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八、书面表达(20 分)
假如你是阳光中学的李华，来自英国的交换生 Jim 即将来你校交流。近期，他给你写了一封电子邮件，询问你校兴趣小组的相关事宜，请你根据下面的邮件内容，给 Jim 回一封邮件。
视频学重难
注意:1. 内容须涵盖所有要点，可适当发挥;2. 词数 90 左右(已给出的邮件开头和结尾不计入总词数)。
Dear Jim,
I am so glad to hear that you are coming to our school.
Looking forward to your arrival!
Yours,
Li Hua
假如你是阳光中学的李华，来自英国的交换生 Jim 即将来你校交流。近期，他给你写了一封电子邮件，询问你校兴趣小组的相关事宜，请你根据下面的邮件内容，给 Jim 回一封邮件。
视频学重难
注意:1. 内容须涵盖所有要点，可适当发挥;2. 词数 90 左右(已给出的邮件开头和结尾不计入总词数)。
Dear Jim,
I am so glad to hear that you are coming to our school.
I think you can join the Cooking Club. I like it best because it's interesting and useful. You will learn a lot of helpful cooking skills there. The teachers will teach you how to make a traditional Chinese dish every week. After that, you can try to cook it by yourself. If you have problems, you can ask the teachers for help at any time. You and your club members can share the dishes you make with each other after you finish them. What's more, you can practise your Chinese when talking with the teachers and the members. I hope you will have a wonderful time here.
Looking forward to your arrival!
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
八、
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇应用文,为电子邮件。②时态:以一般现在时为主。③提示:写作要点已给出,注意不要遗漏要点,适当增加细节,使表述的内容完整。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明自己的建议及原因;第二步,表达对于对方到来的期待。
[词句积累]
①ask sb for help 向某人求助 ②at any time 在任何时候
③look forward to 期待
④I think you can join the Cooking Club.(宾语从句省略了that)
⑤I like it best because it's interesting and useful.(because引导原因状语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Jim,
I am so glad to hear that you are coming to our school. I think you can join the Cooking Club. I like it best because it's interesting and useful. You will learn a lot of helpful cooking skills there. The teachers will teach you how to make a traditional Chinese dish every week. After that, you can try to cook it by yourself. If you have problems, you can ask the teachers for help at any time. You and your club members can share the dishes you make with each other after you finish them. What's more, you can practise your Chinese when talking with the teachers and the members. I hope you will have a wonderful time here.
Looking forward to your arrival!
Yours,
Li Hua
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇应用文,为电子邮件。②时态:以一般现在时为主。③提示:写作要点已给出,注意不要遗漏要点,适当增加细节,使表述的内容完整。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明自己的建议及原因;第二步,表达对于对方到来的期待。
[词句积累]
①ask sb for help 向某人求助 ②at any time 在任何时候
③look forward to 期待
④I think you can join the Cooking Club.(宾语从句省略了that)
⑤I like it best because it's interesting and useful.(because引导原因状语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Jim,
I am so glad to hear that you are coming to our school. I think you can join the Cooking Club. I like it best because it's interesting and useful. You will learn a lot of helpful cooking skills there. The teachers will teach you how to make a traditional Chinese dish every week. After that, you can try to cook it by yourself. If you have problems, you can ask the teachers for help at any time. You and your club members can share the dishes you make with each other after you finish them. What's more, you can practise your Chinese when talking with the teachers and the members. I hope you will have a wonderful time here.
Looking forward to your arrival!
