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音乐能够丰富学生的生活,也能够帮助学生调节情绪,减轻学习压力。在下周的英语社团课上,老师计划请同学们谈谈自己最喜欢的音乐。请你根据写作要求,结合自身实际,以“My Favourite Music”为题,用英语写一篇短文,陈述你的理由,准备在英语社团活动中发言。
写作要求:词数80-100(开头已给出,不计入总词数)。
My Favourite Music
There are many different kinds of music in the world.
审题指导:体裁:发言稿 时态:一般现在时 人称:第一人称和第三人称
写作框架:

64 英语 九年级 上册 译林版
优秀范文:

亮点词块
①wash away 冲走
②cheer sb up 使某人振奋
③right away 立刻
④more than 不仅仅
⑤fills ... with... 用……把……填满
高分句子
⑥First, after a whole day of busy study, listening to my favourite pop song always helps me relax quickly and wash away all my learning stress.(动名词作主语)
首先,在一整天忙碌的学习之后,听我最喜欢的流行歌曲总能帮我很快放松,消除我所有的学习压力。
音乐能够丰富学生的生活,也能够帮助学生调节情绪,减轻学习压力。在下周的英语社团课上,老师计划请同学们谈谈自己最喜欢的音乐。请你根据写作要求,结合自身实际,以“My Favourite Music”为题,用英语写一篇短文,陈述你的理由,准备在英语社团活动中发言。
写作要求:词数80-100(开头已给出,不计入总词数)。
My Favourite Music
There are many different kinds of music in the world.
审题指导:体裁:发言稿 时态:一般现在时 人称:第一人称和第三人称
写作框架:
64 英语 九年级 上册 译林版
优秀范文:
亮点词块
①wash away 冲走
②cheer sb up 使某人振奋
③right away 立刻
④more than 不仅仅
⑤fills ... with... 用……把……填满
高分句子
⑥First, after a whole day of busy study, listening to my favourite pop song always helps me relax quickly and wash away all my learning stress.(动名词作主语)
首先,在一整天忙碌的学习之后,听我最喜欢的流行歌曲总能帮我很快放松,消除我所有的学习压力。
答案
My favourite is pop music.
First, after a whole day of busy study, listening to my favourite pop song always helps me relax quickly and wash away all my learning stress. Second, when I feel upset, some pop songs can cheer me up right away and get me back on track. Also, I can easily sing along with the simple lyrics, which makes me feel happy.
Pop music is far more than just entertainment to me. It has become an important part of my daily life, and it always fills my days with energy and warmth.
First, after a whole day of busy study, listening to my favourite pop song always helps me relax quickly and wash away all my learning stress. Second, when I feel upset, some pop songs can cheer me up right away and get me back on track. Also, I can easily sing along with the simple lyrics, which makes me feel happy.
Pop music is far more than just entertainment to me. It has become an important part of my daily life, and it always fills my days with energy and warmth.
解析
【分析】
本题为英语发言稿写作任务,要求以“My Favourite Music”为题,结合自身实际陈述喜欢的音乐的理由,词数80-100(开头已给出)。解题思路:1. 确定喜欢的音乐类型(如流行音乐);2. 围绕“放松减压、振奋情绪、易参与”等角度分点阐述理由,运用给定的亮点词块(如wash away、cheer sb up等)和高分句式(动名词作主语);3. 总结该音乐对自己的意义,确保时态为一般现在时,人称以第一人称为主,控制词数符合要求。
【解析】
写作步骤如下:① 确定核心音乐类型:选择流行音乐作为写作对象;② 分点阐述理由:第一点,结合学习场景,用动名词作主语的句式,说明听流行音乐能放松、消除学习压力(运用wash away);第二点,说明沮丧时流行音乐能让人振奋(运用cheer sb up);第三点,提到歌词简单易唱,增加亲切感;③ 总结:点明流行音乐对自己的意义,运用fill...with...等短语,使内容完整,符合发言稿的表达风格,词数达标。
【答案】
My favourite is pop music. First, after a whole day of busy study, listening to my favourite pop song always helps me relax quickly and wash away all my learning stress. Second, when I feel upset, some pop songs can cheer me up right away and get me back on track. Also, I can easily sing along with the simple lyrics, which makes me feel happy. Pop music is far more than just entertainment to me. It has become an important part of my daily life, and it always fills my days with energy and warmth.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作(发言稿)、英语常用短语运用、英语句式结构(动名词作主语)
【点评】
该范文紧扣写作要求,主题明确,理由充分,灵活运用了指定的亮点词块和高分句式,语言流畅自然,符合发言稿的语境,词数达标,很好地完成了写作任务,是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语发言稿写作任务,要求以“My Favourite Music”为题,结合自身实际陈述喜欢的音乐的理由,词数80-100(开头已给出)。解题思路:1. 确定喜欢的音乐类型(如流行音乐);2. 围绕“放松减压、振奋情绪、易参与”等角度分点阐述理由,运用给定的亮点词块(如wash away、cheer sb up等)和高分句式(动名词作主语);3. 总结该音乐对自己的意义,确保时态为一般现在时,人称以第一人称为主,控制词数符合要求。
【解析】
写作步骤如下:① 确定核心音乐类型:选择流行音乐作为写作对象;② 分点阐述理由:第一点,结合学习场景,用动名词作主语的句式,说明听流行音乐能放松、消除学习压力(运用wash away);第二点,说明沮丧时流行音乐能让人振奋(运用cheer sb up);第三点,提到歌词简单易唱,增加亲切感;③ 总结:点明流行音乐对自己的意义,运用fill...with...等短语,使内容完整,符合发言稿的表达风格,词数达标。
【答案】
My favourite is pop music. First, after a whole day of busy study, listening to my favourite pop song always helps me relax quickly and wash away all my learning stress. Second, when I feel upset, some pop songs can cheer me up right away and get me back on track. Also, I can easily sing along with the simple lyrics, which makes me feel happy. Pop music is far more than just entertainment to me. It has become an important part of my daily life, and it always fills my days with energy and warmth.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作(发言稿)、英语常用短语运用、英语句式结构(动名词作主语)
【点评】
该范文紧扣写作要求,主题明确,理由充分,灵活运用了指定的亮点词块和高分句式,语言流畅自然,符合发言稿的语境,词数达标,很好地完成了写作任务,是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
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