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主题写作专项 练写作 答案D28
主题词网
课外活动
活动内容
活动评价
个人感受
优选词汇
join a club be a member of compete in races take part in a charity sale
go on a day trip/a long hike/an outing go to the Clubs Fair design and build rockets
exciting amazing fantastic colourful meaningful
popular be helpful for a good way to make friends make a difference
have fun/enjoy oneself feel excited about feel relaxed cannot wait for
become confident develop new skills learn a lot from feel proud
写作实例
审时态: 以一般过去时为主
审主题
上周五放学后,你和你的同学们一起去了农场,请你用英语描述一下你们在农场的情况。要点如下:
(1)天气情况;(2)你们做了什么活动;
(3)你和你的同学们的感受。
审要点
审人称: 第一、三人称
注意:(1)词数80左右;(2)可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;(3)文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。
审词数
写作支架
开头
去农场的时间及当日的天气情况
Last Friday after school, my classmates and I .
The weather was . The air was and the scenery was .
中间
具体描述在农场进行的活动
My best friend Lucy helped with . (高分句式1)
Tom picked
, and I .
We all enjoyed .
结尾
谈论自己的感受
It was a wonderful day! I was quite happy that , and it was .
表达自己的期待
I can’t wait for . (高分句式2)
Every after-school activity is like a small rocket engine—on its own it may seem small, but together they give us the power to fly higher, dream bigger, and reach places we never thought possible.
智慧背囊 79
佳作剖析
教材原文
P108 I am quite happy that everyone at our school came together, and it made a difference.
P108 I can’t wait for the next charity sale.
优秀范文
Last Friday after school, my classmates and I went to the farm. The weather was sunny and warm. The air was fresh and① the scenery was beautiful.
My best friend Lucy helped the farmers with their work. Tom picked fresh vegetables, and I fed the animals. We all enjoyed the activities very much.
It was a wonderful day!② I was quite happy that everyone in our class came together②, and it was very interesting.
I can’t wait for② the next farm experience.
亮点评析
①并列连词and的使用使文章衔接更流畅。
②亮点词汇came together、can’t wait for及感叹句的使用为文章增色不少。
主题词网
课外活动
活动内容
活动评价
个人感受
优选词汇
join a club be a member of compete in races take part in a charity sale
go on a day trip/a long hike/an outing go to the Clubs Fair design and build rockets
exciting amazing fantastic colourful meaningful
popular be helpful for a good way to make friends make a difference
have fun/enjoy oneself feel excited about feel relaxed cannot wait for
become confident develop new skills learn a lot from feel proud
写作实例
审时态: 以一般过去时为主
审主题
上周五放学后,你和你的同学们一起去了农场,请你用英语描述一下你们在农场的情况。要点如下:
(1)天气情况;(2)你们做了什么活动;
(3)你和你的同学们的感受。
审要点
审人称: 第一、三人称
注意:(1)词数80左右;(2)可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;(3)文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。
审词数
写作支架
开头
去农场的时间及当日的天气情况
Last Friday after school, my classmates and I .
The weather was . The air was and the scenery was .
中间
具体描述在农场进行的活动
My best friend Lucy helped with . (高分句式1)
Tom picked
, and I .We all enjoyed .
结尾
谈论自己的感受
It was a wonderful day! I was quite happy that , and it was .
表达自己的期待
I can’t wait for . (高分句式2)
Every after-school activity is like a small rocket engine—on its own it may seem small, but together they give us the power to fly higher, dream bigger, and reach places we never thought possible.
智慧背囊 79
佳作剖析
教材原文
P108 I am quite happy that everyone at our school came together, and it made a difference.
P108 I can’t wait for the next charity sale.
优秀范文
Last Friday after school, my classmates and I went to the farm. The weather was sunny and warm. The air was fresh and① the scenery was beautiful.
My best friend Lucy helped the farmers with their work. Tom picked fresh vegetables, and I fed the animals. We all enjoyed the activities very much.
It was a wonderful day!② I was quite happy that everyone in our class came together②, and it was very interesting.
I can’t wait for② the next farm experience.
亮点评析
①并列连词and的使用使文章衔接更流畅。
②亮点词汇came together、can’t wait for及感叹句的使用为文章增色不少。
答案
【解析】：本题为沪教版七年级上册课外活动主题的记叙文写作，写作要求如下：1. 审题：时态以一般过去时为主，人称使用第一、三人称，需完整覆盖天气情况、农场参与的活动、自己和同学的感受三个核心要点，词数控制在80左右，文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。2. 谋篇布局：开头交代出行事件，介绍当日天气与农场的环境氛围；中间具体描写不同同伴和自己在农场参与的各类活动，使用并列连词and衔接内容，让行文更流畅；结尾抒发集体出行的愉悦感受，使用单元所学亮点词汇和指定高分句式，表达对后续同类户外活动的期待，提升作文质量。
【答案】：
写作支架填空答案：
1. went to the farm
2. sunny and warm
3. fresh
4. beautiful
5. the farmers
6. their work
7. fresh vegetables
8. fed the animals
9. the activities very much
10. everyone in our class came together
11. very interesting
12. the next farm experience
完整参考范文：
Last Friday after school, my classmates and I went to the farm. The weather was sunny and warm. The air was fresh and the scenery was beautiful.
