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四、根据下列思维导图,分享一段难忘的经历
Last summer, we had a very memorable day! We were on holiday in the
mountains. At first, everything seemed nice. We put up the tents and planned to
have a picnic. My parents put all kinds of food on the picnic mat. We played games
and told jokes to each other, laughing happily. Suddenly, it began to rain heavily.
We ran to the tents but found it was wet inside. We ran to the hut quickly, but
everyone still got wet. Feeling cold, we could do nothing but wait. "There is a
double rainbow across the sky!" We looked up, smiling and shouting, "How
amazing it is!"
It was really a day to remember. I'll never forget it.
It was really a day to remember. I'll never forget it.
答案
四、One possible version
Last summer, we had a very memorable day! We were on holiday in the
mountains. At first, everything seemed nice. We put up the tents and planned to
have a picnic. My parents put all kinds of food on the picnic mat. We played games
and told jokes to each other, laughing happily. Suddenly, it began to rain heavily.
We ran to the tents but found it was wet inside. We ran to the hut quickly, but
everyone still got wet. Feeling cold, we could do nothing but wait. "There is a
double rainbow across the sky!" We looked up, smiling and shouting, "How
amazing it is!"
It was really a day to remember. I'll never forget it.
Last summer, we had a very memorable day! We were on holiday in the
mountains. At first, everything seemed nice. We put up the tents and planned to
have a picnic. My parents put all kinds of food on the picnic mat. We played games
and told jokes to each other, laughing happily. Suddenly, it began to rain heavily.
We ran to the tents but found it was wet inside. We ran to the hut quickly, but
everyone still got wet. Feeling cold, we could do nothing but wait. "There is a
double rainbow across the sky!" We looked up, smiling and shouting, "How
amazing it is!"
It was really a day to remember. I'll never forget it.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇记事类英语开放写作题，我们可以按照思维导图给出的5个核心问题逐步搭建写作框架：第一步先确定事件的时间和地点，选择贴近日常的生活化场景比如夏日山间度假，很容易拓展内容；第二步填充事件的具体经过，把自己做的事、看到的景象按时间先后顺序梳理出来，让内容有起伏感；第三步补充不同阶段的情绪感受，最后点明这次经历的收获，把所有要素用统一的叙事时态串联起来，就能写出逻辑完整的短文。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：直接点明事件发生的时间是去年夏天，地点是山间度假营地，对应思维导图里"When did it happen?"和"Where did it happen?"两个要求，开门见山交代背景。
2. 主体叙事：按照时间顺序先写前期的活动：搭帐篷、准备野餐、玩游戏说笑，之后加入转折情节：突降大雨大家狼狈躲雨，最后意外看到双彩虹，完整覆盖"What did you do or see?"的要求，让故事有起伏更生动。
3. 情感与收获部分：写出从最初的开心，到淋雨的狼狈，再到看见彩虹的惊喜的情绪变化，对应"How did you feel?"的要求，最后收尾点明这段经历让人难忘，也暗含了"困境中也可能遇见意外美好"的收获，对应"Did you learn anything?"的要求，全文统一使用一般过去时，符合记叙文叙事的时态规范。
【答案】
One possible version
Last summer, we had a very memorable day! We were on holiday in the mountains. At first, everything seemed nice. We put up the tents and planned to have a picnic. My parents put all kinds of food on the picnic mat. We played games and told jokes to each other, laughing happily. Suddenly, it began to rain heavily. We ran to the tents but found it was wet inside. We ran to the hut quickly, but everyone still got wet. Feeling cold, we could do nothing but wait. "There is a double rainbow across the sky!" We looked up, smiling and shouting, "How amazing it is!"
It was really a day to remember. I'll never forget it.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，一般过去时应用，叙事要素梳理
【点评】
本题借助思维导图把记事写作的核心要素全部明确给出，大幅降低了写作的谋篇难度，学生只需要把五个指定问题的内容全部覆盖，补充合理的生活化细节，保持时态统一，就可以完成合格的短文，非常适合锻炼初学写作的学生搭建叙事框架的能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
这是一篇记事类英语开放写作题，我们可以按照思维导图给出的5个核心问题逐步搭建写作框架：第一步先确定事件的时间和地点，选择贴近日常的生活化场景比如夏日山间度假，很容易拓展内容；第二步填充事件的具体经过，把自己做的事、看到的景象按时间先后顺序梳理出来，让内容有起伏感；第三步补充不同阶段的情绪感受，最后点明这次经历的收获，把所有要素用统一的叙事时态串联起来，就能写出逻辑完整的短文。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：直接点明事件发生的时间是去年夏天，地点是山间度假营地，对应思维导图里"When did it happen?"和"Where did it happen?"两个要求，开门见山交代背景。
2. 主体叙事：按照时间顺序先写前期的活动：搭帐篷、准备野餐、玩游戏说笑，之后加入转折情节：突降大雨大家狼狈躲雨，最后意外看到双彩虹，完整覆盖"What did you do or see?"的要求，让故事有起伏更生动。
3. 情感与收获部分：写出从最初的开心，到淋雨的狼狈，再到看见彩虹的惊喜的情绪变化，对应"How did you feel?"的要求，最后收尾点明这段经历让人难忘，也暗含了"困境中也可能遇见意外美好"的收获，对应"Did you learn anything?"的要求，全文统一使用一般过去时，符合记叙文叙事的时态规范。
【答案】
One possible version
Last summer, we had a very memorable day! We were on holiday in the mountains. At first, everything seemed nice. We put up the tents and planned to have a picnic. My parents put all kinds of food on the picnic mat. We played games and told jokes to each other, laughing happily. Suddenly, it began to rain heavily. We ran to the tents but found it was wet inside. We ran to the hut quickly, but everyone still got wet. Feeling cold, we could do nothing but wait. "There is a double rainbow across the sky!" We looked up, smiling and shouting, "How amazing it is!"
It was really a day to remember. I'll never forget it.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，一般过去时应用，叙事要素梳理
【点评】
本题借助思维导图把记事写作的核心要素全部明确给出，大幅降低了写作的谋篇难度，学生只需要把五个指定问题的内容全部覆盖，补充合理的生活化细节，保持时态统一，就可以完成合格的短文，非常适合锻炼初学写作的学生搭建叙事框架的能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
