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初级范文
The Mid-Autumn Festival is one of the most important traditional Chinese festivals. It always takes place on the 15th of August of the Chinese lunar calendar. The Mid-Autumn Festival is just in the middle of autumn, so it is called “Mid-Autumn”.
①The Mid-Autumn Festival is a special day. Before that day, we usually go shopping with our parents. ②There are a lot of moon cakes in the shop. On that day, all the family eat moon cakes, enjoy the moon, and tell stories together. My mother likes the festival. She makes delicious moon cakes. ③My father also likes the festival and he sings the songs about the moon well.
We all have a good time on the Mid-Autumn Festival. We are all very busy, but we are so happy.
高分范文
The Mid-Autumn Festival is one of the most important traditional Chinese festivals. It always takes place on the 15th of August of the Chinese lunar calendar. The Mid-Autumn Festival is just in the middle of autumn, so it is called “Mid-Autumn”.
①The Mid-Autumn Festival is a special day
We all have a good time on the Mid-Autumn Festival. We are all very busy, but we are so happy.
名师指导:
一、高分范文中,①使用 when 引导的定语从句及短语 get together 升格,显示了作者深厚的英语功底;②使用短语 many different kinds of 升格,丰富了表达方式;③使用 not only… but also… 升格,丰富了文章的句式,同时表达了作者的爸爸对中秋节的喜爱程度。
二、两篇范文都正确使用了一般现在时介绍中秋节的基本信息,并讲述了自己的父母对这个节日的喜欢,文章条理清晰,包含了所有的要点。
初级范文
The Mid-Autumn Festival is one of the most important traditional Chinese festivals. It always takes place on the 15th of August of the Chinese lunar calendar. The Mid-Autumn Festival is just in the middle of autumn, so it is called “Mid-Autumn”.
①The Mid-Autumn Festival is a special day. Before that day, we usually go shopping with our parents. ②There are a lot of moon cakes in the shop. On that day, all the family eat moon cakes, enjoy the moon, and tell stories together. My mother likes the festival. She makes delicious moon cakes. ③My father also likes the festival and he sings the songs about the moon well.
We all have a good time on the Mid-Autumn Festival. We are all very busy, but we are so happy.
高分范文
The Mid-Autumn Festival is one of the most important traditional Chinese festivals. It always takes place on the 15th of August of the Chinese lunar calendar. The Mid-Autumn Festival is just in the middle of autumn, so it is called “Mid-Autumn”.
①The Mid-Autumn Festival is a special day
when all the family get together
.（使用 when 引导的定语从句及短语 get together 升格）Before that day, we usually go shopping with our parents. ②There are many different kinds of moon cakes in the shop. On that day, all the family eat moon cakes, enjoy the moon, and tell stories together. My mother likes the festival. She makes delicious moon cakes. ③My father not only likes the festival but also sings the songs about the moon well
.（使用 not only… but also… 升格）We all have a good time on the Mid-Autumn Festival. We are all very busy, but we are so happy.
名师指导:
一、高分范文中,①使用 when 引导的定语从句及短语 get together 升格,显示了作者深厚的英语功底;②使用短语 many different kinds of 升格,丰富了表达方式;③使用 not only… but also… 升格,丰富了文章的句式,同时表达了作者的爸爸对中秋节的喜爱程度。
二、两篇范文都正确使用了一般现在时介绍中秋节的基本信息,并讲述了自己的父母对这个节日的喜欢,文章条理清晰,包含了所有的要点。
答案
① when all the family get together
③ not only likes the festival but also sings the songs about the moon well
③ not only likes the festival but also sings the songs about the moon well
解析
【分析】首先明确题目要求：①处需用when引导的定语从句及短语get together完善句子，先行词是the Mid-Autumn Festival，定语从句要体现“家人团聚”的含义；③处需用not only...but also...结构连接两个并列的谓语内容，结合前文父亲对节日的喜爱及原文中父亲唱歌的内容补充句子。
【解析】①处：先行词为表时间的名词the Mid-Autumn Festival，用when引导定语从句，结合短语get together，填入when all the family get together；③处：用not only连接“喜欢节日”，but also连接“唱关于月亮的歌很好”，填入not only likes the festival but also sings the songs about the moon well。