My best friend Lucy helped the farmers with their work. Tom picked fresh vegetables, and I fed the animals. We all enjoyed the activities very much.
It was a wonderful day! I was quite happy that everyone in our class came together, and it was very interesting.
I can't wait for the next farm experience.
【答案】：
写作支架填空答案：
1. went to the farm
2. sunny and warm
3. fresh
4. beautiful
5. the farmers
6. their work
7. fresh vegetables
8. fed the animals
9. the activities very much
10. everyone in our class came together
11. very interesting
12. the next farm experience
完整参考范文：
Last Friday after school, my classmates and I went to the farm. The weather was sunny and warm. The air was fresh and the scenery was beautiful.
My best friend Lucy helped the farmers with their work. Tom picked fresh vegetables, and I fed the animals. We all enjoyed the activities very much.
It was a wonderful day! I was quite happy that everyone in our class came together, and it was very interesting.
I can't wait for the next farm experience.
解析
【分析】
首先审题确定：时态为一般过去时，人称用第一、三人称，需覆盖天气情况、农场活动、个人与同学感受三个核心要点，词数控制在80左右，不得出现真实信息。接着按写作支架结构填空：开头填出行事件与环境描述，中间填具体活动并运用高分句式，结尾填感受与期待并使用亮点词汇，确保行文连贯。
【解析】
1. 开头部分：根据时间状语“Last Friday after school”，用一般过去时填“went to the farm”；天气填“sunny and warm”，空气填“fresh”，风景填“beautiful”，符合环境氛围描述。
2. 中间部分：运用高分句式“help sb with sth”，填“the farmers”和“their work”；Tom的活动填“fresh vegetables”，“我”的活动填“fed the animals”；“enjoyed the activities very much”表达集体活动的愉悦。
3. 结尾部分：用亮点词汇“came together”填“everyone in our class came together”，评价填“very interesting”；用“can’t wait for”填“the next farm experience”表达对后续活动的期待，符合要求。
【答案】
写作支架填空答案：
1. went to the farm
2. sunny and warm
3. fresh
4. beautiful
5. the farmers
6. their work
7. fresh vegetables
8. fed the animals
9. the activities very much
10. everyone in our class came together
11. very interesting
12. the next farm experience
完整参考范文：
Last Friday after school, my classmates and I went to the farm. The weather was sunny and warm. The air was fresh and the scenery was beautiful.
My best friend Lucy helped the farmers with their work. Tom picked fresh vegetables, and I fed the animals. We all enjoyed the activities very much.
It was a wonderful day! I was quite happy that everyone in our class came together, and it was very interesting.
I can't wait for the next farm experience.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；一般过去时运用；主题词汇运用
【点评】
本文结构清晰，符合写作支架要求，时态正确，用并列连词and衔接内容，运用亮点词汇提升表达，覆盖所有写作要点，行文流畅自然。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先审题确定：时态为一般过去时，人称用第一、三人称，需覆盖天气情况、农场活动、个人与同学感受三个核心要点，词数控制在80左右，不得出现真实信息。接着按写作支架结构填空：开头填出行事件与环境描述，中间填具体活动并运用高分句式，结尾填感受与期待并使用亮点词汇，确保行文连贯。
【解析】
1. 开头部分：根据时间状语“Last Friday after school”，用一般过去时填“went to the farm”；天气填“sunny and warm”，空气填“fresh”，风景填“beautiful”，符合环境氛围描述。
2. 中间部分：运用高分句式“help sb with sth”，填“the farmers”和“their work”；Tom的活动填“fresh vegetables”，“我”的活动填“fed the animals”；“enjoyed the activities very much”表达集体活动的愉悦。
3. 结尾部分：用亮点词汇“came together”填“everyone in our class came together”，评价填“very interesting”；用“can’t wait for”填“the next farm experience”表达对后续活动的期待，符合要求。
【答案】
写作支架填空答案：
1. went to the farm
2. sunny and warm
3. fresh
4. beautiful
5. the farmers
6. their work
7. fresh vegetables
8. fed the animals
9. the activities very much
10. everyone in our class came together
11. very interesting
12. the next farm experience
完整参考范文：
Last Friday after school, my classmates and I went to the farm. The weather was sunny and warm. The air was fresh and the scenery was beautiful.
My best friend Lucy helped the farmers with their work. Tom picked fresh vegetables, and I fed the animals. We all enjoyed the activities very much.
It was a wonderful day! I was quite happy that everyone in our class came together, and it was very interesting.
I can't wait for the next farm experience.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；一般过去时运用；主题词汇运用
【点评】
本文结构清晰，符合写作支架要求，时态正确，用并列连词and衔接内容，运用亮点词汇提升表达，覆盖所有写作要点，行文流畅自然。
【难度系数】
0.7
