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六、书面表达。(2025·江苏无锡一模)
华夏大地，人杰地灵；中华文明，源远流长。假如你是李华，你国外的朋友 Andy 想了解中国，请根据下图提示，选择或自拟至少两个要点进行介绍。
【注意】1. 短文须包括所有内容要点，要求语句通顺，意思连贯、符合题意。
2. 词数 100 左右，短文开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
3. 短文不得出现真实的个人及学校信息。
Learning that you are interested in China, I feel honoured to introduce my country to you.
华夏大地，人杰地灵；中华文明，源远流长。假如你是李华，你国外的朋友 Andy 想了解中国，请根据下图提示，选择或自拟至少两个要点进行介绍。
【注意】1. 短文须包括所有内容要点，要求语句通顺，意思连贯、符合题意。
2. 词数 100 左右，短文开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
3. 短文不得出现真实的个人及学校信息。
Learning that you are interested in China, I feel honoured to introduce my country to you.
答案
One possible version
Learning that you are interested in China, I feel honoured to introduce my country to you.
First, there are many great men in our country, like Qian Xuesen. Qian Xuesen is regarded as the pioneer of China's space technology programme. He made a great contribution to the country.
Second, there are many famous places of interest in China, like the Great Wall. It runs for more than 6,000 kilometres across northern China and it is known as one of the seven wonders of the world.
Third, China also has many traditional festivals, such as the Spring Festival, the Dragon Boat Festival and the Mid-Autumn Festival.
I'm looking forward to seeing you in China.
Learning that you are interested in China, I feel honoured to introduce my country to you.
First, there are many great men in our country, like Qian Xuesen. Qian Xuesen is regarded as the pioneer of China's space technology programme. He made a great contribution to the country.
Second, there are many famous places of interest in China, like the Great Wall. It runs for more than 6,000 kilometres across northern China and it is known as one of the seven wonders of the world.
Third, China also has many traditional festivals, such as the Spring Festival, the Dragon Boat Festival and the Mid-Autumn Festival.
I'm looking forward to seeing you in China.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先明确写作任务：你作为李华，要给外国朋友Andy介绍中国，要求至少选择思维导图里的2个要点展开，词数100左右，开头已经给出。接下来梳理写作思路：第一步先确定要选取的介绍维度，从伟大人物、著名景点、传统节日里选2-3个，避免内容过于单薄；第二步用清晰的逻辑连接词比如First、Second把不同要点区分开，每个要点先点明类别，再举对应例子补充1-2句简单的相关介绍，尽量用熟悉的短语表达，避免复杂长句出错；最后补充收尾句，表达欢迎对方来中国游玩的期待，让文章结构完整，同时注意规避真实个人、学校信息，控制总词数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 确定文体与时态：本文是介绍类说明文，整体以一般现在时为主，介绍人物相关事迹也可搭配对应的过去相关表述，符合介绍客观事实的语境。
2. 选取并展开要点：满足题目“至少两个要点”的要求，选取三个提示维度让内容更充实：
① 伟大人物维度：以钱学森为例，点明他是中国航天技术项目的先驱，为国家做出了巨大贡献；
② 著名景点维度：以长城为例，介绍它绵延六千多公里，是世界七大奇迹之一的特点；
③ 传统节日维度：列举春节、端午节、中秋节等典型中国传统节日，体现中国节日文化的丰富性。
3. 补充收尾：最后添加期待对方来中国的表达，让文章逻辑闭环，整体词数控制在要求范围内，语句连贯没有语法错误。
【答案】
One possible version
Learning that you are interested in China, I feel honoured to introduce my country to you.
First, there are many great men in our country, like Qian Xuesen. Qian Xuesen is regarded as the pioneer of China's space technology programme. He made a great contribution to the country.
Second, there are many famous places of interest in China, like the Great Wall. It runs for more than 6,000 kilometres across northern China and it is known as one of the seven wonders of the world.
Third, China also has many traditional festivals, such as the Spring Festival, the Dragon Boat Festival and the Mid-Autumn Festival.
I'm looking forward to seeing you in China.
【知识点】
介绍类书面表达，中国文化常识，语篇逻辑衔接
【点评】
本篇范文完全贴合所有题目要求，覆盖了思维导图给出的三个提示维度，内容充实不冗余，逻辑连接词使用清晰明了，介绍的相关文化内容准确符合常识，语言表达地道流畅，难度贴合初中学生的写作水平，友好的收尾也符合给朋友介绍国家的轻松语境，很适合作为参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先明确写作任务：你作为李华，要给外国朋友Andy介绍中国，要求至少选择思维导图里的2个要点展开，词数100左右，开头已经给出。接下来梳理写作思路：第一步先确定要选取的介绍维度，从伟大人物、著名景点、传统节日里选2-3个，避免内容过于单薄；第二步用清晰的逻辑连接词比如First、Second把不同要点区分开，每个要点先点明类别，再举对应例子补充1-2句简单的相关介绍，尽量用熟悉的短语表达，避免复杂长句出错；最后补充收尾句，表达欢迎对方来中国游玩的期待，让文章结构完整，同时注意规避真实个人、学校信息，控制总词数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 确定文体与时态：本文是介绍类说明文，整体以一般现在时为主，介绍人物相关事迹也可搭配对应的过去相关表述，符合介绍客观事实的语境。
2. 选取并展开要点：满足题目“至少两个要点”的要求，选取三个提示维度让内容更充实：
① 伟大人物维度：以钱学森为例，点明他是中国航天技术项目的先驱，为国家做出了巨大贡献；
② 著名景点维度：以长城为例，介绍它绵延六千多公里，是世界七大奇迹之一的特点；
③ 传统节日维度：列举春节、端午节、中秋节等典型中国传统节日，体现中国节日文化的丰富性。
3. 补充收尾：最后添加期待对方来中国的表达，让文章逻辑闭环，整体词数控制在要求范围内，语句连贯没有语法错误。
【答案】
One possible version
Learning that you are interested in China, I feel honoured to introduce my country to you.
First, there are many great men in our country, like Qian Xuesen. Qian Xuesen is regarded as the pioneer of China's space technology programme. He made a great contribution to the country.
Second, there are many famous places of interest in China, like the Great Wall. It runs for more than 6,000 kilometres across northern China and it is known as one of the seven wonders of the world.
Third, China also has many traditional festivals, such as the Spring Festival, the Dragon Boat Festival and the Mid-Autumn Festival.
I'm looking forward to seeing you in China.
【知识点】
介绍类书面表达，中国文化常识，语篇逻辑衔接
【点评】
本篇范文完全贴合所有题目要求，覆盖了思维导图给出的三个提示维度，内容充实不冗余，逻辑连接词使用清晰明了，介绍的相关文化内容准确符合常识，语言表达地道流畅，难度贴合初中学生的写作水平，友好的收尾也符合给朋友介绍国家的轻松语境，很适合作为参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
