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七、书面表达。
随着社会的发展，我们的生活变得越来越好。学校英语角本周的主题是“Changes around us”。请你根据下表中的提示，用英语写一篇短文，谈谈自己的看法。
要求：
1. 表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；
2. 必须包括所有相关信息，并作适当发挥；
3. 词数 100 左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；
4. 不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
Changes around us
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around us.
随着社会的发展，我们的生活变得越来越好。学校英语角本周的主题是“Changes around us”。请你根据下表中的提示，用英语写一篇短文，谈谈自己的看法。
要求：
1. 表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；
2. 必须包括所有相关信息，并作适当发挥；
3. 词数 100 左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；
4. 不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
Changes around us
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around us.
答案
One possible version:
Changes Around Us
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around us.
As for travel, many people enjoy travelling in their spare time. Some people like travelling online and more and more people can afford to travel abroad. Our studies are also changing. For example, more and more students show an interest in reading and more group work and discussions are done in class, which can help us learn more. More and more people have their own cars. At the same time, more and more people prefer to walk to school instead of driving. And high-speed trains make people travel faster and easier. Our environment changes a lot too. The air is fresher and the water is cleaner. We often take a walk happily in the park.
In a word, our life is becoming better and better. We look forward to a better future.
Changes Around Us
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around us.
As for travel, many people enjoy travelling in their spare time. Some people like travelling online and more and more people can afford to travel abroad. Our studies are also changing. For example, more and more students show an interest in reading and more group work and discussions are done in class, which can help us learn more. More and more people have their own cars. At the same time, more and more people prefer to walk to school instead of driving. And high-speed trains make people travel faster and easier. Our environment changes a lot too. The air is fresher and the water is cleaner. We often take a walk happily in the park.
In a word, our life is becoming better and better. We look forward to a better future.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先明确写作要求：主题是“Changes around us”，需要覆盖图中Travel、Study、Traffic、Environment四个板块的所有提示信息，词数100左右，开头已给出。接下来梳理写作思路：1. 先承接给定开头，引出身边各领域的变化；2. 按照四个模块的顺序依次展开介绍，每个模块把给出的提示短语自然融入内容中，还可以适当补充符合逻辑的细节让内容更流畅；3. 最后收尾总结，点明生活越来越好的主旨。写作时要注意描述变化多用现在完成时、一般现在时，保证语法正确，上下文用衔接词串联，不要出现真实姓名校名等信息。
【解析】
1. 梳理所有必写要点，避免遗漏：
① 旅行板块：提到线上旅游、越来越多人可以出国旅行；
② 学习板块：提到学生更多阅读、课堂上更多小组合作；
③ 交通板块：提到私家车普及、高铁让出行更便捷；
④ 环境板块：补充合理的正向变化，比如空气更清新、水质更好等。
2. 搭建行文结构：
第一部分：承接题目给出的开头句，自然过渡到各领域的变化介绍；
第二部分：用As for, Besides, What's more等衔接词，依次介绍旅行、学习、交通、环境四个方面的具体变化，把所有提示信息全部涵盖；
第三部分：结尾总结，点明我们的生活正变得越来越好，表达对未来的期待。
3. 最后通读全文，检查语法错误，调整语句连贯性，控制总词数符合要求，确认没有出现真实个人相关信息。
【答案】
One possible version:
Changes Around Us
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around us.
As for travel, many people enjoy travelling in their spare time. Some people like travelling online and more and more people can afford to travel abroad. Our studies are also changing. For example, more and more students show an interest in reading and more group work and discussions are done in class, which can help us learn more. More and more people have their own cars. At the same time, more and more people prefer to walk to school instead of driving. And high-speed trains make people travel faster and easier. Our environment changes a lot too. The air is fresher and the water is cleaner. We often take a walk happily in the park.
In a word, our life is becoming better and better. We look forward to a better future.
【知识点】
现在完成时，话题写作，语篇衔接
【点评】
本题属于提纲类话题写作，给出的提示要点清晰明确，难度适中。既考查学生对日常相关词汇、时态的掌握程度，也锻炼学生整合信息、连贯表达的写作能力，同时引导学生观察和感知身边生活的正向变化，符合初中英语写作的考察要求。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先明确写作要求：主题是“Changes around us”，需要覆盖图中Travel、Study、Traffic、Environment四个板块的所有提示信息，词数100左右，开头已给出。接下来梳理写作思路：1. 先承接给定开头，引出身边各领域的变化；2. 按照四个模块的顺序依次展开介绍，每个模块把给出的提示短语自然融入内容中，还可以适当补充符合逻辑的细节让内容更流畅；3. 最后收尾总结，点明生活越来越好的主旨。写作时要注意描述变化多用现在完成时、一般现在时，保证语法正确，上下文用衔接词串联，不要出现真实姓名校名等信息。
【解析】
1. 梳理所有必写要点，避免遗漏：
① 旅行板块：提到线上旅游、越来越多人可以出国旅行；
② 学习板块：提到学生更多阅读、课堂上更多小组合作；
③ 交通板块：提到私家车普及、高铁让出行更便捷；
④ 环境板块：补充合理的正向变化，比如空气更清新、水质更好等。
2. 搭建行文结构：
第一部分：承接题目给出的开头句，自然过渡到各领域的变化介绍；
第二部分：用As for, Besides, What's more等衔接词，依次介绍旅行、学习、交通、环境四个方面的具体变化，把所有提示信息全部涵盖；
第三部分：结尾总结，点明我们的生活正变得越来越好，表达对未来的期待。
3. 最后通读全文，检查语法错误，调整语句连贯性，控制总词数符合要求，确认没有出现真实个人相关信息。
【答案】
One possible version:
Changes Around Us
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around us.
As for travel, many people enjoy travelling in their spare time. Some people like travelling online and more and more people can afford to travel abroad. Our studies are also changing. For example, more and more students show an interest in reading and more group work and discussions are done in class, which can help us learn more. More and more people have their own cars. At the same time, more and more people prefer to walk to school instead of driving. And high-speed trains make people travel faster and easier. Our environment changes a lot too. The air is fresher and the water is cleaner. We often take a walk happily in the park.
In a word, our life is becoming better and better. We look forward to a better future.
【知识点】
现在完成时，话题写作，语篇衔接
【点评】
本题属于提纲类话题写作，给出的提示要点清晰明确，难度适中。既考查学生对日常相关词汇、时态的掌握程度，也锻炼学生整合信息、连贯表达的写作能力，同时引导学生观察和感知身边生活的正向变化，符合初中英语写作的考察要求。
【难度系数】
0.7
