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[写作提纲]
[范文展示]
①As a family member, it’s our duty to share housework. ②In my family, my parents are both doctors. They are often very tired after work. So I decided to help them with housework.
③Last Monday, when I got home, I swept the floor at first. Then, I collected all the books and put them in place. Finally, I cooked some porridge. ④When my parents came back home, they were very moved and praised me. ⑤How happy I was at that time.
⑥No matter how old we are, we can help with some housework. I believe labour creates a better life. Let’s take an active part in building a loving home.
[名师点评]
①介绍自己对做家务的看法。
②介绍自己的家庭情况。
③介绍自己所做的事情。
④介绍父母的反应。
⑤抒发自己的感受。
⑥表达自己对劳动的看法并号召更多的人参与做家务。
本文使用了大量短语和固定句式，通过连词和副词的巧妙运用避免了单一句式的反复使用，使上下文之间联系紧密，条理清晰。
[写作应用]
假如你是李华，准备参加学校举办的以“感恩”为主题的英语演讲比赛。请你以“A Special Birthday Gift”为题，根据以下提示问题，用英语写一篇演讲稿讲述你在父(母)亲或其他长辈生日那天，送上的一份特殊生日礼物——家务劳动。
1. Why do you choose to do housework?
2. What did you do? 3. How did you feel about doing housework? Something more about it.
注意:文中不得透露个人真实信息;词数80左右;标题、开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
A Special Birthday Gift
Hello, everyone! My name is Li Hua. Today, I’m very glad to have the chance to take part in this English speech contest.
Thank you for your listening!
请使用下面的表格完成自评并修改、誊写你的作文。
[范文展示]
①As a family member, it’s our duty to share housework. ②In my family, my parents are both doctors. They are often very tired after work. So I decided to help them with housework.
③Last Monday, when I got home, I swept the floor at first. Then, I collected all the books and put them in place. Finally, I cooked some porridge. ④When my parents came back home, they were very moved and praised me. ⑤How happy I was at that time.
⑥No matter how old we are, we can help with some housework. I believe labour creates a better life. Let’s take an active part in building a loving home.
[名师点评]
①介绍自己对做家务的看法。
②介绍自己的家庭情况。
③介绍自己所做的事情。
④介绍父母的反应。
⑤抒发自己的感受。
⑥表达自己对劳动的看法并号召更多的人参与做家务。
本文使用了大量短语和固定句式，通过连词和副词的巧妙运用避免了单一句式的反复使用，使上下文之间联系紧密，条理清晰。
[写作应用]
假如你是李华，准备参加学校举办的以“感恩”为主题的英语演讲比赛。请你以“A Special Birthday Gift”为题，根据以下提示问题，用英语写一篇演讲稿讲述你在父(母)亲或其他长辈生日那天，送上的一份特殊生日礼物——家务劳动。
1. Why do you choose to do housework?
2. What did you do? 3. How did you feel about doing housework? Something more about it.
注意:文中不得透露个人真实信息;词数80左右;标题、开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
A Special Birthday Gift
Hello, everyone! My name is Li Hua. Today, I’m very glad to have the chance to take part in this English speech contest.
Thank you for your listening!
请使用下面的表格完成自评并修改、誊写你的作文。
答案
One possible version:
A Special Birthday Gift
Hello, everyone! My name is Li Hua. Today, I'm very glad to have the chance to take part in this English speech contest. My special birthday gift for my mother is doing housework. As a family member, it's my duty to share housework. What's more, I want to show my love and care for my parents by doing housework.
Last Saturday was my mother's birthday. To give her a surprise, I decided to do some cleaning. First, I swept the floor and cleaned the tables. Then, I tidied the room and put everything in place. Finally, I cooked a nice meal.
When my mum came home, she was quite surprised. She said it was the best birthday gift she had. How happy I felt! I plan to do more housework in the future.
Thank you for your listening!
A Special Birthday Gift
Hello, everyone! My name is Li Hua. Today, I'm very glad to have the chance to take part in this English speech contest. My special birthday gift for my mother is doing housework. As a family member, it's my duty to share housework. What's more, I want to show my love and care for my parents by doing housework.
