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品读范文，拆解核心技巧
请根据下面表格里的提示内容，以“My plan for the new life”为题，给你们学校英语角写一篇英语短文，介绍你的减肥计划。
| 锻炼计划 | 每天跑步，经常踢球 |
| --- | --- |
| 饮食计划 | 图1 合理饮食，少荤多素 |
| 你的期待 | …… |
要求：
1. 词数90左右。
2. 短文应包括所给提示内容，可适当发挥，使文章连贯。
[高分范文]
My plan for the new life
I'm becoming fatter and fatter①. A new life must be on the way. So I plan to do lots of things for the new life.①
I'd like to have a healthy lifestyle. First②, it's good for me to exercise more③ and keep running every day④. I also want to play football with friends
weekends⑤. Second⑥, I hope to eat healthy food⑦ to help me keep fit. I plan to eat less meat and more vegetables⑧. In addition⑨, I need to eat some fruit between meals⑩. Moreover⑪, I'm going to ask someone to keep an eye on me and remind me.
In a word, I'm looking forward to having a healthy new life.⑫
[名师点评]
① 开门见山，主题明确：以自身“越来越胖”的现状引出对新生活的规划，点明文章主题，立意清晰，目标明确，让读者快速理解写作背景与目的。
② 结构清晰，层次分明：以First、Second、In addition、Moreover等逻辑词串联全文，从运动、饮食、监督等多维度展开健康计划，条理清晰，层层递进，展现了完整的规划思路。
③ 内容具体，细节落地：不仅提出“多锻炼、吃健康食物”的目标，还补充了“每天跑步、周末踢足球、少吃肉、多吃蔬菜、两餐间吃水果”等具体行动，让计划真实可执行，避免空泛。
④ 结尾收束，情感饱满：以In a word总结全文，用looking forward to having a healthy new life表达对新生活的期待，呼应开头，收束有力，传递出积极向上的态度。
[素材积累]
储备金句，提升语言质感
[开头句]
1. I have a healthy lifestyle.
2. My lifestyle is unhealthy.
3. Let me tell you about my healthy lifestyle.
[中间句]
1. For breakfast, I usually have bread, eggs and milk.
2. I often eat a big bowl of beef noodles and a banana for lunch.
3. I love fruit and vegetables.
4. I dance for half an hour every day.
[结尾句]
1. I plan to eat more fruit and vegetables and less sugar.
2. I need them to keep healthy.
3. I will exercise more in the future.
4. A healthy lifestyle is very important to everybody.
[名言警句]
1. Life lies in movement. 生命在于运动。
2. The greatest wealth is health. 最大的财富是健康。
3. Eat to live, not live to eat. 吃饭是为了活着，活着不是为了吃饭。
4. Eat and drink regularly, and live regularly. 食饮有节，起居有常。
品读范文，拆解核心技巧
请根据下面表格里的提示内容，以“My plan for the new life”为题，给你们学校英语角写一篇英语短文，介绍你的减肥计划。
| 锻炼计划 | 每天跑步，经常踢球 |
| --- | --- |
| 饮食计划 | 图1 合理饮食，少荤多素 |
| 你的期待 | …… |
要求：
1. 词数90左右。
2. 短文应包括所给提示内容，可适当发挥，使文章连贯。
[高分范文]
My plan for the new life
I'm becoming fatter and fatter①. A new life must be on the way. So I plan to do lots of things for the new life.①
I'd like to have a healthy lifestyle. First②, it's good for me to exercise more③ and keep running every day④. I also want to play football with friends
weekends⑤. Second⑥, I hope to eat healthy food⑦ to help me keep fit. I plan to eat less meat and more vegetables⑧. In addition⑨, I need to eat some fruit between meals⑩. Moreover⑪, I'm going to ask someone to keep an eye on me and remind me.In a word, I'm looking forward to having a healthy new life.⑫
[名师点评]
① 开门见山，主题明确：以自身“越来越胖”的现状引出对新生活的规划，点明文章主题，立意清晰，目标明确，让读者快速理解写作背景与目的。
② 结构清晰，层次分明：以First、Second、In addition、Moreover等逻辑词串联全文，从运动、饮食、监督等多维度展开健康计划，条理清晰，层层递进，展现了完整的规划思路。
③ 内容具体，细节落地：不仅提出“多锻炼、吃健康食物”的目标，还补充了“每天跑步、周末踢足球、少吃肉、多吃蔬菜、两餐间吃水果”等具体行动，让计划真实可执行，避免空泛。
④ 结尾收束，情感饱满：以In a word总结全文，用looking forward to having a healthy new life表达对新生活的期待，呼应开头，收束有力，传递出积极向上的态度。
[素材积累]
储备金句，提升语言质感
[开头句]
