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Ⅲ. 书面表达
随着"双减"政策的推进,初中生的课余时间变得更充裕了。为了引导学生更好地利用课余时间,培养兴趣爱好,学校英语社团发起"My Free-time Activities"主题征文活动,请根据以下要求完成短文:
写作要点:1. When do you have free time?
2. What do you often do in your free time? (Give 2—3 examples)
3. Do you think it's important to do free-time activities? Why?
要求:1. 短文应包括所有写作要点,可适当发挥;
2. 词数:80—100。
【思路点拨】
【词句积累】
1. 引入话题
• As a junior high school student, I've got more free time in recent years.
作为一名初中生,近几年来我的课余时间越来越多了。
• My free time mainly falls on weekends and evenings.
我的空闲时间主要在周末和晚上。
2. 具体介绍课余活动和收获
• I like doing sports such as playing basketball, which keeps me physically fit.
我喜欢运动,比如打篮球,这项运动能让我保持身体健康。
• Another is traveling with my family. It enables me to experience different cultures.
另一项(活动)是和家人一起旅行。这能让我体验各地不同的文化风情。
3. 总结升华
• Free-time activities not only help me stay away from screen time but also let me develop hobbies and relax.
课余活动不仅能帮我减少屏幕使用的时间,还能让我培养兴趣爱好、放松身心。
• A colourful free time makes my school life more balanced and enjoyable.
丰富多彩的课余生活让我的校园时光变得更加平衡、更有乐趣。
【自我创作】
My Free-time Activities
随着"双减"政策的推进,初中生的课余时间变得更充裕了。为了引导学生更好地利用课余时间,培养兴趣爱好,学校英语社团发起"My Free-time Activities"主题征文活动,请根据以下要求完成短文:
写作要点:1. When do you have free time?
2. What do you often do in your free time? (Give 2—3 examples)
3. Do you think it's important to do free-time activities? Why?
要求:1. 短文应包括所有写作要点,可适当发挥;
2. 词数:80—100。
【思路点拨】
【词句积累】
1. 引入话题
• As a junior high school student, I've got more free time in recent years.
作为一名初中生,近几年来我的课余时间越来越多了。
• My free time mainly falls on weekends and evenings.
我的空闲时间主要在周末和晚上。
2. 具体介绍课余活动和收获
• I like doing sports such as playing basketball, which keeps me physically fit.
我喜欢运动,比如打篮球,这项运动能让我保持身体健康。
• Another is traveling with my family. It enables me to experience different cultures.
另一项(活动)是和家人一起旅行。这能让我体验各地不同的文化风情。
3. 总结升华
• Free-time activities not only help me stay away from screen time but also let me develop hobbies and relax.
课余活动不仅能帮我减少屏幕使用的时间,还能让我培养兴趣爱好、放松身心。
• A colourful free time makes my school life more balanced and enjoyable.
丰富多彩的课余生活让我的校园时光变得更加平衡、更有乐趣。
【自我创作】
My Free-time Activities
答案
Ⅲ.One possible version:
My Free-time Activities
As a junior high school student, I've got more free time in recent years.
My free time mainly falls on weekends and evenings.
During my free time, I have several regular activities. One of them is doing
sports such as playing basketball, which keeps me physically fit. Another is
traveling with my family. It enables me to experience different cultures.
Besides, I often grow small plants on the balcony—watching them grow
makes me feel connected to nature.
I definitely think free-time activities matter a lot. They not only help me
stay away from screen time but also let me develop hobbies and relax. A
colourful free time makes my school life more balanced and enjoyable.
My Free-time Activities
As a junior high school student, I've got more free time in recent years.
My free time mainly falls on weekends and evenings.
During my free time, I have several regular activities. One of them is doing
sports such as playing basketball, which keeps me physically fit. Another is
traveling with my family. It enables me to experience different cultures.
Besides, I often grow small plants on the balcony—watching them grow
makes me feel connected to nature.
