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八、书面表达18分
假设你叫李华,近期你的学校举行了一次名为“The Changes”的征文活动,你打算参加并列出以下写作提纲。
要求:1. 内容须包含所有要点,语句通顺,意思连贯;2. 词数不少于80;3. 展开的内容应合理想象,用一句话补充完整。
The Changes
假设你叫李华,近期你的学校举行了一次名为“The Changes”的征文活动,你打算参加并列出以下写作提纲。
要求:1. 内容须包含所有要点,语句通顺,意思连贯;2. 词数不少于80;3. 展开的内容应合理想象,用一句话补充完整。
The Changes
There are many changes in my life. For example, the factory used to dump waste into the river, but now the government has taken action to improve the environment.
Besides, some people lived in low and shabby houses before, but now they have moved into tall and modern apartments instead. I notice that many families have cars now but they only had bicycles some years ago.
On the other hand, I have changed a lot too. I went to many places of interest and took many photos. I like reading more than before. Reading helps me relax myself after class.
To conclude, many good changes have taken place both in my life and upon myself.
I believe the coming future will be brighter and brighter!
答案
One possible version:
The Changes
There are many changes in my life. For example, the
factory used to dump waste into the river, but now the
government has taken action to improve the environment.
Besides, some people lived in low and shabby houses before,
but now they have moved into tall and modern apartments
instead. I notice that many families have cars now but they
only had bicycles some years ago.
On the other hand, I have changed a lot too. I went to
many places of interest and took many photos. I like reading
more than before. Reading helps me relax myself after class.
To conclude, many good changes have taken place both in
my life and upon myself. I believe the coming future will be
brighter and brighter!
→"比较级+and+比较级"结构表示"越来越……",强
调状态持续变化。
思路引导 [总体分析]
①题材:本文是一篇材料作文。②时态:以一般过去时和现
在完成时为主。③提示:写作要点已给出,不要遗漏提示中
的"阅读的益处",适当添加细节,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图,介绍文章主题——生活的改变;第
二步,具体阐述变化的细节,将过去和现在进行对比;第三
步,书写结语,表达对未来的美好期望。
[亮点词汇]
①used to do 过去常常做…… ②take action 采取行动
③on the other hand 另一方面 ④places of interest 名胜古迹
[高分句型]
①There are many changes in my life. (there be句型)
②I believe the coming future will be brighter and brighter!
(宾语从句省略了that)
The Changes
There are many changes in my life. For example, the
factory used to dump waste into the river, but now the
government has taken action to improve the environment.
Besides, some people lived in low and shabby houses before,
but now they have moved into tall and modern apartments
instead. I notice that many families have cars now but they
only had bicycles some years ago.
On the other hand, I have changed a lot too. I went to
many places of interest and took many photos. I like reading
more than before. Reading helps me relax myself after class.
To conclude, many good changes have taken place both in
my life and upon myself. I believe the coming future will be
brighter and brighter!
→"比较级+and+比较级"结构表示"越来越……",强
调状态持续变化。
思路引导 [总体分析]
①题材:本文是一篇材料作文。②时态:以一般过去时和现
在完成时为主。③提示:写作要点已给出,不要遗漏提示中
的"阅读的益处",适当添加细节,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图,介绍文章主题——生活的改变;第
二步,具体阐述变化的细节,将过去和现在进行对比;第三
步,书写结语,表达对未来的美好期望。
[亮点词汇]
①used to do 过去常常做…… ②take action 采取行动
③on the other hand 另一方面 ④places of interest 名胜古迹
[高分句型]
①There are many changes in my life. (there be句型)
②I believe the coming future will be brighter and brighter!
(宾语从句省略了that)
解析
【分析】
这是一篇材料类英语书面表达题，主题为“The Changes”。解题思路：首先明确需涵盖“生活中的变化”和“自己的变化”所有给定要点，补充合理内容（如阅读的益处）；其次确定时态：描述过去情况用一般过去时，描述现在情况用一般现在时/现在完成时；最后按“开头点题→阐述生活变化→阐述自身变化→结尾总结展望”的结构写作，保证语句通顺、意思连贯，词数达标。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 开头：用“There are many changes in my life.”点明主题，引出下文内容；
2. 阐述生活变化：
对应要点1：用“used to do”结构，写工厂过去向河里倾倒垃圾，现在政府采取措施改善环境；
对应要点2：对比过去住低矮破旧房屋，现在搬进高大现代化公寓；
对应要点3：对比过去只有自行车，现在很多家庭拥有轿车；
3. 阐述自身变化：
对应要点1：写去过许多名胜古迹，拍了很多照片；
对应要点2：写比以前更喜爱阅读；
补充要点：说明阅读的益处，如“Reading helps me relax myself after class.”；
4. 结尾：总结生活和自身的变化，用“I believe the coming future will be brighter and brighter!”展望未来，呼应主题。
写作中运用亮点词汇（used to do、take action、places of interest等）和高分句型（there be句型、宾语从句等），符合题目要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
The Changes
There are many changes in my life. For example, the factory used to dump waste into the river, but now the government has taken action to improve the environment. Besides, some people lived in low and shabby houses before, but now they have moved into tall and modern apartments instead. I notice that many families have cars now but they only had bicycles some years ago.
On the other hand, I have changed a lot too. I went to many places of interest and took many photos. I like reading more than before. Reading helps me relax myself after class.
To conclude, many good changes have taken place both in my life and upon myself. I believe the coming future will be brighter and brighter!
【知识点】
英语书面表达，材料作文，时态运用
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，全面覆盖所有写作要点，结构清晰、逻辑连贯；运用了丰富的词汇和句型，补充了合理的阅读益处，符合词数要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
这是一篇材料类英语书面表达题，主题为“The Changes”。解题思路：首先明确需涵盖“生活中的变化”和“自己的变化”所有给定要点，补充合理内容（如阅读的益处）；其次确定时态：描述过去情况用一般过去时，描述现在情况用一般现在时/现在完成时；最后按“开头点题→阐述生活变化→阐述自身变化→结尾总结展望”的结构写作，保证语句通顺、意思连贯，词数达标。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 开头：用“There are many changes in my life.”点明主题，引出下文内容；
2. 阐述生活变化：
对应要点1：用“used to do”结构，写工厂过去向河里倾倒垃圾，现在政府采取措施改善环境；
对应要点2：对比过去住低矮破旧房屋，现在搬进高大现代化公寓；
对应要点3：对比过去只有自行车，现在很多家庭拥有轿车；
3. 阐述自身变化：
对应要点1：写去过许多名胜古迹，拍了很多照片；
对应要点2：写比以前更喜爱阅读；
补充要点：说明阅读的益处，如“Reading helps me relax myself after class.”；
4. 结尾：总结生活和自身的变化，用“I believe the coming future will be brighter and brighter!”展望未来，呼应主题。
写作中运用亮点词汇（used to do、take action、places of interest等）和高分句型（there be句型、宾语从句等），符合题目要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
The Changes
There are many changes in my life. For example, the factory used to dump waste into the river, but now the government has taken action to improve the environment. Besides, some people lived in low and shabby houses before, but now they have moved into tall and modern apartments instead. I notice that many families have cars now but they only had bicycles some years ago.
On the other hand, I have changed a lot too. I went to many places of interest and took many photos. I like reading more than before. Reading helps me relax myself after class.
To conclude, many good changes have taken place both in my life and upon myself. I believe the coming future will be brighter and brighter!
【知识点】
英语书面表达，材料作文，时态运用
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，全面覆盖所有写作要点，结构清晰、逻辑连贯；运用了丰富的词汇和句型，补充了合理的阅读益处，符合词数要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
