主题写作专项 练写作 答案D34
主题词网
优选词汇
种类：
· hurricane
· fire
· nervous
· the heart beats quickly
感受：
· typhoon
· storm
· afraid
· scared
· in fear
· earthquake
· bush fire
· a moment of fear
· flood
· traffic accident
建议：
· calm down
· follow traffic rules
· get out as soon as possible
· find one’s way out
写作实例
请你根据下面的要点写一篇100词左右的报道。
审要点 审词数 审主题 审时态：一般过去时 审人称：第三人称
1.连续两天大雨后，8月17日(星期六)早晨发生了一次山崩(landslide)；
2.那天有个女孩与她母亲在家，父亲在下午到家，并叫她们……；
3.雨大，父亲劝告她们……；
4.这时房子开始……；
5.第二天上午回家时，女孩发现……，到处是……，女孩感到……。




写作支架

智慧智囊
地震（earthquake），又称地动、地振动，是地壳快速释放能量过程中造成的振动，在此期间会产生地震波。地球上板块与板块之间相互挤压碰撞，造成板块边沿及板块内部产生错动和破裂，是引起地震的主要原因。

优秀范文
There was a landslide on Saturday, 17th August. After two days of heavy rain, the landslide happened in the morning.
A girl was at home with her mum that day. Her dad came home in the afternoon and told them to leave the house. Because of the heavy rain, he advised them to bring umbrellas. They got out quickly. Suddenly, the building started shaking. They were frightened and ran away quickly. The weather was really terrible.
The following morning, they went back home. The girl found there was no house at all. There were only pieces of glass and bricks everywhere. The girl felt very sad.
亮点评析
①使用了heavy rain(大雨)说明了山崩前的状况,更具有说服力。
②短语be frightened和run away是高级表达,运用到书面表达中可以提升文章的档次。
③结尾处使用了宾语从句,描述了山崩后的情景,使文章表达更高级。