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七、书面表达(满分 25 分)
请你根据下表中的提示，以“My dream home in the dream neighbourhood”为题，谈谈自己理想社区中的梦想家园。
要求：1.短文不少于 90 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数；
2.内容必须包括表格中的所有要点，可适当发挥。
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors.
请你根据下表中的提示，以“My dream home in the dream neighbourhood”为题，谈谈自己理想社区中的梦想家园。
要求：1.短文不少于 90 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数；
2.内容必须包括表格中的所有要点，可适当发挥。
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors.
答案
One possible version:
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors. There is a beautiful garden with different kinds of flowers. There are many rooms and a big balcony in it. I can look out at the hill and trees on the balcony.
My dream home is in a very big neighbourhood and the neighbours are kind to each other. There are many volunteers in my neighbourhood. Some of them are doctors. They can take good care of the sick. If there is something wrong with our things, the engineers here can help us fix them. When we have problems with our study, the college students will help us. They often help the old clean their houses and do some shopping.
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors. There is a beautiful garden with different kinds of flowers. There are many rooms and a big balcony in it. I can look out at the hill and trees on the balcony.
My dream home is in a very big neighbourhood and the neighbours are kind to each other. There are many volunteers in my neighbourhood. Some of them are doctors. They can take good care of the sick. If there is something wrong with our things, the engineers here can help us fix them. When we have problems with our study, the college students will help us. They often help the old clean their houses and do some shopping.
解析
【分析】
本题为英语书面表达题，要求以“My dream home in the dream neighbourhood”为题，结合表格中的社区情况、周围环境、房子概况三个核心要点写作。解题思路：1. 衔接已给开头，先描述房子的具体细节（两层、花园、多个房间、大阳台）；2. 结合“小山脚下”的周围环境，补充阳台的视野内容；3. 详细阐述社区情况，覆盖邻居友善、病有人医、坏有人修、老有人问、学有人帮等要点，适当发挥细节使内容连贯，满足不少于90词的要求。
【解析】
1. 衔接开头，描述房子：先写带有各类花卉的花园，再说明多个房间和大阳台，结合小山脚下的环境，补充在阳台能看到山和树木的内容；2. 接着介绍社区：说明社区很大、邻居友善，分别介绍医生志愿者照顾病人、工程师修理物品、大学生帮助学习和老人，完整覆盖表格要点，适当补充细节让文章流畅，达到词数要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors. There is a beautiful garden with different kinds of flowers. There are many rooms and a big balcony in it. I can look out at the hill and trees on the balcony.
My dream home is in a very big neighbourhood and the neighbours are kind to each other. There are many volunteers in my neighbourhood. Some of them are doctors. They can take good care of the sick. If there is something wrong with our things, the engineers here can help us fix them. When we have problems with our study, the college students will help us. They often help the old clean their houses and do some shopping.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、社区话题写作
【点评】
该作文完整覆盖表格所有要点，衔接自然，适当补充了志愿者帮助的具体细节，符合词数要求，语言流畅，符合初中英语书面表达的评分标准。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语书面表达题，要求以“My dream home in the dream neighbourhood”为题，结合表格中的社区情况、周围环境、房子概况三个核心要点写作。解题思路：1. 衔接已给开头，先描述房子的具体细节（两层、花园、多个房间、大阳台）；2. 结合“小山脚下”的周围环境，补充阳台的视野内容；3. 详细阐述社区情况，覆盖邻居友善、病有人医、坏有人修、老有人问、学有人帮等要点，适当发挥细节使内容连贯，满足不少于90词的要求。
【解析】
1. 衔接开头，描述房子：先写带有各类花卉的花园，再说明多个房间和大阳台，结合小山脚下的环境，补充在阳台能看到山和树木的内容；2. 接着介绍社区：说明社区很大、邻居友善，分别介绍医生志愿者照顾病人、工程师修理物品、大学生帮助学习和老人，完整覆盖表格要点，适当补充细节让文章流畅，达到词数要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors. There is a beautiful garden with different kinds of flowers. There are many rooms and a big balcony in it. I can look out at the hill and trees on the balcony.
My dream home is in a very big neighbourhood and the neighbours are kind to each other. There are many volunteers in my neighbourhood. Some of them are doctors. They can take good care of the sick. If there is something wrong with our things, the engineers here can help us fix them. When we have problems with our study, the college students will help us. They often help the old clean their houses and do some shopping.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、社区话题写作
【点评】
该作文完整覆盖表格所有要点，衔接自然，适当补充了志愿者帮助的具体细节，符合词数要求，语言流畅，符合初中英语书面表达的评分标准。
【难度系数】
0.5
