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假如你是李明,你们班近期在英语课上将开展“我最喜爱的季节”主题分享活动。你准备写一篇短文,向同学们介绍自己最喜爱的季节。请根据提示,完成这篇短文,内容需包含以下要点:
1. 说明你最爱的季节,并描述它的特点(天气、景色等);
2. 分享你在这个季节常做的事情(至少两点);
3. 阐述你喜爱这个季节的原因。
注意:90词左右。
Dear classmates,
I'm Li Ming. Today I'd like to talk about my favorite season with you.
1. 说明你最爱的季节,并描述它的特点(天气、景色等);
2. 分享你在这个季节常做的事情(至少两点);
3. 阐述你喜爱这个季节的原因。
注意:90词左右。
Dear classmates,
I'm Li Ming. Today I'd like to talk about my favorite season with you.
答案
My favourite season is spring. The weather becomes warm and gentle, and green leaves come out on trees, all kinds of flowers blossom around us. The world looks full of life.
I often go on a picnic with my friends in the nearby park on bright spring days. I also love to fly kites with my family in the square when the wind is soft.
I love spring most because it means a new start for everything, and it always brings me hope and makes me feel relaxed.
I often go on a picnic with my friends in the nearby park on bright spring days. I also love to fly kites with my family in the square when the wind is soft.
I love spring most because it means a new start for everything, and it always brings me hope and makes me feel relaxed.
解析
本题为主题分享类写作题，要求以第一人称完成介绍自己最喜爱季节的短文，时态以一般现在时为主，需完整覆盖题干给出的3个写作要点，字数控制在90词左右，选用八年级已学的词汇和语法表达，保证语句通顺、逻辑连贯。写作时先点明最喜爱的季节，描述对应的天气、景色特点，再介绍两项该季节常进行的活动，最后说明喜爱这个季节的原因即可。
审题谋篇
“热爱与敬畏自然，与自然和谐共生”属于义务教育课程标准中的“人与自然”范畴，主要包括自然生态、环境保护、灾害防范和宇宙探索。该话题主要是谈论如何与自然友好相处、如何保护环境、如何预防自然灾害等。这是各地中考英语真题中最常考的话题作文之一。
体裁 | 应用文
时态 | 一般现在时
人称 | 第一人称和第三人称
要点
1. 首先点出自己
最喜欢的季节。
2. 其次，描述这个季节最显著的特点。
3. 描述在这个季节所做的活动。
4. 最后总结喜欢这个季节的理由。
写作提纲
My favorite season
开头:点明主题 → My favorite season is winter.
正文:描述冬天的风景和冬天里的活动 → It’s cold ... The whole world ... Trees and houses ... The streets look like ... Sometimes, if it is ... In winter, I often ... I also love ... They look funny.
总结:升华主题 → I love winter because it brings ...
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[习作初稿]
Dear classmates，
I’m Li Ming. Today I’d like to talk about my favorite season with you.
My favorite season is winter. It’s cold and often snow here.¹ The whole world become white and quiet.² Trees and houses are beautiful.³ They are covered with snow.⁴ The streets look like a beautiful white picture.⁵ Sometimes, we can see ice flowers on the windows in the morning.⁶
In winter, I often have snowball fights with my friends. I also love making snowmen with my family. We use buttons for the snowmen’s eyes and carrots for their noses. They look funny.
I love winter.⁷ It brings me much joy and happy memories!⁸
[名师点评]本文结构清晰、层次分明，涵盖了所有提示要点，并适当发挥。首先点出自己最喜欢的季节。其次，描述了这个季节的最显著的特点以及在这个季节所做的活动。最后总结了喜欢这个季节的理由。整体看还是不错的。
但是短文在细节和句式方面还存在一些错误，①②句存在语法错误，需要改正。另外，该作文在语法、句式、用词方面还有一定的提升空间，其中③④两个简单句可以整合为一个复合句；⑤句可以用状语从句进行拓展；⑥句可以用条件状语从句拓展为一个复合句；⑦⑧句可以用because合并成一个复合句，提升语言魅力。
[升格专练]