Last Saturday was my mother's birthday. To give her a surprise, I decided to do some cleaning. First, I swept the floor and cleaned the tables. Then, I tidied the room and put everything in place. Finally, I cooked a nice meal.
When my mum came home, she was quite surprised. She said it was the best birthday gift she had. How happy I felt! I plan to do more housework in the future.
Thank you for your listening!
解析
【分析】
首先明确题目要求：以李华身份撰写题为“A Special Birthday Gift”的英语演讲稿，主题为“感恩”，特殊生日礼物是家务劳动，需覆盖三个提示：1. 选择做家务的原因；2. 具体做了什么家务；3. 自身感受。写作时要紧扣演讲稿格式，开头结尾已给出，需补充中间内容，使用衔接词使语句连贯，词数控制在80左右，不得透露真实信息。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，点明特殊生日礼物是做家务，说明原因：作为家庭成员分担家务是责任，想通过做家务表达对父母的爱；
2. 具体描述妈妈生日当天做的家务：先扫地擦桌，再整理房间，最后做饭；
3. 描述妈妈的反应（惊喜）和自身感受（开心），最后表达未来会多做家务的想法，使用first、then、finally等衔接词，使内容条理清晰，符合演讲语气。
【答案】
One possible version:
A Special Birthday Gift
Hello, everyone! My name is Li Hua. Today, I'm very glad to have the chance to take part in this English speech contest. My special birthday gift for my mother is doing housework. As a family member, it's my duty to share housework. What's more, I want to show my love and care for my parents by doing housework.
Last Saturday was my mother's birthday. To give her a surprise, I decided to do some cleaning. First, I swept the floor and cleaned the tables. Then, I tidied the room and put everything in place. Finally, I cooked a nice meal.
When my mum came home, she was quite surprised. She said it was the best birthday gift she had. How happy I felt! I plan to do more housework in the future.
Thank you for your listening!
【知识点】
英语应用文写作（演讲稿）、英语写作衔接技巧
【点评】
范文紧扣题目要求，全面覆盖所有提示要点，结构清晰，使用恰当的衔接词使上下文连贯，符合演讲稿的语气，情感真挚，是一篇符合要求的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先明确题目要求：以李华身份撰写题为“A Special Birthday Gift”的英语演讲稿，主题为“感恩”，特殊生日礼物是家务劳动，需覆盖三个提示：1. 选择做家务的原因；2. 具体做了什么家务；3. 自身感受。写作时要紧扣演讲稿格式，开头结尾已给出，需补充中间内容，使用衔接词使语句连贯，词数控制在80左右，不得透露真实信息。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，点明特殊生日礼物是做家务，说明原因：作为家庭成员分担家务是责任，想通过做家务表达对父母的爱；
2. 具体描述妈妈生日当天做的家务：先扫地擦桌，再整理房间，最后做饭；
3. 描述妈妈的反应（惊喜）和自身感受（开心），最后表达未来会多做家务的想法，使用first、then、finally等衔接词，使内容条理清晰，符合演讲语气。
【答案】
One possible version:
A Special Birthday Gift
Hello, everyone! My name is Li Hua. Today, I'm very glad to have the chance to take part in this English speech contest. My special birthday gift for my mother is doing housework. As a family member, it's my duty to share housework. What's more, I want to show my love and care for my parents by doing housework.
Last Saturday was my mother's birthday. To give her a surprise, I decided to do some cleaning. First, I swept the floor and cleaned the tables. Then, I tidied the room and put everything in place. Finally, I cooked a nice meal.
When my mum came home, she was quite surprised. She said it was the best birthday gift she had. How happy I felt! I plan to do more housework in the future.
Thank you for your listening!
【知识点】
英语应用文写作（演讲稿）、英语写作衔接技巧
【点评】
范文紧扣题目要求，全面覆盖所有提示要点，结构清晰，使用恰当的衔接词使上下文连贯，符合演讲稿的语气，情感真挚，是一篇符合要求的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
