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第5课时 主题写作专项 练写作 答案D12
主题词网
优选词汇
家庭成员
· grandparent · grandfather · grandmother · parent · father
· mother · aunt · uncle · sister · brother
· son · daughter · wife · husband · cousin
职业
· job · teacher · doctor · nurse · policeman
· manager · worker · driver · manager · actor
外貌
· handsome · beautiful · tall · short · thin
性格
· funny · kind · clever · friendly · helpful
写作实例
→审时态：一般现在时 →审主题 →审人称：以第一、三人称为主
今天班里组织了一项“我爱我家”的活动，该活动要求每名学生介绍自己的家人。请你根据自己的全家福，向全班同学介绍你的家人。
提示内容：1.介绍你的家庭成员，包括年龄和职业等；
2.表达你对家人的爱。
写作要求：1.文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和学校名称；
2.词数70左右。
写作支架
开头 开篇点题
中间 详细介绍家人
结尾 表达对家人的爱
教材原文
P33 This is my family photo.
P31 I have a brother and a sister.
P32 I love my big family.
P33 We love and help each other.
优秀范文
Hello, everyone. Today I’d like to introduce my family to you all.①
This is my family photo. You can see five people in the photo. This man is my father. He is 40 years old. He is a doctor and he works for a big hospital.② This woman is my mother. She is 38. She is an English teacher. She likes reading books. I have a brother and a sister. My brother is Li Di and he is 8 years old. My sister’s name is Li Ya. She is 6 years old. I like her because she looks very cute.③ They are both students.
I love my big family. We love and help each other.
亮点评析
①以I’d like to...句式点明主题。
②以并列句的结构介绍“我”爸爸的职业和工作地点。
③该句中的原因状语从句解释了“我”喜欢妹妹的原因。
主题词网
优选词汇
家庭成员
· grandparent · grandfather · grandmother · parent · father
· mother · aunt · uncle · sister · brother
· son · daughter · wife · husband · cousin
职业
· job · teacher · doctor · nurse · policeman
· manager · worker · driver · manager · actor
外貌
· handsome · beautiful · tall · short · thin
性格
· funny · kind · clever · friendly · helpful
写作实例
→审时态：一般现在时 →审主题 →审人称：以第一、三人称为主
今天班里组织了一项“我爱我家”的活动，该活动要求每名学生介绍自己的家人。请你根据自己的全家福，向全班同学介绍你的家人。
提示内容：1.介绍你的家庭成员，包括年龄和职业等；
2.表达你对家人的爱。
写作要求：1.文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和学校名称；
2.词数70左右。
写作支架
开头 开篇点题
中间 详细介绍家人
结尾 表达对家人的爱
教材原文
P33 This is my family photo.
P31 I have a brother and a sister.
P32 I love my big family.
P33 We love and help each other.
优秀范文
Hello, everyone. Today I’d like to introduce my family to you all.①
This is my family photo. You can see five people in the photo. This man is my father. He is 40 years old. He is a doctor and he works for a big hospital.② This woman is my mother. She is 38. She is an English teacher. She likes reading books. I have a brother and a sister. My brother is Li Di and he is 8 years old. My sister’s name is Li Ya. She is 6 years old. I like her because she looks very cute.③ They are both students.
I love my big family. We love and help each other.
亮点评析
①以I’d like to...句式点明主题。
②以并列句的结构介绍“我”爸爸的职业和工作地点。
③该句中的原因状语从句解释了“我”喜欢妹妹的原因。
答案
Hello, everyone. Today I’d like to introduce my family to you all.
This is my family photo. You can see five people in the photo. This man is my father. He is 40 years old. He is a doctor and he works for a big hospital. This woman is my mother. She is 38. She is an English teacher. She likes reading books. I have a brother and a sister. My brother is Li Di and he is 8 years old. My sister’s name is Li Ya. She is 6 years old. I like her because she looks very cute. They are both students.
I love my big family. We love and help each other.
This is my family photo. You can see five people in the photo. This man is my father. He is 40 years old. He is a doctor and he works for a big hospital. This woman is my mother. She is 38. She is an English teacher. She likes reading books. I have a brother and a sister. My brother is Li Di and he is 8 years old. My sister’s name is Li Ya. She is 6 years old. I like her because she looks very cute. They are both students.
I love my big family. We love and help each other.
解析
本次写作要求使用一般现在时，以第一、三人称为主体，结合全家福介绍自己的家庭成员，需涵盖家人的年龄、职业相关信息，最后表达对家人的爱意，词数控制在70左右，不得出现真实姓名和校名。写作可按照三步完成：1. 开篇用高分句式直接点明要向大家介绍自己的家庭，点出全家福的内容；2. 中间部分依次介绍父亲、母亲、兄弟姐妹的年龄、职业、爱好等信息，合理使用并列句、原因状语从句丰富表达；3. 结尾抒发对家庭的热爱，呼应主题。
