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假如你校正在举行英文写作大赛，你计划参加比赛。以下是大赛的一道试题，请你根据所给提示写一篇英语作文参赛。词数80~100（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
提示词：environment 环境；sunlight；rainwater 雨水
In the future, the schools will be different from those nowadays.
[审题指导]1.体裁：说明文
2.话题：从不同的方面描写将来学校的概况
3.人称：第三人称 4.时态：以一般将来时为主
[思路点拨]
[精彩范文]
In the future, the schools will be different from those nowadays.
There will be many green buildings in the schools. They will be friendly to the environment because they use sunlight and rainwater. Also, the schools will give different lessons to students. The students will choose some lessons according to their own needs and interests. What’s more, the schools will make learning more interesting and easier. For example, during a space class, students will feel like they are going
around space with the help of robots.
All in all, the schools in the future will make education more interesting and enjoyable.
高分点评：1. 写作思路清晰，采用“总—分—总”的结构； 2. be different from, with the help of, all in all等短语的运用，展示了作者扎实的基本功； 3. 文中原因状语从句、比较级等的运用成为文章的加分点。
84 英语 八上R
假如你校正在举行英文写作大赛，你计划参加比赛。以下是大赛的一道试题，请你根据所给提示写一篇英语作文参赛。词数80~100（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
提示词：environment 环境；sunlight；rainwater 雨水
In the future, the schools will be different from those nowadays.
[审题指导]1.体裁：说明文
2.话题：从不同的方面描写将来学校的概况
3.人称：第三人称 4.时态：以一般将来时为主
[思路点拨]
[精彩范文]
In the future, the schools will be different from those nowadays.
There will be many green buildings in the schools. They will be friendly to the environment because they use sunlight and rainwater. Also, the schools will give different lessons to students. The students will choose some lessons according to their own needs and interests. What’s more, the schools will make learning more interesting and easier. For example, during a space class, students will feel like they are going
around space with the help of robots.
All in all, the schools in the future will make education more interesting and enjoyable.
高分点评：1. 写作思路清晰，采用“总—分—总”的结构； 2. be different from, with the help of, all in all等短语的运用，展示了作者扎实的基本功； 3. 文中原因状语从句、比较级等的运用成为文章的加分点。
84 英语 八上R
答案
In the future, the schools will be different from those nowadays.
There will be many green buildings in the schools. They will be friendly to the environment because they use sunlight and rainwater to reduce pollution. Also, students can choose different lessons according to their own needs and interests. What's more, with the help of new technology, learning will be more interesting and easier. For example, we will get vivid 3D pictures when having biology classes.
All in all, the schools in the future will make education more interesting and enjoyable.
There will be many green buildings in the schools. They will be friendly to the environment because they use sunlight and rainwater to reduce pollution. Also, students can choose different lessons according to their own needs and interests. What's more, with the help of new technology, learning will be more interesting and easier. For example, we will get vivid 3D pictures when having biology classes.
All in all, the schools in the future will make education more interesting and enjoyable.
解析
本题为说明文写作题，要求以一般将来时为主、使用第三人称，从多个方面介绍未来学校的概况，词数要求80~100，已给出的开头不计入总词数。写作采用"总-分-总"的结构：开篇已给出，正文可分别从校园建筑、课程设置、学习条件三个维度展开，需用到提示词environment、sunlight、rainwater，体现未来学校环保、人性化的特点，可适当使用原因状语从句、形容词比较级提升表达质量，结尾总结升华，表达对未来教育的正向期待。
实战演练
假设你校英语俱乐部下周的交流主题是My life in 2050。你的梦想是成为一名老师，那你的未来生活将会是什么样呢？请你根据以下提示写一篇发言稿，与俱乐部成员分享。要求：词数80~100。
Hello, everyone! What will my life be like in 2050? Let me tell you my predictions.
All in all, I believe my future life will be more relaxing and exciting.
That’s all. Thanks for listening.
假设你校英语俱乐部下周的交流主题是My life in 2050。你的梦想是成为一名老师，那你的未来生活将会是什么样呢？请你根据以下提示写一篇发言稿，与俱乐部成员分享。要求：词数80~100。
Hello, everyone! What will my life be like in 2050? Let me tell you my predictions.
I will work as a teacher, but I won't go to school. Instead, I will work from home and give lessons to my students on the Internet.
The robot will play an important role in my daily life.
It will take my place to do all the housework such as cleaning, cooking and washing.
Thanks to the robot helper, I'll have more free time to take holidays in my flying car.
When there is heavy traffic on the roads, it can fly at once.
It will save more time and make the ride more enjoyable.
All in all, I believe my future life will be more relaxing and exciting.
That’s all. Thanks for listening.
答案
Hello, everyone! What will my life be like in 2050? Let me tell you my predictions.
I will work as a teacher, but I won't go to school. Instead, I will work from home and give lessons to my students on the Internet.
The robot will play an important role in my daily life. It will take my place to do all the housework such as cleaning, cooking and washing.
Thanks to the robot helper, I'll have more free time to take holidays in my flying car. When there is heavy traffic on the roads, it can fly at once. It will save more time and make the ride more enjoyable.
All in all, I believe my future life will be more relaxing and exciting.
That's all. Thanks for listening.
【思路分析】1. 首段点题——用“What will my life be like in 2050?”引出下文；2. 第二、三、四段具体介绍了我未来的工作，机器人帮手以及未来旅行的方式；3. 第五段总结我对未来生活的期待；4. 最后写发言稿致谢词。
I will work as a teacher, but I won't go to school. Instead, I will work from home and give lessons to my students on the Internet.
The robot will play an important role in my daily life. It will take my place to do all the housework such as cleaning, cooking and washing.
Thanks to the robot helper, I'll have more free time to take holidays in my flying car. When there is heavy traffic on the roads, it can fly at once. It will save more time and make the ride more enjoyable.
All in all, I believe my future life will be more relaxing and exciting.
That's all. Thanks for listening.
【思路分析】1. 首段点题——用“What will my life be like in 2050?”引出下文；2. 第二、三、四段具体介绍了我未来的工作，机器人帮手以及未来旅行的方式；3. 第五段总结我对未来生活的期待；4. 最后写发言稿致谢词。