A. 单句改错:请找出并改正下列句子中唯一的一处错误。
1. It’s cold and often snow here.
2. The whole world become white and quiet.
B. 句式升级:请根据要求完成下列句子。
1. Trees and houses are beautiful. They are covered with snow. (用 when 改写句子)
2. The streets look like a beautiful white picture. (用 after it snows 改写句子)
3. Sometimes, we can see ice flowers on the windows in the morning. (用 if it is cold enough outside 改为含有条件状语从句的复合句)
4. I love winter. It brings me much joy and happy memories! (用 because 合并成复合句)
“热爱与敬畏自然，与自然和谐共生”属于义务教育课程标准中的“人与自然”范畴，主要包括自然生态、环境保护、灾害防范和宇宙探索。该话题主要是谈论如何与自然友好相处、如何保护环境、如何预防自然灾害等。这是各地中考英语真题中最常考的话题作文之一。
体裁 | 应用文
时态 | 一般现在时
人称 | 第一人称和第三人称
要点
1. 首先点出自己
最喜欢的季节。2. 其次，描述这个季节最显著的特点。
3. 描述在这个季节所做的活动。
4. 最后总结喜欢这个季节的理由。
写作提纲
My favorite season
开头:点明主题 → My favorite season is winter.
正文:描述冬天的风景和冬天里的活动 → It’s cold ... The whole world ... Trees and houses ... The streets look like ... Sometimes, if it is ... In winter, I often ... I also love ... They look funny.
总结:升华主题 → I love winter because it brings ...
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[习作初稿]
Dear classmates，
I’m Li Ming. Today I’d like to talk about my favorite season with you.
My favorite season is winter. It’s cold and often snow here.¹ The whole world become white and quiet.² Trees and houses are beautiful.³ They are covered with snow.⁴ The streets look like a beautiful white picture.⁵ Sometimes, we can see ice flowers on the windows in the morning.⁶
In winter, I often have snowball fights with my friends. I also love making snowmen with my family. We use buttons for the snowmen’s eyes and carrots for their noses. They look funny.
I love winter.⁷ It brings me much joy and happy memories!⁸
[名师点评]本文结构清晰、层次分明，涵盖了所有提示要点，并适当发挥。首先点出自己最喜欢的季节。其次，描述了这个季节的最显著的特点以及在这个季节所做的活动。最后总结了喜欢这个季节的理由。整体看还是不错的。
但是短文在细节和句式方面还存在一些错误，①②句存在语法错误，需要改正。另外，该作文在语法、句式、用词方面还有一定的提升空间，其中③④两个简单句可以整合为一个复合句；⑤句可以用状语从句进行拓展；⑥句可以用条件状语从句拓展为一个复合句；⑦⑧句可以用because合并成一个复合句，提升语言魅力。
[升格专练]
A. 单句改错:请找出并改正下列句子中唯一的一处错误。
1. It’s cold and often snow here.
It's cold and often snowy here.
2. The whole world become white and quiet.
The whole world becomes white and quiet.
B. 句式升级:请根据要求完成下列句子。
1. Trees and houses are beautiful. They are covered with snow. (用 when 改写句子)
Trees and houses are beautiful when they are covered with snow.
2. The streets look like a beautiful white picture. (用 after it snows 改写句子)
The streets look like a beautiful white picture after it snows.
3. Sometimes, we can see ice flowers on the windows in the morning. (用 if it is cold enough outside 改为含有条件状语从句的复合句)
Sometimes, if it is cold enough outside, we can see ice flowers on the windows in the morning.
4. I love winter. It brings me much joy and happy memories! (用 because 合并成复合句)
I love winter because it brings me much joy and happy memories!
答案
A. 1. It's cold and often snowy here.
2. The whole world becomes white and quiet.
B. 1. Trees and houses are beautiful when they are covered with snow.
2. The streets look like a beautiful white picture after it snows.
3. Sometimes, if it is cold enough outside, we can see ice flowers on the windows in the morning.
4. I love winter because it brings me much joy and happy memories!
2. The whole world becomes white and quiet.
B. 1. Trees and houses are beautiful when they are covered with snow.
2. The streets look like a beautiful white picture after it snows.
3. Sometimes, if it is cold enough outside, we can see ice flowers on the windows in the morning.
4. I love winter because it brings me much joy and happy memories!
