主题写作专项 练写作 答案D8 拍照批改
主题词网
优选词汇
身份
• scientist • historian • researcher • chemist • physicist • biologist
• inventor • thinker • pioneer • hero • role model
成就
• invent • discover • explore • do research in • create • succeed in
• invention • develop • exploration 图1 • achievement • make important discoveries
特质
• wise • brave • clever • creative • be full of courage
• wisdom • great • talented • hard-working • be interested in
看法
• admire • admirable • encourage • inspiring • inspiration • brilliant
• play a big part in • look up to
写作实例
请根据以下提示内容,用英文写一篇短文,介绍著名科学家屠呦呦,并谈谈你对她的看法。
审主题
审人称①:第三人称;审时态①:以一般过去时为主
审要点
(1)屠呦呦1930年出生在宁波,她因发现青蒿素而闻名;
(2)历经190次失败后,她在中草药中发现了能对抗疟疾的青蒿素,这种药已拯救了数百万人的生命;
(3)2015年获得诺贝尔生理学或医学奖;
(4)你认为…… 审人称②:第一、三人称;审时态②:一般现在时
参考词汇:草药 herb 青蒿素 qinghaosu 疟疾 malaria 有效地 effectively 对抗 fight
诺贝尔生理学或医学奖 Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine
要求:(1)词数:80—100; 审词数
(2)要点齐全,行文连贯,可适当发挥。
写作支架
开头 开篇点题：Tu Youyou is a from China, and a lot of people admire her for .
中间 详细介绍屠呦呦：
Born in , she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which .（高分句式1）
After 190 failures, she final图3 . The medicine .
In 2015, she became the first woman .（高分句式2）
结尾 表达对屠呦呦的看法：
In my opinion, Tu Youyou is .
I deeply admire her and .
优秀范文
Tu Youyou is a well-known woman scientist from China, and a lot of people admire her for her great discovery.①
Born in Ningbo in 1930②, she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which can effectively fight against malaria③, a very serious disease. Her research journey was full of hardship④. After 190 failures, she finally succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs. The medicine has saved millions of lives. In 2015, she became the first woman to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine.
In my opinion, Tu Youyou is an inspiring④ role model. Her perseverance④ in the face of failures teaches us that success comes from hard work③. I deeply admire her and dream of being a scientist like her.
亮点评析
①首句直接点明屠呦呦的身份和被人敬佩的原因,开门见山。
②运用过去分词短语作状语,既合并了两个信息,又让句子开头更简洁新颖,避免了简单句的堆砌。
③使用定语从句和宾语从句,让句子逻辑更严谨。
④使用多个高级词汇,提升了表达的深度。

写作支架填空答案
1. well-known woman scientist
2. her great discovery
3. Ningbo in 1930
4. can effectively fight against the serious disease malaria
5. succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs
6. has saved millions of lives
7. to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine
8. an inspiring role model with strong perseverance
9. decide to learn from her and never give up when meeting difficulties
完整参考范文
Tu Youyou is a well-known woman scientist from China, and a lot of people admire her for her great discovery.
Born in Ningbo in 1930, she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which can effectively fight against malaria. After 190 failures, she finally succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs. The medicine has saved millions of lives. In 2015, she became the first woman to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine.
In my opinion, Tu Youyou is an inspiring role model. I deeply admire her and decide to learn from her to keep trying when facing difficulties.

1. 审题梳理：本次写作要求介绍著名科学家屠呦呦并表达个人看法，需覆盖全部4个提示要点，词数控制在80-100；介绍人物生平使用第三人称、以一般过去时为主，表达个人看法使用第一人称、一般现在时。
2. 写作规划：采用清晰的三层结构，开篇直接点明屠呦呦的身份和受人敬佩的原因；中间按时间顺序依次介绍她的出生背景、青蒿素研发经历、获得的奖项，合理使用定语从句、the first to do的高分句式，用上指定参考词汇；结尾结合人物优秀特质表达个人评价与感悟，保证行文连贯流畅。