1. I have a healthy lifestyle.
2. My lifestyle is unhealthy.
3. Let me tell you about my healthy lifestyle.
[中间句]
1. For breakfast, I usually have bread, eggs and milk.
2. I often eat a big bowl of beef noodles and a banana for lunch.
3. I love fruit and vegetables.
4. I dance for half an hour every day.
[结尾句]
1. I plan to eat more fruit and vegetables and less sugar.
2. I need them to keep healthy.
3. I will exercise more in the future.
4. A healthy lifestyle is very important to everybody.
[名言警句]
1. Life lies in movement. 生命在于运动。
2. The greatest wealth is health. 最大的财富是健康。
3. Eat to live, not live to eat. 吃饭是为了活着，活着不是为了吃饭。
4. Eat and drink regularly, and live regularly. 食饮有节，起居有常。
答案
My plan for the new life
I'm becoming fatter and fatter these days. So I make a careful plan to start my new healthy life.
First, I will do more exercise. I plan to keep running for 20 minutes every day, and I will often play football with my friends at weekends. Second, I will have a healthy diet. I will eat less meat and more vegetables, and stop eating too much sweet junk food.
I hope I can keep fit soon, and I am looking forward to my healthy new life.
I'm becoming fatter and fatter these days. So I make a careful plan to start my new healthy life.
First, I will do more exercise. I plan to keep running for 20 minutes every day, and I will often play football with my friends at weekends. Second, I will have a healthy diet. I will eat less meat and more vegetables, and stop eating too much sweet junk food.
I hope I can keep fit soon, and I am looking forward to my healthy new life.
解析
【分析】本题为英语应用文写作题，要求以“My plan for the new life”为题给学校英语角写短文介绍减肥计划，需包含锻炼、饮食计划及个人期待，词数约90。解题思路：1. 开头点明自身变胖的现状，引出新生活规划的主题；2. 用First、Second等逻辑词分述锻炼（每天跑步、周末踢球）和饮食（少荤多素）的具体计划；3. 结尾表达对健康新生活的期待，使文章连贯完整，符合要求。
【解析】写作遵循“总-分-总”结构：开头点明变胖现状，引出计划；中间分两点：First写锻炼计划（每天跑步、周末和朋友踢足球），Second写饮食计划（少吃肉多吃蔬菜，补充不吃垃圾食品的细节）；结尾表达期待，控制词数在90左右，确保内容完整、逻辑清晰。
【答案】My plan for the new life
I'm becoming fatter and fatter these days. So I make a careful plan to start my new healthy life.
First, I will do more exercise. I plan to keep running for 20 minutes every day, and I will often play football with my friends at weekends. Second, I will have a healthy diet. I will eat less meat and more vegetables, and stop eating too much sweet junk food.
I hope I can keep fit soon, and I am looking forward to my healthy new life.
【知识点】英语应用文写作、健康话题英语表达
【点评】本文符合题目要求，结构清晰，分点明确，涵盖所有提示内容，补充了合理细节，语言简洁流畅，词数合适，能清晰传达减肥计划，传递积极态度，适配英语角短文的场景要求。
【难度系数】0.3
【解析】写作遵循“总-分-总”结构：开头点明变胖现状，引出计划；中间分两点：First写锻炼计划（每天跑步、周末和朋友踢足球），Second写饮食计划（少吃肉多吃蔬菜，补充不吃垃圾食品的细节）；结尾表达期待，控制词数在90左右，确保内容完整、逻辑清晰。
【答案】My plan for the new life
I'm becoming fatter and fatter these days. So I make a careful plan to start my new healthy life.
First, I will do more exercise. I plan to keep running for 20 minutes every day, and I will often play football with my friends at weekends. Second, I will have a healthy diet. I will eat less meat and more vegetables, and stop eating too much sweet junk food.
I hope I can keep fit soon, and I am looking forward to my healthy new life.
【知识点】英语应用文写作、健康话题英语表达
【点评】本文符合题目要求，结构清晰，分点明确，涵盖所有提示内容，补充了合理细节，语言简洁流畅，词数合适，能清晰传达减肥计划，传递积极态度，适配英语角短文的场景要求。
【难度系数】0.3