【答案】① when all the family get together；③ not only likes the festival but also sings the songs about the moon well
【知识点】英语定语从句；并列结构；节日表达
【点评】本题考察英语句式升格，要求运用指定语法结构完善句子，提升表达丰富性，需掌握定语从句引导词及并列结构的用法。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】①处：先行词为表时间的名词the Mid-Autumn Festival，用when引导定语从句，结合短语get together，填入when all the family get together；③处：用not only连接“喜欢节日”，but also连接“唱关于月亮的歌很好”，填入not only likes the festival but also sings the songs about the moon well。
【答案】① when all the family get together；③ not only likes the festival but also sings the songs about the moon well
【知识点】英语定语从句；并列结构；节日表达
【点评】本题考察英语句式升格，要求运用指定语法结构完善句子，提升表达丰富性，需掌握定语从句引导词及并列结构的用法。
【难度系数】0.6
小试身手
节日是世界文化的重要组成部分，不同的国家有着不同的节日文化。假如你是李华，你参加了学校正在开展的“向世界展示中华传统文化”的主题活动，你打算向你的英国笔友 Tom 介绍中国的传统节日——元宵节。请你根据图示内容，用英语给 Tom 写一封电子邮件。
参考词汇：light 点亮；the first lunar month 正月；lantern riddles 灯谜
要求:1. 内容必须包括所有图示要点，可以适当发挥，补充细节；
2. 词数 80 左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
3. 文中不得出现真实的人名、地点和校名。
书写区域 Good writing makes your article better.
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to tell you something about one of our traditional festivals—the Lantern Festival.
I hope you can come to China and have a happy Lantern Festival with us.
Love,
Li Hua
(请把作文写到自己的练习本上吧!)
节日是世界文化的重要组成部分，不同的国家有着不同的节日文化。假如你是李华，你参加了学校正在开展的“向世界展示中华传统文化”的主题活动，你打算向你的英国笔友 Tom 介绍中国的传统节日——元宵节。请你根据图示内容，用英语给 Tom 写一封电子邮件。
参考词汇：light 点亮；the first lunar month 正月；lantern riddles 灯谜
要求:1. 内容必须包括所有图示要点，可以适当发挥，补充细节；
2. 词数 80 左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
3. 文中不得出现真实的人名、地点和校名。
书写区域 Good writing makes your article better.
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to tell you something about one of our traditional festivals—the Lantern Festival.
I hope you can come to China and have a happy Lantern Festival with us.
Love,
Li Hua
(请把作文写到自己的练习本上吧!)
答案
写作指导与评价
|步骤|要点|自评
是(√)否(×)|他评|
| ---- | ---- | ---- | ---- |
|审|使用了一般现在时| | |
|审|使用了第三人称| | |
|审|合理划分了段落| | |
|润|用到了介绍元宵节的好词好句,如:
1. get together
2. many different kinds of
3. at the same time
4. enjoy doing sth
…| | |
|查|包含了提示中的全部要点| | |
|查|在拼写、语法、标点方面都正确| | |
|查|达到了词数要求| | |
|查|书写美观、书面整洁| | |
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to tell you something about one of our traditional festivals—the Lantern Festival. It is an important festival in China. It usually comes on the 15th day of the first lunar month.
On this day, most families light lanterns and get together to celebrate the festival. During the festival, one of the most interesting activities is enjoying the lanterns. There are many different kinds of colourful lanterns, and some can even play music. At the same time, people also enjoy guessing lantern riddles. We can get some presents and learn something interesting from them.
Tangyuan are a special food on this day. They are delicious rice balls with different fillings inside. We hope everything goes well after eating tangyuan. All the families have a good time on this day.
I hope you can come to China and have a happy Lantern Festival with us.
Love,
Li Hua
|步骤|要点|自评
是(√)否(×)|他评|
| ---- | ---- | ---- | ---- |
|审|使用了一般现在时| | |
|审|使用了第三人称| | |
|审|合理划分了段落| | |
|润|用到了介绍元宵节的好词好句,如:
1. get together
2. many different kinds of
3. at the same time
4. enjoy doing sth
…| | |
|查|包含了提示中的全部要点| | |
|查|在拼写、语法、标点方面都正确| | |
|查|达到了词数要求| | |
|查|书写美观、书面整洁| | |
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to tell you something about one of our traditional festivals—the Lantern Festival. It is an important festival in China. It usually comes on the 15th day of the first lunar month.
