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G(2025·江苏盐城东台第一教育联盟调研)
在人生的旅程中，亲人、朋友、老师、书籍等陪伴我们同行，助力我们成长。学校英语俱乐部正组织题为“Being with you”的征文比赛，请根据提示，写一篇短文参赛.
1. Who/What do you always like being with?
2. Why do you like being with him/her/it?
(Give two or three reasons)
...
【注意事项】1. 文中不能出现真实姓名、校名等信息.
2. 词数 100 左右（文章开头已给出，不计入总词数）.
3. 文章必须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺.
Being with you
You’ve always been my sunshine. I like being with you,
在人生的旅程中，亲人、朋友、老师、书籍等陪伴我们同行，助力我们成长。学校英语俱乐部正组织题为“Being with you”的征文比赛，请根据提示，写一篇短文参赛.
1. Who/What do you always like being with?
2. Why do you like being with him/her/it?
(Give two or three reasons)
...
【注意事项】1. 文中不能出现真实姓名、校名等信息.
2. 词数 100 左右（文章开头已给出，不计入总词数）.
3. 文章必须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺.
Being with you
You’ve always been my sunshine. I like being with you,
答案
One possible version
Being with you
You've always been my sunshine. I like being with you, my English teacher, Miss Li. You are very kind and hard-working. You are so helpful that you are ready to help almost every student in our class.
Two years ago, I was afraid to speak English and was poor at English. But you tried your best to help me solve my problem. Thanks to your help, I made great progress in my English study. Now I can speak English in public and don't feel nervous any more.
You teach me not only to learn but also to be a kind and warm-hearted person. I hope I'll be with you forever.
Being with you
You've always been my sunshine. I like being with you, my English teacher, Miss Li. You are very kind and hard-working. You are so helpful that you are ready to help almost every student in our class.
Two years ago, I was afraid to speak English and was poor at English. But you tried your best to help me solve my problem. Thanks to your help, I made great progress in my English study. Now I can speak English in public and don't feel nervous any more.
You teach me not only to learn but also to be a kind and warm-hearted person. I hope I'll be with you forever.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，我们可以按三步思考：第一步先确定写作对象，题干提示可以选亲人、朋友、老师、书籍等，选自己熟悉的人物比如英语老师，很容易写出真情实感，也不会跑题；第二步对应题干的两个核心要点，首先直接点明你喜欢陪伴的对象是谁，接下来准备2-3个合理的理由：可以先写对方的性格特质，再搭配一个自己亲身经历的具体事例，最后升华到对方对自己精神层面的影响，三个理由层次分明；第三步注意符合写作要求，不出现真实校名姓名，控制词数在100左右，衔接语句让行文通顺自然，注意描述人物日常特质用一般现在时，描述过去发生的帮助事件用一般过去时，保证语法正确。
【解析】
1. 开篇衔接给定开头，直接点明陪伴的对象：my English teacher, Miss Li，紧接着介绍她善良勤勉、乐于助人的基础特质，作为第一个理由。
2. 补充具体过往事例作为第二个理由：讲述两年前自己害怕说英语、英语成绩差，在老师的帮助下取得很大进步，现在可以当众流利说英语，让内容更有说服力。
3. 补充第三个理由，升华主题：点明老师不仅教自己学习知识，还教会自己做善良热心的人，最后表达想要一直和老师相伴的美好愿望，收束全文。
4. 行文使用so...that...、not only...but also等复合句提升表达质量，全程不涉及真实个人信息，词数符合要求，逻辑连贯。
【答案】
One possible version
Being with you
You've always been my sunshine. I like being with you, my English teacher, Miss Li. You are very kind and hard-working. You are so helpful that you are ready to help almost every student in our class.
Two years ago, I was afraid to speak English and was poor at English. But you tried your best to help me solve my problem. Thanks to your help, I made great progress in my English study. Now I can speak English in public and don't feel nervous any more.
You teach me not only to learn but also to be a kind and warm-hearted person. I hope I'll be with you forever.
【知识点】
提纲英语写作，时态正确运用，复合句表达
【点评】
本篇范文选取学生身边熟悉的英语老师作为写作对象，情感真挚自然，完整覆盖题干所有要求的要点，给出的三个理由从人物特质、具体事例到精神引领层层递进，逻辑清晰，用到多个高分句型提升语言质量，词数符合要求，是非常优秀的参赛习作参考，学生也可以结合自身经历选择好友、书籍等不同对象创作，同样能写出优质内容。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题，我们可以按三步思考：第一步先确定写作对象，题干提示可以选亲人、朋友、老师、书籍等，选自己熟悉的人物比如英语老师，很容易写出真情实感，也不会跑题；第二步对应题干的两个核心要点，首先直接点明你喜欢陪伴的对象是谁，接下来准备2-3个合理的理由：可以先写对方的性格特质，再搭配一个自己亲身经历的具体事例，最后升华到对方对自己精神层面的影响，三个理由层次分明；第三步注意符合写作要求，不出现真实校名姓名，控制词数在100左右，衔接语句让行文通顺自然，注意描述人物日常特质用一般现在时，描述过去发生的帮助事件用一般过去时，保证语法正确。
【解析】
1. 开篇衔接给定开头，直接点明陪伴的对象：my English teacher, Miss Li，紧接着介绍她善良勤勉、乐于助人的基础特质，作为第一个理由。
2. 补充具体过往事例作为第二个理由：讲述两年前自己害怕说英语、英语成绩差，在老师的帮助下取得很大进步，现在可以当众流利说英语，让内容更有说服力。
3. 补充第三个理由，升华主题：点明老师不仅教自己学习知识，还教会自己做善良热心的人，最后表达想要一直和老师相伴的美好愿望，收束全文。
4. 行文使用so...that...、not only...but also等复合句提升表达质量，全程不涉及真实个人信息，词数符合要求，逻辑连贯。
【答案】
One possible version
Being with you
You've always been my sunshine. I like being with you, my English teacher, Miss Li. You are very kind and hard-working. You are so helpful that you are ready to help almost every student in our class.
Two years ago, I was afraid to speak English and was poor at English. But you tried your best to help me solve my problem. Thanks to your help, I made great progress in my English study. Now I can speak English in public and don't feel nervous any more.
You teach me not only to learn but also to be a kind and warm-hearted person. I hope I'll be with you forever.
【知识点】
提纲英语写作，时态正确运用，复合句表达
【点评】
本篇范文选取学生身边熟悉的英语老师作为写作对象，情感真挚自然，完整覆盖题干所有要求的要点，给出的三个理由从人物特质、具体事例到精神引领层层递进，逻辑清晰，用到多个高分句型提升语言质量，词数符合要求，是非常优秀的参赛习作参考，学生也可以结合自身经历选择好友、书籍等不同对象创作，同样能写出优质内容。
【难度系数】
0.6
