三个写作要点。全文使用一般过去时，符合过去活动的语境，句式多样，语言流畅自然。
【答案】
One possible version:
A wonderful outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year, I took part in many wonderful outdoor activities. Among them, the school trip to Green Hill last October was the most unforgettable one.
When we got there in the morning, the hill was covered with green trees and colourful flowers. First, we walked along the path, singing and cheering for each other. After reaching the top, we all felt very proud. Then, we had a picnic at noon. Everyone shared their delicious food, like sandwiches, fruits and snacks. We talked happily while eating. In the afternoon, we played a group game called "Eagle Catches Chicken". It was so funny that we laughed a lot.
This activity made me feel relaxed and happy. It not only let me enjoy the beauty of nature but also helped me get closer to my classmates. I really hope we can have such a great outdoor activity again soon.
【知识点】
一般过去时运用、记叙文写作、英语情景表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目所有要点，内容充实且有层次，按时间顺序清晰展现活动全过程，细节描写生动，能让读者感受到活动的欢乐氛围。感受部分既有个人情绪表达，又有对活动意义的升华，语言流畅自然，句式丰富，符合初一英语书面表达的要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
