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本周是学校的“爱护野生动物周”。请你根据表格中的提示，以“Wolves are in danger”为题，用英语写一篇短文。
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要求:1. 短文包括表格中的信息，省略号部分须补充完整。2. 词数80左右。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体:说明文。2. 时态:一般现在时。3. 人称:以第三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
Wolves are in danger
实战练笔，夯实写作功底
本周是学校的“爱护野生动物周”。请你根据表格中的提示，以“Wolves are in danger”为题，用英语写一篇短文。
|
要求:1. 短文包括表格中的信息，省略号部分须补充完整。2. 词数80左右。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体:说明文。2. 时态:一般现在时。3. 人称:以第三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
Wolves are in danger
Wolves are not very big. They have thick fur. They can see, hear and smell things far away. They can run for hours without stopping.
Wolves often work as a team. They never kill for fun. Wolves live mainly on animals, but sometimes they also eat insects.
Sadly, wolves are now in danger. They have fewer and fewer living areas and people kill them because they think wolves are dangerous to humans.
So we had better take action to protect wolves right now. We should build more wolf reserves and make laws to protect them.
Animals are our friends. To protect animals is to protect ourselves.
答案
One possible version:
Wolves are in danger
Wolves are not very big. They have thick fur. They can see, hear and smell things far away. They can run for hours without stopping. Wolves often work as a team. They never kill for fun. Wolves live mainly on animals, but sometimes they also eat insects.
Sadly, wolves are now in danger. They have fewer and fewer living areas and people kill them because they think wolves are dangerous to humans.
So we had better take action to protect wolves right now. We should build more wolf reserves and make laws to protect them.
Animals are our friends. To protect animals is to protect ourselves.
Wolves are in danger
Wolves are not very big. They have thick fur. They can see, hear and smell things far away. They can run for hours without stopping. Wolves often work as a team. They never kill for fun. Wolves live mainly on animals, but sometimes they also eat insects.
Sadly, wolves are now in danger. They have fewer and fewer living areas and people kill them because they think wolves are dangerous to humans.
So we had better take action to protect wolves right now. We should build more wolf reserves and make laws to protect them.
Animals are our friends. To protect animals is to protect ourselves.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先明确核心要求：主题为“Wolves are in danger”，是贴合“爱护野生动物周”主题的说明文，时态以一般现在时为主，人称以第三人称为主，词数控制在80左右。我们可以按照三层逻辑搭建内容：第一层先介绍狼的外形、能力、生活习性等基础信息，帮读者建立对狼的正确认知；第二层转折引出狼的濒危现状，说明狼面临生存危机的具体原因；第三层提出对应的保护举措，最后升华主题呼应活动主旨，确保所有提示信息都覆盖，补充内容贴合主题，语句通顺无语法错误即可。
【解析】
1. 开篇部分：先介绍狼的基础特征，依次描述外形特点、感官与运动能力、群居习性、食性，纠正大众对狼的片面误解，内容自然流畅。
2. 主体转折部分：用sadly做过渡，点明狼现在处于危险中，清晰说明两个核心濒危原因：生存区域不断缩减，人类因误解狼会威胁人类而猎杀它们，紧扣标题的“in danger”核心。
3. 收尾部分：呼吁立刻采取行动保护狼，给出建立狼类保护区、出台保护法律的具体可行措施，最后点明动物是人类的朋友，保护动物就是保护人类自己，升华主题，契合“爱护野生动物周”的活动背景。
【答案】
One possible version:
Wolves are in danger
Wolves are not very big. They have thick fur. They can see, hear and smell things far away. They can run for hours without stopping. Wolves often work as a team. They never kill for fun. Wolves live mainly on animals, but sometimes they also eat insects.
Sadly, wolves are now in danger. They have fewer and fewer living areas and people kill them because they think wolves are dangerous to humans.
So we had better take action to protect wolves right now. We should build more wolf reserves and make laws to protect them.
Animals are our friends. To protect animals is to protect ourselves.
【知识点】
英语说明文写作，一般现在时运用，野生动物主题表达
【点评】
本篇短文逻辑层次清晰，从介绍狼的基础常识，到点明濒危现状、分析濒危原因，再到提出具体保护措施最后升华主旨，完全符合题目所有要求，覆盖了全部提示信息，补充的内容贴合活动主题，语句通顺语法准确，行文流畅自然，既完成了写作任务也起到了宣传保护野生动物的正向引导作用。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题，首先明确核心要求：主题为“Wolves are in danger”，是贴合“爱护野生动物周”主题的说明文，时态以一般现在时为主，人称以第三人称为主，词数控制在80左右。我们可以按照三层逻辑搭建内容：第一层先介绍狼的外形、能力、生活习性等基础信息，帮读者建立对狼的正确认知；第二层转折引出狼的濒危现状，说明狼面临生存危机的具体原因；第三层提出对应的保护举措，最后升华主题呼应活动主旨，确保所有提示信息都覆盖，补充内容贴合主题，语句通顺无语法错误即可。
【解析】
1. 开篇部分：先介绍狼的基础特征，依次描述外形特点、感官与运动能力、群居习性、食性，纠正大众对狼的片面误解，内容自然流畅。
2. 主体转折部分：用sadly做过渡，点明狼现在处于危险中，清晰说明两个核心濒危原因：生存区域不断缩减，人类因误解狼会威胁人类而猎杀它们，紧扣标题的“in danger”核心。
3. 收尾部分：呼吁立刻采取行动保护狼，给出建立狼类保护区、出台保护法律的具体可行措施，最后点明动物是人类的朋友，保护动物就是保护人类自己，升华主题，契合“爱护野生动物周”的活动背景。
【答案】
One possible version:
Wolves are in danger
Wolves are not very big. They have thick fur. They can see, hear and smell things far away. They can run for hours without stopping. Wolves often work as a team. They never kill for fun. Wolves live mainly on animals, but sometimes they also eat insects.
Sadly, wolves are now in danger. They have fewer and fewer living areas and people kill them because they think wolves are dangerous to humans.
So we had better take action to protect wolves right now. We should build more wolf reserves and make laws to protect them.
Animals are our friends. To protect animals is to protect ourselves.
【知识点】
英语说明文写作，一般现在时运用，野生动物主题表达
【点评】
本篇短文逻辑层次清晰，从介绍狼的基础常识，到点明濒危现状、分析濒危原因，再到提出具体保护措施最后升华主旨，完全符合题目所有要求，覆盖了全部提示信息，补充的内容贴合活动主题，语句通顺语法准确，行文流畅自然，既完成了写作任务也起到了宣传保护野生动物的正向引导作用。
【难度系数】
0.6
