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四、书面表达
桂林山水甲天下。假如你是迈克，请你用英语写一篇短文，给你英国的同学介绍你们一家人正在进行的桂林之行。
注意事项：
1. 短文须包括所给内容要点，要求语句通顺、意思连贯；
2. 词数不少于90，短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数。
East or west, Guilin landscape is the best.
桂林山水甲天下。假如你是迈克，请你用英语写一篇短文，给你英国的同学介绍你们一家人正在进行的桂林之行。
注意事项：
1. 短文须包括所给内容要点，要求语句通顺、意思连贯；
2. 词数不少于90，短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数。
East or west, Guilin landscape is the best.
答案
One possible version:
East or west, Guilin landscape is the best. Guilin is one of the most beautiful cities in our country. My parents and I came here by plane three days ago. We have visited many places of interest. We are all surprised at the different beautiful landscapes here. We went hiking, took a lot of fantastic photos, took a boat trip along the Lijiang River, and ate a lot of delicious food. We felt a little tired, but we are having a wonderful time here.
I will never forget it. I want to show these nice photos to my classmates when I go back.
(90 words)
East or west, Guilin landscape is the best. Guilin is one of the most beautiful cities in our country. My parents and I came here by plane three days ago. We have visited many places of interest. We are all surprised at the different beautiful landscapes here. We went hiking, took a lot of fantastic photos, took a boat trip along the Lijiang River, and ate a lot of delicious food. We felt a little tired, but we are having a wonderful time here.
I will never forget it. I want to show these nice photos to my classmates when I go back.
(90 words)
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先明确核心要求：身份是迈克，要给英国同学介绍全家正在进行的桂林之旅，开头已经给出，词数不少于90，要求语句通顺连贯。接下来梳理写作思路：首先承接给定的开头，先简单介绍桂林的地位属性，交代清楚全家来桂林的出行时间、交通方式作为背景；接着具体描述这几天已经完成的游玩活动，比如游览景点、徒步、乘船游漓江、拍照片、品尝当地美食，让内容充实；最后表达当下的游玩感受，补充返程后要和同学分享照片的收尾内容，逻辑顺理成章。同时要注意区分时态：介绍桂林客观特点用一般现在时，描述过去几天已经完成的游玩动作用一般过去时，描述当下正在享受旅程的状态用现在进行时，避免时态错误。
【解析】
1. 审题确认要素：人称使用第一人称，主题为正在进行的家庭桂林旅行，时态混合一般现在时、一般过去时、现在进行时，总词数需满足不少于90的要求。
2. 搭建行文逻辑框架：
① 开篇承接给定句，补充介绍桂林是国内最美城市之一，交代三天前和父母乘飞机抵达桂林的出行背景；
② 中间部分具体介绍游玩经历：说明已经游览了多处名胜，被当地各异的美景震撼，依次列举徒步、拍大量美照、乘船游漓江、品尝美食的游玩细节，内容饱满；
③ 结尾部分表达虽然略感疲惫但旅途非常愉快，说明返程后会把照片分享给同学，自然收尾。
3. 调整语句衔接，保证表达地道无语法错误，核对总词数符合要求。
【答案】
East or west, Guilin landscape is the best. Guilin is one of the most beautiful cities in our country. My parents and I came here by plane three days ago. We have visited many places of interest. We are all surprised at the different beautiful landscapes here. We went hiking, took a lot of fantastic photos, took a boat trip along the Lijiang River, and ate a lot of delicious food. We felt a little tired, but we are having a wonderful time here.
I will never forget it. I want to show these nice photos to my classmates when I go back.
【知识点】
现在进行时应用、英语记叙文写作、旅行话题表达
【点评】
本篇参考范文完全符合题目所有要求，要点覆盖全面，时态切换准确自然，行文从出行背景到游玩经历再到个人感受层层递进，语句通顺地道，词数达标，是非常规范的旅行介绍类短文范例。学生写同类主题作文时可以参考“出行背景-游玩细节-感受展望”的结构，很容易搭建出逻辑清晰的合格作文。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先明确核心要求：身份是迈克，要给英国同学介绍全家正在进行的桂林之旅，开头已经给出，词数不少于90，要求语句通顺连贯。接下来梳理写作思路：首先承接给定的开头，先简单介绍桂林的地位属性，交代清楚全家来桂林的出行时间、交通方式作为背景；接着具体描述这几天已经完成的游玩活动，比如游览景点、徒步、乘船游漓江、拍照片、品尝当地美食，让内容充实；最后表达当下的游玩感受，补充返程后要和同学分享照片的收尾内容，逻辑顺理成章。同时要注意区分时态：介绍桂林客观特点用一般现在时，描述过去几天已经完成的游玩动作用一般过去时，描述当下正在享受旅程的状态用现在进行时，避免时态错误。
【解析】
1. 审题确认要素：人称使用第一人称，主题为正在进行的家庭桂林旅行，时态混合一般现在时、一般过去时、现在进行时，总词数需满足不少于90的要求。
2. 搭建行文逻辑框架：
① 开篇承接给定句，补充介绍桂林是国内最美城市之一，交代三天前和父母乘飞机抵达桂林的出行背景；
② 中间部分具体介绍游玩经历：说明已经游览了多处名胜，被当地各异的美景震撼，依次列举徒步、拍大量美照、乘船游漓江、品尝美食的游玩细节，内容饱满；
③ 结尾部分表达虽然略感疲惫但旅途非常愉快，说明返程后会把照片分享给同学，自然收尾。
3. 调整语句衔接，保证表达地道无语法错误，核对总词数符合要求。
【答案】
East or west, Guilin landscape is the best. Guilin is one of the most beautiful cities in our country. My parents and I came here by plane three days ago. We have visited many places of interest. We are all surprised at the different beautiful landscapes here. We went hiking, took a lot of fantastic photos, took a boat trip along the Lijiang River, and ate a lot of delicious food. We felt a little tired, but we are having a wonderful time here.
I will never forget it. I want to show these nice photos to my classmates when I go back.
【知识点】
现在进行时应用、英语记叙文写作、旅行话题表达
【点评】
本篇参考范文完全符合题目所有要求，要点覆盖全面，时态切换准确自然，行文从出行背景到游玩经历再到个人感受层层递进，语句通顺地道，词数达标，是非常规范的旅行介绍类短文范例。学生写同类主题作文时可以参考“出行背景-游玩细节-感受展望”的结构，很容易搭建出逻辑清晰的合格作文。
【难度系数】
0.7