I definitely think free-time activities matter a lot. They not only help me
stay away from screen time but also let me develop hobbies and relax. A
colourful free time makes my school life more balanced and enjoyable.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要明确核心要求：主题为My Free-time Activities，必须覆盖题干给出的三个指定写作要点，词数控制在80-100词。接下来可以借助给出的思维导图搭建清晰的写作框架：第一步先写开篇总起段，点明自己作为初中生课余时间变充裕，同时交代空闲时间的具体时段，直接回答第一个问题"When do you have free time?"；第二步写主体段，列举2-3项不同类型的课余活动，适当补充小细节让内容更生动，回答第二个问题"What do you often do in your free time?"；第三步写结尾段，明确表达对课余活动重要性的看法，从放松身心、培养爱好等角度说明原因，回答第三个问题"Do you think it's important to do free-time activities? Why?"。最后用衔接词串联内容，检查语法错误、调整词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 开篇引入：使用题干提供的参考句式点明身份，说明当下课余时间更充裕，同时交代空闲时间主要分布在周末和晚间，完成第一个写作要点的输出。
2. 主体展开：依次介绍3项不同类型的课余活动，分别是打篮球这类运动、和家人旅行、在阳台种植小植物，简单补充每项活动对应的体验，内容充实不重复，完成第二个写作要点的输出。
3. 结尾升华：明确表态课余活动十分重要，用not only...but also...的并列结构说明活动的多重好处，最后收尾点明多彩课余生活让校园生活更平衡有趣，完成第三个写作要点的输出。
4. 整体通读调整，保证语句衔接自然，无语法错误，词数符合题目要求。
【答案】
My Free-time Activities
As a junior high school student, I've got more free time in recent years.
My free time mainly falls on weekends and evenings.
During my free time, I have several regular activities. One of them is doing sports such as playing basketball, which keeps me physically fit. Another is traveling with my family. It enables me to experience different cultures. Besides, I often grow small plants on the balcony—watching them grow makes me feel connected to nature.
I definitely think free-time activities matter a lot. They not only help me stay away from screen time but also let me develop hobbies and relax. A colourful free time makes my school life more balanced and enjoyable.
【知识点】
1. 初中英语写作
2. 要点式作文构思
3. 并列复合句运用
【点评】
本文完全覆盖了题干要求的全部三个写作要点，结构清晰遵循总-分-总的逻辑，开篇直接点明空闲时段，中间列举了三类不同的课余活动，细节丰富有生活气息，结尾从多个维度阐述了课余活动的价值，用到了定语从句、not only...but also...等加分句式，表达地道流畅，词数符合题目要求，是一篇符合初中英语写作评分标准的优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要明确核心要求：主题为My Free-time Activities，必须覆盖题干给出的三个指定写作要点，词数控制在80-100词。接下来可以借助给出的思维导图搭建清晰的写作框架：第一步先写开篇总起段，点明自己作为初中生课余时间变充裕，同时交代空闲时间的具体时段，直接回答第一个问题"When do you have free time?"；第二步写主体段，列举2-3项不同类型的课余活动，适当补充小细节让内容更生动，回答第二个问题"What do you often do in your free time?"；第三步写结尾段，明确表达对课余活动重要性的看法，从放松身心、培养爱好等角度说明原因，回答第三个问题"Do you think it's important to do free-time activities? Why?"。最后用衔接词串联内容，检查语法错误、调整词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 开篇引入：使用题干提供的参考句式点明身份，说明当下课余时间更充裕，同时交代空闲时间主要分布在周末和晚间，完成第一个写作要点的输出。
2. 主体展开：依次介绍3项不同类型的课余活动，分别是打篮球这类运动、和家人旅行、在阳台种植小植物，简单补充每项活动对应的体验，内容充实不重复，完成第二个写作要点的输出。
3. 结尾升华：明确表态课余活动十分重要，用not only...but also...的并列结构说明活动的多重好处，最后收尾点明多彩课余生活让校园生活更平衡有趣，完成第三个写作要点的输出。
4. 整体通读调整，保证语句衔接自然，无语法错误，词数符合题目要求。
【答案】
My Free-time Activities
As a junior high school student, I've got more free time in recent years.
My free time mainly falls on weekends and evenings.
During my free time, I have several regular activities. One of them is doing sports such as playing basketball, which keeps me physically fit. Another is traveling with my family. It enables me to experience different cultures. Besides, I often grow small plants on the balcony—watching them grow makes me feel connected to nature.
I definitely think free-time activities matter a lot. They not only help me stay away from screen time but also let me develop hobbies and relax. A colourful free time makes my school life more balanced and enjoyable.
【知识点】
1. 初中英语写作
2. 要点式作文构思
3. 并列复合句运用
【点评】
本文完全覆盖了题干要求的全部三个写作要点，结构清晰遵循总-分-总的逻辑，开篇直接点明空闲时段，中间列举了三类不同的课余活动，细节丰富有生活气息，结尾从多个维度阐述了课余活动的价值，用到了定语从句、not only...but also...等加分句式，表达地道流畅，词数符合题目要求，是一篇符合初中英语写作评分标准的优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
