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四、书面表达。（30 分）
假如你是王凡，是一名八年级的中学生。上周五的上午，你们班去了动物园。请根据下面的提示，写一篇不少于 60 词的短文，介绍一下这次活动。
提示：
1. 去动物园的交通方式；
2. 对动物园里动物们的观察和描述；
3. 你在此次活动中的收获。
假如你是王凡，是一名八年级的中学生。上周五的上午，你们班去了动物园。请根据下面的提示，写一篇不少于 60 词的短文，介绍一下这次活动。
提示：
1. 去动物园的交通方式；
2. 对动物园里动物们的观察和描述；
3. 你在此次活动中的收获。
答案
One possible version:
A Trip to the Zoo
Last Friday morning, our class went to the zoo. We went there by bus. I got up late. When I arrived at the bus stop, my classmates were waiting for me.
When we got to the zoo, some people were dancing on the square in front of the zoo. When we went into the zoo, the tigers were eating meat, the monkeys were climbing the trees and the lions were sleeping under the trees. While we were walking around the zoo, Li Lei took some photos.
We had a great time in the zoo.
A Trip to the Zoo
Last Friday morning, our class went to the zoo. We went there by bus. I got up late. When I arrived at the bus stop, my classmates were waiting for me.
When we got to the zoo, some people were dancing on the square in front of the zoo. When we went into the zoo, the tigers were eating meat, the monkeys were climbing the trees and the lions were sleeping under the trees. While we were walking around the zoo, Li Lei took some photos.
We had a great time in the zoo.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步要先完成审题：明确身份是八年级学生王凡，写作主题是上周五班级的动物园出行，硬性要求是字数不少于60词，必须覆盖题干给出的三个提示点，不能漏项。接下来梳理写作思路：首先开篇直接交代出行的基本背景，顺理成章点明你们选择的交通方式，完成第一个提示点；接着写进入动物园后的所见，把观察到的不同动物的状态清晰描述出来，用过去进行时描绘当时的场景会更生动，完成第二个提示点；最后收尾写这次出行的感受和学到的内容，也就是活动收获，完成第三个提示点。最后检查时态统一、没有语法错误，字数达标即可。
【解析】
1. 文体与时态定位：这是一篇叙事类记叙文，整体用一般过去时叙事，描述出行过程中正在发生的场景可以搭配过去进行时，让内容更鲜活。
2. 搭建行文框架：
第一段开篇点题，交代上周五上午我们班去动物园的核心事件，说明大家坐公交前往，补充自己差点迟到、同学在站点等我的小细节，让内容更真实。
第二段作为主体部分，依次描写入园后看到的场景：广场上有人跳舞，园里老虎在吃肉、猴子在爬树、狮子在树下睡觉，还补充同行同学拍照的小细节，把动物观察的内容写饱满。
第三段收尾，点明大家玩得非常开心，完成活动收获的表述。
3. 通读调整语句，保证衔接自然，字数远超60词的要求，没有语法错误。
【答案】
A Trip to the Zoo
Last Friday morning, our class went to the zoo. We went there by bus. I got up late. When I arrived at the bus stop, my classmates were waiting for me.
When we got to the zoo, some people were dancing on the square in front of the zoo. When we went into the zoo, the tigers were eating meat, the monkeys were climbing the trees and the lions were sleeping under the trees. While we were walking around the zoo, Li Lei took some photos.
We had a great time in the zoo.
【知识点】
过去进行时应用，记叙文写作，要点类作文审题
【点评】
这篇参考范文完全覆盖了题干全部三个提示要点，叙事脉络清晰，时态运用准确恰当，用多个when/while引导的时间状语从句串联不同场景，行文流畅自然，完全符合八年级学生的写作水平。同学们写作时也可以结合自身实际补充更多个性化收获，比如补充自己了解到了很多动物习性、意识到要保护野生动物等内容，进一步提升作文的丰富度。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步要先完成审题：明确身份是八年级学生王凡，写作主题是上周五班级的动物园出行，硬性要求是字数不少于60词，必须覆盖题干给出的三个提示点，不能漏项。接下来梳理写作思路：首先开篇直接交代出行的基本背景，顺理成章点明你们选择的交通方式，完成第一个提示点；接着写进入动物园后的所见，把观察到的不同动物的状态清晰描述出来，用过去进行时描绘当时的场景会更生动，完成第二个提示点；最后收尾写这次出行的感受和学到的内容，也就是活动收获，完成第三个提示点。最后检查时态统一、没有语法错误，字数达标即可。
【解析】
1. 文体与时态定位：这是一篇叙事类记叙文，整体用一般过去时叙事，描述出行过程中正在发生的场景可以搭配过去进行时，让内容更鲜活。
2. 搭建行文框架：
第一段开篇点题，交代上周五上午我们班去动物园的核心事件，说明大家坐公交前往，补充自己差点迟到、同学在站点等我的小细节，让内容更真实。
第二段作为主体部分，依次描写入园后看到的场景：广场上有人跳舞，园里老虎在吃肉、猴子在爬树、狮子在树下睡觉，还补充同行同学拍照的小细节，把动物观察的内容写饱满。
第三段收尾，点明大家玩得非常开心，完成活动收获的表述。
3. 通读调整语句，保证衔接自然，字数远超60词的要求，没有语法错误。
【答案】
A Trip to the Zoo
Last Friday morning, our class went to the zoo. We went there by bus. I got up late. When I arrived at the bus stop, my classmates were waiting for me.
When we got to the zoo, some people were dancing on the square in front of the zoo. When we went into the zoo, the tigers were eating meat, the monkeys were climbing the trees and the lions were sleeping under the trees. While we were walking around the zoo, Li Lei took some photos.
We had a great time in the zoo.
【知识点】
过去进行时应用，记叙文写作，要点类作文审题
【点评】
这篇参考范文完全覆盖了题干全部三个提示要点，叙事脉络清晰，时态运用准确恰当，用多个when/while引导的时间状语从句串联不同场景，行文流畅自然，完全符合八年级学生的写作水平。同学们写作时也可以结合自身实际补充更多个性化收获，比如补充自己了解到了很多动物习性、意识到要保护野生动物等内容，进一步提升作文的丰富度。
【难度系数】
0.7
