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王兵想给他的网友 Peter 写一封电子邮件,介绍这些年他和他的父母、祖父母发生的变化。请参考王兵绘制的思维导图,选择几个方面介绍一下他和家人过去和现在的变化。(15 分)
要求:1. 书写规范、美观;2. 语言连贯,条理清晰;3. 除所给内容外,不少于 50 词。
To: Peter
Subject: Changes in my family
Dear Peter,
How are you? There are many changes in our lives.
In the past,
Love,
Wang Bing
王兵想给他的网友 Peter 写一封电子邮件,介绍这些年他和他的父母、祖父母发生的变化。请参考王兵绘制的思维导图,选择几个方面介绍一下他和家人过去和现在的变化。(15 分)
要求:1. 书写规范、美观;2. 语言连贯,条理清晰;3. 除所给内容外,不少于 50 词。
To: Peter
Subject: Changes in my family
Dear Peter,
How are you? There are many changes in our lives.
In the past,
my parents worked in the office and had meetings there. But now they can work from home. They use laptops(笔记本电脑), iPads and smartphones for online meetings.
As for chores, my grandparents used a mop to clean the floor and washed the dishes by hand. But now we have a robot helper and a dishwasher. They save a lot of time.
We also travel differently. In the past, my grandparents took me to school on their bikes, and my parents went to work by car. Today, we have an e-bike and an e-car. My grandparents can ride the e-bike to go around our neighbourhood easily, and the e-car is clean and environmentally friendly(环保的). Besides, taking an old train took a long time, but now we can take the high-speed train and get to another city very fast.
How about changes in your family? Please write to me.
Love,
Wang Bing
答案
To: Peter
Subject: Changes in my family
Dear Peter,
How are you? There are many changes in our lives. In the past, my parents worked in the office and had meetings there. But now they can work from home. They use laptops(笔记本电脑), iPads and smartphones for online meetings.
As for chores, my grandparents used a mop to clean the floor and washed the dishes by hand. But now we have a robot helper and a dishwasher. They save a lot of time.
We also travel differently. In the past, my grandparents took me to school on their bikes, and my parents went to work by car. Today, we have an e-bike and an e-car. My grandparents can ride the e-bike to go around our neighbourhood easily, and the e-car is clean and environmentally friendly(环保的). Besides, taking an old train took a long time, but now we can take the high-speed train and get to another city very fast.
How about changes in your family? Please write to me.
Love,
Wang Bing
Subject: Changes in my family
Dear Peter,
How are you? There are many changes in our lives. In the past, my parents worked in the office and had meetings there. But now they can work from home. They use laptops(笔记本电脑), iPads and smartphones for online meetings.
As for chores, my grandparents used a mop to clean the floor and washed the dishes by hand. But now we have a robot helper and a dishwasher. They save a lot of time.
We also travel differently. In the past, my grandparents took me to school on their bikes, and my parents went to work by car. Today, we have an e-bike and an e-car. My grandparents can ride the e-bike to go around our neighbourhood easily, and the e-car is clean and environmentally friendly(环保的). Besides, taking an old train took a long time, but now we can take the high-speed train and get to another city very fast.
How about changes in your family? Please write to me.
Love,
Wang Bing
解析
【分析】
首先明确写作主题是介绍家庭变化，需结合思维导图的三个核心方面（工作、家务、交通），采用“过去（一般过去时）与现在（一般现在时）对比”的结构，遵循邮件格式，语言连贯，内容贴合思维导图给出的细节，满足字数要求。
【解析】
1. 遵循邮件格式，开头标注收件人、主题；
2. 分三个核心模块对比变化：
工作：过去父母在办公室开会，现在用电子设备线上办公；
家务：过去用拖把、手洗碗，现在有机器人和洗碗机；
交通：过去是自行车、普通汽车、旧火车，现在是电动车、电动汽车、高铁；
3. 结尾询问对方家庭变化，邀请回信，符合邮件交际逻辑，时态运用准确，语言连贯。
【答案】
To: Peter
Subject: Changes in my family
Dear Peter,
How are you? There are many changes in our lives. In the past, my parents worked in the office and had meetings there. But now they can work from home. They use laptops, iPads and smartphones for online meetings.
As for chores, my grandparents used a mop to clean the floor and washed the dishes by hand. But now we have a robot helper and a dishwasher. They save a lot of time.
We also travel differently. In the past, my grandparents took me to school on their bikes, and my parents went to work by car. Today, we have an e-bike and an e-car. My grandparents can ride the e-bike to go around our neighbourhood easily, and the e-car is clean and environmentally friendly. Besides, taking an old train took a long time, but now we can take the high-speed train and get to another city very fast.
How about changes in your family? Please write to me.
Love,
Wang Bing
【知识点】
英语邮件写作；时态对比运用；话题类作文
【点评】
作文紧扣思维导图内容，从工作、家务、交通三个维度清晰对比家庭变化，时态（一般过去时/一般现在时）运用准确，语言连贯流畅，符合邮件格式要求，内容充实，满足题目各项要求。
【难度系数】
0.3
首先明确写作主题是介绍家庭变化，需结合思维导图的三个核心方面（工作、家务、交通），采用“过去（一般过去时）与现在（一般现在时）对比”的结构，遵循邮件格式，语言连贯，内容贴合思维导图给出的细节，满足字数要求。
【解析】
1. 遵循邮件格式，开头标注收件人、主题；
2. 分三个核心模块对比变化：
工作：过去父母在办公室开会，现在用电子设备线上办公；
家务：过去用拖把、手洗碗，现在有机器人和洗碗机；
交通：过去是自行车、普通汽车、旧火车，现在是电动车、电动汽车、高铁；
3. 结尾询问对方家庭变化，邀请回信，符合邮件交际逻辑，时态运用准确，语言连贯。
【答案】
To: Peter
Subject: Changes in my family
Dear Peter,
How are you? There are many changes in our lives. In the past, my parents worked in the office and had meetings there. But now they can work from home. They use laptops, iPads and smartphones for online meetings.
As for chores, my grandparents used a mop to clean the floor and washed the dishes by hand. But now we have a robot helper and a dishwasher. They save a lot of time.
We also travel differently. In the past, my grandparents took me to school on their bikes, and my parents went to work by car. Today, we have an e-bike and an e-car. My grandparents can ride the e-bike to go around our neighbourhood easily, and the e-car is clean and environmentally friendly. Besides, taking an old train took a long time, but now we can take the high-speed train and get to another city very fast.
How about changes in your family? Please write to me.
Love,
Wang Bing
【知识点】
英语邮件写作；时态对比运用；话题类作文
【点评】
作文紧扣思维导图内容，从工作、家务、交通三个维度清晰对比家庭变化，时态（一般过去时/一般现在时）运用准确，语言连贯流畅，符合邮件格式要求，内容充实，满足题目各项要求。
【难度系数】
0.3