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先明确核心写作任务：你作为李华需要回复交换生Jim的咨询邮件，必须完成两个硬性要求：一是向Jim推荐一个我校的合适俱乐部，二是说明你喜爱这个俱乐部的原因。首先可以选择容易展开描述的俱乐部，比如烹饪俱乐部，既贴合国内校园特色，也有充足的内容可以补充。接下来梳理行文逻辑：首先开门见山给出推荐的俱乐部名称，之后逐条说明俱乐部的优势，既可以解释你喜欢它的原因，也能让Jim感受到俱乐部的吸引力，最后补充对他来校体验的美好祝愿，全程使用友好的邮件语气，控制词数在90左右，不遗漏要点即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：体裁为应用文电子邮件，主体时态为一般现在时，人称为第一、第二人称，核心必须覆盖两个要点：①向Jim推荐一个具体的学校俱乐部；②说明你喜爱该俱乐部的原因。
2. 行文搭建：承接题干给出的开头内容，直接点明推荐的俱乐部，之后补充细节说明推荐理由：俱乐部每周会教授一道中国传统菜，学员可以动手实操，遇到问题随时向老师求助，完成菜品后可以和成员互相分享，同时交流过程中还能练习中文，内容逻辑通顺，最后补充美好祝愿衔接题干给出的结尾即可。
3. 润色调整：适当运用原因状语从句、条件状语从句丰富句式，控制总词数符合要求。
【答案】
Dear Jim,
I am so glad to hear that you are coming to our school. I think you can join the Cooking Club. I like it best because it's interesting and useful. You will learn a lot of helpful cooking skills there. The teachers will teach you how to make a traditional Chinese dish every week. After that, you can try to cook it by yourself. If you have problems, you can ask the teachers for help at any time. You and your club members can share the dishes you make with each other after you finish them. What's more, you can practise your Chinese when talking with the teachers and the members. I hope you will have a wonderful time here.
Looking forward to your arrival!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，原因状语从句，常用固定搭配
【点评】
本题是初中阶段非常典型的提纲类应用文写作题，要求清晰明确，考生首先要注意不能遗漏两个核心写作要点，写作时可以适当补充贴合场景的细节让内容更生动自然，灵活运用积累的复合句句型，能够有效提升作文的得分档次。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道题首先明确核心写作任务：你作为李华需要回复交换生Jim的咨询邮件，必须完成两个硬性要求：一是向Jim推荐一个我校的合适俱乐部，二是说明你喜爱这个俱乐部的原因。首先可以选择容易展开描述的俱乐部，比如烹饪俱乐部，既贴合国内校园特色，也有充足的内容可以补充。接下来梳理行文逻辑：首先开门见山给出推荐的俱乐部名称，之后逐条说明俱乐部的优势，既可以解释你喜欢它的原因，也能让Jim感受到俱乐部的吸引力，最后补充对他来校体验的美好祝愿，全程使用友好的邮件语气，控制词数在90左右，不遗漏要点即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：体裁为应用文电子邮件，主体时态为一般现在时，人称为第一、第二人称，核心必须覆盖两个要点：①向Jim推荐一个具体的学校俱乐部；②说明你喜爱该俱乐部的原因。
2. 行文搭建：承接题干给出的开头内容，直接点明推荐的俱乐部，之后补充细节说明推荐理由：俱乐部每周会教授一道中国传统菜，学员可以动手实操，遇到问题随时向老师求助，完成菜品后可以和成员互相分享，同时交流过程中还能练习中文，内容逻辑通顺，最后补充美好祝愿衔接题干给出的结尾即可。
3. 润色调整：适当运用原因状语从句、条件状语从句丰富句式，控制总词数符合要求。
【答案】
Dear Jim,
I am so glad to hear that you are coming to our school. I think you can join the Cooking Club. I like it best because it's interesting and useful. You will learn a lot of helpful cooking skills there. The teachers will teach you how to make a traditional Chinese dish every week. After that, you can try to cook it by yourself. If you have problems, you can ask the teachers for help at any time. You and your club members can share the dishes you make with each other after you finish them. What's more, you can practise your Chinese when talking with the teachers and the members. I hope you will have a wonderful time here.
Looking forward to your arrival!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，原因状语从句，常用固定搭配
【点评】
本题是初中阶段非常典型的提纲类应用文写作题，要求清晰明确，考生首先要注意不能遗漏两个核心写作要点，写作时可以适当补充贴合场景的细节让内容更生动自然，灵活运用积累的复合句句型，能够有效提升作文的得分档次。
【难度系数】
0.7
