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（2025·江苏宿迁经济技术开发区第一实验学校调研）动物是人类的朋友。学校英语俱乐部将组织题为“My favourite animal”的征文比赛。请根据表格提示，写一篇短文参赛。
【要求】1. 词数 80 左右.
2. 要点齐全，不要逐字翻译，可适当增加细节使文章连贯、通顺.
My favourite animal
【要求】1. 词数 80 左右.
2. 要点齐全，不要逐字翻译，可适当增加细节使文章连贯、通顺.
My favourite animal
答案
One possible version:
My favourite animal
I have a lovely dog, and it's my favourite animal. It's black and brown and its legs are very short. I call it Leo. It's two years old.
It likes chicken and beef very much. It likes playing with me. We go to the park every evening. When I am lying on the grass, it will sit near me. It can help me do many things and make me smile. It can accompany me when my parents are not at home. All my friends love my dog very much! What a lovely dog!
I love my dog and it loves me too!
My favourite animal
I have a lovely dog, and it's my favourite animal. It's black and brown and its legs are very short. I call it Leo. It's two years old.
It likes chicken and beef very much. It likes playing with me. We go to the park every evening. When I am lying on the grass, it will sit near me. It can help me do many things and make me smile. It can accompany me when my parents are not at home. All my friends love my dog very much! What a lovely dog!
I love my dog and it loves me too!
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先可以选定自己熟悉、相关表达难度低的动物，比如常见的宠物小狗，避免选冷门动物出现词汇卡壳的问题。接下来按照表格给出的四个维度梳理写作内容：1. 开篇直接点明最喜欢的动物是什么，还可以给它起名字、补充小细节让内容更生动；2. 外貌部分紧扣提示要求，写出它的颜色、外形的标志性特征；3. 生活习性部分覆盖饮食偏好、活动时间、性格特点这些提示要点，不用生硬直译提示句，用自然的语句串联；4. 喜欢的原因至少写两点，贴合日常相处的真实场景，最后收尾呼应主题，整体控制词数在80左右，保证要点齐全、语句通顺即可。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：直接说明自己最喜欢的动物是自家养的小狗，给它取名Leo，补充它的年龄，快速引入主题，避免内容冗余。
2. 外貌描写：对应题干要求，写出小狗是黑棕相间的毛色，腿很短，清晰交代外形特征，符合外貌部分的写作要求。
3. 生活习性介绍：依次写出它爱吃鸡肉和牛肉，喜欢傍晚和我去公园玩耍，性格温顺安静，覆盖饮食、活动时间、是否吵闹所有提示的习性要点。
4. 阐述喜爱原因：第一点是它总能逗我开心，第二点是父母不在家的时候它可以陪伴我，满足至少两点原因的要求，最后收尾点明人和小狗双向的喜爱，逻辑连贯自然。
【答案】
One possible version:
My favourite animal
I have a lovely dog, and it's my favourite animal. It's black and brown and its legs are very short. I call it Leo. It's two years old.
It likes chicken and beef very much. It likes playing with me. We go to the park every evening. When I am lying on the grass, it will sit near me. It can help me do many things and make me smile. It can accompany me when my parents are not at home. All my friends love my dog very much! What a lovely dog!
I love my dog and it loves me too!
【知识点】
动物话题写作
记叙文写作
要点整合表达
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干给出的所有写作要点，没有生硬逐字翻译提示内容，加入了给宠物起名、傍晚逛公园的生活化细节，让文章充满真情实感，语句流畅自然，词数符合要求，非常适合作为该类话题的入门写作参考，也给学生示范了如何把零散的提示信息串联成完整通顺的短文。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题，首先可以选定自己熟悉、相关表达难度低的动物，比如常见的宠物小狗，避免选冷门动物出现词汇卡壳的问题。接下来按照表格给出的四个维度梳理写作内容：1. 开篇直接点明最喜欢的动物是什么，还可以给它起名字、补充小细节让内容更生动；2. 外貌部分紧扣提示要求，写出它的颜色、外形的标志性特征；3. 生活习性部分覆盖饮食偏好、活动时间、性格特点这些提示要点，不用生硬直译提示句，用自然的语句串联；4. 喜欢的原因至少写两点，贴合日常相处的真实场景，最后收尾呼应主题，整体控制词数在80左右，保证要点齐全、语句通顺即可。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：直接说明自己最喜欢的动物是自家养的小狗，给它取名Leo，补充它的年龄，快速引入主题，避免内容冗余。
2. 外貌描写：对应题干要求，写出小狗是黑棕相间的毛色，腿很短，清晰交代外形特征，符合外貌部分的写作要求。
3. 生活习性介绍：依次写出它爱吃鸡肉和牛肉，喜欢傍晚和我去公园玩耍，性格温顺安静，覆盖饮食、活动时间、是否吵闹所有提示的习性要点。
4. 阐述喜爱原因：第一点是它总能逗我开心，第二点是父母不在家的时候它可以陪伴我，满足至少两点原因的要求，最后收尾点明人和小狗双向的喜爱，逻辑连贯自然。
【答案】
One possible version:
My favourite animal
I have a lovely dog, and it's my favourite animal. It's black and brown and its legs are very short. I call it Leo. It's two years old.
It likes chicken and beef very much. It likes playing with me. We go to the park every evening. When I am lying on the grass, it will sit near me. It can help me do many things and make me smile. It can accompany me when my parents are not at home. All my friends love my dog very much! What a lovely dog!
I love my dog and it loves me too!
【知识点】
动物话题写作
记叙文写作
要点整合表达
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干给出的所有写作要点，没有生硬逐字翻译提示内容，加入了给宠物起名、傍晚逛公园的生活化细节，让文章充满真情实感，语句流畅自然，词数符合要求，非常适合作为该类话题的入门写作参考，也给学生示范了如何把零散的提示信息串联成完整通顺的短文。
【难度系数】
0.7