On this day, most families light lanterns and get together to celebrate the festival. During the festival, one of the most interesting activities is enjoying the lanterns. There are many different kinds of colourful lanterns, and some can even play music. At the same time, people also enjoy guessing lantern riddles. We can get some presents and learn something interesting from them.
Tangyuan are a special food on this day. They are delicious rice balls with different fillings inside. We hope everything goes well after eating tangyuan. All the families have a good time on this day.
I hope you can come to China and have a happy Lantern Festival with us.
Love,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
本题为英语书信写作题，要求向英国笔友Tom介绍中国传统节日元宵节，需覆盖图示的时间、食物、活动、感受四个要点。解题思路：1. 明确书信格式，开头结尾已给定，中间围绕四个要点组织内容；2. 对应图示确定具体表达：时间为正月十五，食物是汤圆，活动包括点灯、赏灯、猜灯谜，感受是开心团圆；3. 运用参考词汇，用一般现在时，适当补充细节，确保词数达标，无真实信息。
【解析】
写作步骤：① 确定时态：介绍节日用一般现在时；② 整合图示要点：点明元宵节在正月十五，介绍汤圆的特点，列举点灯、赏灯、猜灯谜等活动，说明大家的开心感受；③ 运用参考词汇（light、lantern riddles等），补充合理细节（如不同种类的花灯），确保涵盖所有图示要点，词数约80；④ 检查语法、拼写，确保书信格式正确，无错误。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to tell you something about one of our traditional festivals—the Lantern Festival. It is an important festival in China. It usually comes on the 15th day of the first lunar month.
On this day, most families light lanterns and get together to celebrate the festival. During the festival, one of the most interesting activities is enjoying the lanterns. There are many different kinds of colourful lanterns, and some can even play music. At the same time, people also enjoy guessing lantern riddles. We can get some presents and learn something interesting from them.
Tangyuan are a special food on this day. They are delicious rice balls with different fillings inside. We hope everything goes well after eating tangyuan. All the families have a good time on this day.
I hope you can come to China and have a happy Lantern Festival with us.
Love,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语书信写作、节日话题表达、一般现在时运用
【点评】
本题结合中国传统文化传播主题，考查学生的英语应用文写作能力，要求学生整合图示信息完成写作，既锻炼语言运用能力，又传递了中华传统文化，符合主题活动要求。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语书信写作题，要求向英国笔友Tom介绍中国传统节日元宵节，需覆盖图示的时间、食物、活动、感受四个要点。解题思路：1. 明确书信格式，开头结尾已给定，中间围绕四个要点组织内容；2. 对应图示确定具体表达：时间为正月十五，食物是汤圆，活动包括点灯、赏灯、猜灯谜，感受是开心团圆；3. 运用参考词汇，用一般现在时，适当补充细节，确保词数达标，无真实信息。
【解析】
写作步骤：① 确定时态：介绍节日用一般现在时；② 整合图示要点：点明元宵节在正月十五，介绍汤圆的特点，列举点灯、赏灯、猜灯谜等活动，说明大家的开心感受；③ 运用参考词汇（light、lantern riddles等），补充合理细节（如不同种类的花灯），确保涵盖所有图示要点，词数约80；④ 检查语法、拼写，确保书信格式正确，无错误。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to tell you something about one of our traditional festivals—the Lantern Festival. It is an important festival in China. It usually comes on the 15th day of the first lunar month.
On this day, most families light lanterns and get together to celebrate the festival. During the festival, one of the most interesting activities is enjoying the lanterns. There are many different kinds of colourful lanterns, and some can even play music. At the same time, people also enjoy guessing lantern riddles. We can get some presents and learn something interesting from them.
Tangyuan are a special food on this day. They are delicious rice balls with different fillings inside. We hope everything goes well after eating tangyuan. All the families have a good time on this day.
I hope you can come to China and have a happy Lantern Festival with us.
Love,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语书信写作、节日话题表达、一般现在时运用
【点评】
本题结合中国传统文化传播主题，考查学生的英语应用文写作能力，要求学生整合图示信息完成写作，既锻炼语言运用能力，又传递了中华传统文化，符合主题活动要求。
【难度系数】
0.5
