六、书面表达
假设你是小华,你所在的学校正在举办“自然观察日记”征集活动。请你写一篇观察日记,记录你在自然界中的一段观察经历。
要点:1. 观察的时间、地点和对象;
2. 你观察到了什么;
3. 你的感受或收获。
要求:1. 词数80~100词;
2. 不得出现真实的人名和校名。
假设你是小华,你所在的学校正在举办“自然观察日记”征集活动。请你写一篇观察日记,记录你在自然界中的一段观察经历。
要点:1. 观察的时间、地点和对象;
2. 你观察到了什么;
3. 你的感受或收获。
要求:1. 词数80~100词;
2. 不得出现真实的人名和校名。
答案
October 7th, Sunday
Sunny
Today I spent the whole afternoon observing snails in the small park near my home.
I found snails move very slowly, carrying their soft bodies and tiny shells. They leave shiny silver marks on the wall when they crawl. Once a snail slipped down a little, but it didn't give up and kept moving up step by step.
I felt really moved. Even tiny lives have strong will. We should learn to be patient and never give up easily when we meet difficulties.
Sunny
Today I spent the whole afternoon observing snails in the small park near my home.
I found snails move very slowly, carrying their soft bodies and tiny shells. They leave shiny silver marks on the wall when they crawl. Once a snail slipped down a little, but it didn't give up and kept moving up step by step.
I felt really moved. Even tiny lives have strong will. We should learn to be patient and never give up easily when we meet difficulties.
解析
本题要求写一篇自然观察主题的日记,属于应用文写作,写作时注意:
1. 格式符合日记规范,开篇标注日期天气,时态以一般过去时为主;
2. 完整覆盖所有要点:首先交代清楚观察的时间、地点和观察对象,接着详细描述观察到的具体细节,最后写出自己的感悟收获;
3. 选用八年级已学的基础词汇和句式,控制词数在80-100之间,不出现真实人名校名即可。
1. 格式符合日记规范,开篇标注日期天气,时态以一般过去时为主;
2. 完整覆盖所有要点:首先交代清楚观察的时间、地点和观察对象,接着详细描述观察到的具体细节,最后写出自己的感悟收获;
3. 选用八年级已学的基础词汇和句式,控制词数在80-100之间,不出现真实人名校名即可。
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