写作提优
答案 D29
单元写作要求
本单元以“安然无恙”为话题，主要谈论突发事件和自然灾害，重点学习过去进行时。其书面表达命题形式主要是要求学生写一篇文章，描述自己经历过的紧急事件或自然灾害。
写作方法策略
如何叙述过去发生的事件
写这类文章时，首先要确定四要素——体裁、时态、人称、结构。文章开篇要简述事件背景，点明事件发生的时间、地点、人物等；主体部分要正确运用过去进行时的相关知识，详写事情的发展过程；结尾要阐明个人感受及看法，总结全文。
思路导引
佳作展示
高分词句
事件
背景
① Looking back on the past two years, everyone has some unforgettable experiences. An important event ②which I remember well was that I survived an earthquake last summer.
事件
经过
I was at home doing my homework when an earthquake started. When the ground began to shake violently, people in the building were running ③in all directions. Everything fell off the shelves. I was in fear at first, ④with my heart beating wildly, but I managed to rush out of the door. Outside, I saw a little girl lost in the crowd. I went over and tried to calm her down. ⑤As we were trying to find a safe place, the shaking ended and the rescue teams quickly arrived.

Finally, we were safe and sound. This experience made me understand the power of nature and the importance of unity.
①运用现在分词短语作状语。
②运用which引导定语从句；that引导表语从句。
③运用高级词组in all directions，fall off，in fear，calm down，safe and sound。
④运用with复合结构在句中作伴随状语。
⑤在as引导的时间状语从句中使用过去进行时。

符合单元要求的同主题参考习作：
# My Unforgettable Experience
Looking back on my past life, the rainstorm I met last summer is the event that I will never forget.
It was a weekday afternoon, I was playing outside with my little cousin when the sky suddenly turned dark. The strong wind blew fiercely, and the rain started to pour soon. People in the neighbourhood were running in all directions to find a place to stay away from the rain. The rain beat heavily against the windows of the houses nearby. I was full of fear at first, with my heart beating fast, but I tried to calm my little cousin down. As we were rushing to a safe building, my parents came to find us and we got into the building successfully.
Soon the rain stopped, and we were all safe and sound. This experience makes me learn that we should keep calm when we face a sudden disaster, and the power of helping each other is really great.

【分析】本题为单元英语写作题，要求围绕“安然无恙”话题，描述自身经历的突发事件或自然灾害，需重点运用过去进行时。解题思路：先明确写作核心要素——体裁为记叙文、时态以过去时为主（含过去进行时）、人称用第一人称、结构分为“事件背景→经过→个人感想”；开篇点明事件，主体用过去进行时详写事件发展过程，结尾结合主题表达感悟，同时运用高分词句和语法结构提升写作质量。
【解析】写作步骤：1. 确定写作内容：选取自身经历的突发事件（如暴雨），紧扣“安然无恙”主题；2. 结构搭建：①背景段：点明事件（去年夏天的暴雨）、时间（工作日下午）、人物（自己和表弟）；②经过段：用过去进行时描述事件发生时的动作（如was playing, were running等），加入环境细节（狂风、暴雨）和人物反应（恐惧、冷静互助）；③结尾段：总结事件结果（安然无恙），表达感悟（面对突发灾害要冷静、互助重要）；3. 语言运用：使用高分词组（in all directions, safe and sound等），结合语法结构（定语从句、with复合结构），符合单元写作要求。
【答案】# My Unforgettable Experience
Looking back on my past life, the rainstorm I met last summer is the event that I will never forget.
It was a weekday afternoon, I was playing outside with my little cousin when the sky suddenly turned dark. The strong wind blew fiercely, and the rain started to pour soon. People in the neighbourhood were running in all directions to find a place to stay away from the rain. The rain beat heavily against the windows of the houses nearby. I was full of fear at first, with my heart beating fast, but I tried to calm my little cousin down. As we were rushing to a safe building, my parents came to find us and we got into the building successfully.
Soon the rain stopped, and we were all safe and sound. This experience makes me learn that we should keep calm when we face a sudden disaster, and the power of helping each other is really great.
【知识点】英语记叙文写作、过去进行时、突发事件描写
【点评】本题紧扣单元写作要求，参考习作结构清晰，运用过去进行时还原事件场景，细节丰富，结尾感悟贴合主题，能有效帮助学生掌握此类记叙文的写作方法。
【难度系数】0.5

话题写作积累
1. 自言自语
2. 有气无力
3. 搬开；移开
4. 被困
5. 紧紧按压伤口
6. 尽可能快地
7. 如果您所在的大楼着火了，请用一块湿布捂住嘴，以免被浓烟熏到。

8. 昨天凌晨五点左右，暴风雪渐渐平息，我才终于得以入睡。

9. 那是一次非比寻常的经历，它让我意识到困难时期应该互相帮助。

10. 生命无价，安全第一。

1. say to oneself
2. in a weak voice
3. move away
4. be trapped
5. press the wound firmly
6. as fast as possible
7. If your building is on fire, cover your mouth with a wet piece of cloth to protect yourself from the thick smoke.
8. I finally fell asleep when/while the snowstorm was dying down at about 5:00 a.m. yesterday.
9. It was an unusual experience which made me realize that we should help each other in times of difficulty.
10. Life is priceless; safety comes first.

【分析】本题为汉译英的基础短语与句子翻译题，解题时需掌握英语常用固定短语、动词搭配，以及符合英语表达习惯的句子结构：短语翻译要对应常用的介词短语、动词短语；句子翻译需注意时态（如过去进行时描述过去动作）、语态（如被动结构“被困”），以及目的、时间状语的正确表达，确保翻译准确规范。
【解析】1. say to oneself；2. in a weak voice；3. move away；4. be trapped；5. press the wound firmly；6. as fast as possible；7. If your building is on fire, cover your mouth with a wet piece of cloth to protect yourself from the thick smoke.；8. I finally fell asleep when/while the snowstorm was dying down at about 5:00 a.m. yesterday.；9. It was an unusual experience which made me realize that we should help each other in times of difficulty.；10. Life is priceless; safety comes first.
【答案】1. say to oneself
2. in a weak voice
3. move away
4. be trapped
5. press the wound firmly
6. as fast as possible
7. If your building is on fire, cover your mouth with a wet piece of cloth to protect yourself from the thick smoke.
8. I finally fell asleep when/while the snowstorm was dying down at about 5:00 a.m. yesterday.
9. It was an unusual experience which made me realize that we should help each other in times of difficulty.
10. Life is priceless; safety comes first.
【知识点】汉译英、常用短语、句子翻译
【点评】本题考查话题写作必备的基础英语表达，是写作积累的核心内容，需准确记忆固定搭配与常用句式，为写作奠定基础。
【难度系数】0.5